Small stories and drabbles that focus on the faithful student and the estranged sister.
Your a naughty pony Luna, a naughty pony indeed. and..."MUZJIKS".... Is this an actual word or did you just make it up? I am now honestly interested..
>>187943187943 Apparently, it's the best word in the game, 29 pts, + 50 pts for using all 7 letters.
It means a Russian peasant.
Haha, yup. Best word in the game. I was looking for something obscure that couldn't pass off as a legitimate word, and that one was perfect.
I just finished a paper on Russian serfdom in the 1600s and went online hoping to never see the word 'muzjik' again.
I love this story. Adorable. Cute. Funny. It isn't outwardly romantic, but feels..sexy.
I looked up the word Muzjiks in the urben dictionary, an i lol'd
TO anyone curious, here it is
1:The best 7 letter word in scrabble, this word racks up 29 points, and receives a bonus of 50 for being 7 letters or longer, that totals to 79 points.
2:a Russian peasant (especially prior to 1917)
Alan: "What does muzjiks mean?"
Jim:"I don't know but I just owned you in scrabble"
This seems promising. Your dialogue style works for this. And I like the way you've portrayed Luna.
I love this one. The first few were okay, but this one is really
Very cute! Tracking
I got scared for a bit there. What with NMM peeking out. I forgot about this story, so I reread the whole thing when you updated. Still cute!
Luna seems to freak out over imagined things like Twilight.
-looks at username- Aww, snap. I love your work. Thank you!
Thank you, much appreciated.
Thank you, thank you.
And that's why they're perfect for each other. Haha.
Just wanted to say thank you to the author.
Thank you, HerroPony, you have no idea how happy and fuzzy on the inside this story makes me.
really great story, a little short and slow to update, but nonetheless great!
There's a lot of Luna in the Ponyfic-o-sphere, and I think each author pulls his or her own interpretation out of the admittedly limited amount of material we have to work with. Which is why, I guess, something usually feels a little "off" about her depictions to me; it's no fault of the author in particular, it's just that there's a lot more holes to fill, and the material used to fill it doesn't always resonate with me. For whatever reason, though, this particular little short comes the closest I've seen to really making me happy, the closest to laying out a character that something about me feels that it knows.
It's a little odd for me to say "nicely done" for something that succeeds mostly in confirming my own inner paradigm, but I will say that this story made me happy, and I'm looking forward to more drabbles if you choose to pen them.
... At first, I mistook the word for "MUDKIPZ" and thought 'In what universe does Mudkipz count in Scrabble?'
Loved the story! But now i'm getting curious about the next part
Any ETA on that?
Thank you, thank you!
The next part is all planned and outlined; should be out some time soon.
TwiLuna that is too cute...
Please write more! This stuff is great.
I love your TwiLuna. You write Twilight very well, and I love your Luna (which I differentiate from Twi only because Twi's so established compared to Luna)!
TwiLuna is best Luna
Luna: "Do you trust me?"
Twilight: "I trust yo-"
Oh, James Cameron, what are you doing here?
"They're stealing from me."
No, they're learning to trust after a very long relationship, your Titanic love story has them trusting each other over a few days.
"Are you insulting my plot?"
Yes. This guy wrote a better love story than Titanic.
awesome, to bad this doesn't update more often! i absolutely love luna's personality, one can really describe her state of mind as that of the waning and waxing lunar phases
I was silently hoping Twilight would jump off the cloud, only to have Luna swiftly catch her. It pretty much gets to the same result, except with more falling off clouds and stuff!
And again, I reread the whole thing because I keep forgeting what story this is! So many tracked stories, some update more often than others... oh well, it's still a blast after the third reading.
TwiLuna is best everything. It is in fact, the greatest thing in the universe ever.
Nicely done. The world needs more of this 'ship.
Lovely chapter, just one thing... you used quite a few words that I was unfamiliar with (not being English born (DRAGON BORN!)), so I dunno... maybe that should be something for you to consider for a future story? That not everyone is English and thus maybe it would be better to use more commonly used words? I dunno... it was just a suggestion :)
He should stick to Aliens, thats what he's good at :D
Couldn't have said it better myself brah!
That it does!
This is surprisingly good for such a short shot.
As they say: cute things come in small packages.
You Sir deserve a Moustache for that* in the purple serpent voice*
So... New chapter? Please?
Re-reading. Probably not for the first time.
Help, it's giving me unmanly warm fuzzy feelings, and I can't stop reading!
If you updated I would celebrate that date for 30 years afterward.
Urrrrk, my feels...
Poor Celestia, ever the proper Princess. Never able to take what she wants.
A downer chapter?
"NO! None of that! Shame on you!"
Dear Faust... Poor Celestia. The feels on that one hit me like a runaway train...
A nice look into Celestia's Mind, though I hope this doesn't mean that she's going try and interfere with Luna and Twilight's relationship later down the line.
Regardless, a good chapter. Hope to see more in the future.
I'll admit I did not expect the chapter from Celestia's point of view, and while its sad, sure, all I can really think is "All's fair in love and war" and "Early Bird Gets the Worm" It was also kinda nice for Celestia to feel jealous, note the emotion and then note the comparison to Luna. Given the first paragraph, it sounds like Celestia's been down the road of outliving lovers before and she tries to cut herself off from her emotions and purposely stays away from getting involved no matter how much she wants too, while Luna doesn't because she hasn't perhaps experienced the losses Celestia has. I eagerly look forward to more installments.
Edit: Are all these stories connected to each other? If so, I think it might retroactively make the Chapter "The Second Best Thing" kinda sad as well...
Is there gonna be a Springer moment later in the story?
I hope I'm invited.
Could we perhaps...
Have a story...
Wherein Celestia gets to be happy?
I'd had my eye on this one, hoping to see more.
Huh? wtf? I thought I tracked this story...and it happens that I missed like 3 chapters?
All the universes that matter.
Each chapter up til now carries a heavy or strong emotion to it. This one felt beautifully tragic to me. Nothing more, nothing less. Yet so perfect.
If you've set out to out to vigorously stir the emotions of your readers... congratulations.
Her Radiant Majesty deserves happiness even more than Luna, who nearly brought about genocide out of pettiness. :|
To give so much, and get nothing in return that she actually -needs- is beyond cruel. Whereas Luna has always had Celestia looking out for her, then Luna tried to -take- from her, and now that Luna's back, she's taking -again- this time just without force and combat.
People can go on and on about poor sad little Luna, but I rarely hear anything about Celestia's far greater hardships outside of the ranks of the Solar Empire. Why does the sinner get to be happy and the martyr never find any peace?
JUSTICE! We call for it! Or... I'ma cry.
Even though I don't like Celestia I can't help but feel a little bad for her, I do understand her "problem" but I'm a rather selfish person and I would never sacrifice anything to obtain my own interests, even if I had to walk on thousands of corpses to achieve my desires (then again I'm not what you would consider a "decent" person).
PS. I forgot where I wanted to go with this...
uuuh okay i don't think i really understand how this got resolved.
Luna worries that she is just second best for Twilight(because she cant have celestia). Then Celestia tells Luna that she is not interested in Twilight.
How does that change that Luna feels like the second best? logically it would just show that twilight really can't have Celestia and then Lunas worry would improve.
Great way to keep on the TwiLuna topic but present it from an entirely different (outside) perspective.
Not sure about this wording: "The walls spoke through these monochromatic windows". If we're talking about stained glass, then they'd be polychromatic. Monochromatic means single-color, which seems out of place here.
celestia deserves happiness as well, isn't there a solution for everyone?
also; we know what happens when an alicorn feels incredibly jealous...hello daymare sun! (not now of course, but it's a possibility)
Yeah, I was a little torn between that too. I took the Celestia/Luna scene in the first episode of season three as a reference and the windows only seemed to have one or two colors.
>>16436111643611 Was the original conflict with Nightmare Moon as black and white as the wicked and petty Luna dooming all the world in a fit of jealousy and being struck down by the mighty and righteous Celestia? We don't know? Did Celestia ever feel remorse for what happened? We don't know. Is there any lingering resentment between the two? We don't know.
What do we know? Celestia and Luna were at one time the best of friends, then the most bitter of enemies, and now all seems to be forgiven. About Luna, we know that she always wanted to be as loved as Celestia, she is sorry for what happened, and she's struggling to putt the past behind her. About Celestia, we don't know much at all.
Considering what drove them apart was one being honored above the other I can't stand stand the Solar Empire and New Luna Republic. Why does one have to be better than the other? Aren't they supposed to be equals?
Well fuck. I don't know where you are gonna take this from here... But I know one thing. There. Are. Not. Enough. Twilestias.
Don't get me wrong. I frickn love a good twiluna. But twilestia was was the ship that confirmed my bronyhood. It also doesn't help that your write a damn good twilestia swag.
Also, my calendar has been marked. Swagday is now official, bitches.
That's ridiculous. She either needs to be a sad immortal, or a super troll. She can't have true happiness, it's like, a law, or something.
Oh, and I am so glad that this story updated!
I swear to god if this doesn't evolve into a main plot device im gonna....
It wasn't a matter of one being honored above the other. It's a matter that Celestia and Luna had opposing, similar duties, and that ponies are diurnal by nature. This is something Luna was supposed to be fine with... instead, showing an infinitely unattractive weakness as a leader, she grew dissatisfied and jealous because ponies didn't cavort about at night worshipping her sky. She dropped the ball as a role model, ruler, and person.
That's pretty fuckin' petty, Jeeves. And I never said Luna is wicked. Word of God has it that her jealousy and teenage-angst level of drama attracted and allowed her to be possessed by the malevolent spirit Nightmare, thus creating Nightmare Moon, who warped Luna's wants in order to bring the death and devastation it wanted. Eternal Night would have been genocide. You tell me what Celestia was supposed to do during their conflict. Kill her own sister to save the world? If she didn't have the Elements, which did not function properly due to being wielded by one pony, then yes... that's what would have had to have happened. Instead she managed to seal Nightmare Moon away, and given that she already knew NMM was returning, means she's been waiting all this time to see her sister again.
Unlike the NLR's unbridled and idiotic hatred of Celestia, considering they go about telling everyone NMM's genocidal machinations were just because she was misunderstood and that Celestia is an evil tyrant who wanted to be rid of her little sister and keep all the power for herself, the Solar Empire actually loves Luna. Yes, she's petty, and overall weak-willed compared to Celestia, but she still ends up being a victim. Not of Celestia, but a victim of her own faults, which means she needs to take time to get past them - rather than condemning her forever.
Which still changes nothing of what I've said. While Luna was dealing with the repercussions of her weakness of character, Celestia was holding the world together and keeping their nation safe, alone as the only alicorn - more alone than anyone can be, being the only one of your kind. The only problem I have with everyone fawning over Luna 24/7 with no love for Celestia is that out of the two of them, only ONE of them was petty enough to nearly destroy the world. With all plausibility and deductive logic in place, Celestia's sacrifices and sorrows know no end... but no, it's Luna who's treated by everyone as some sort of icon or hero by you people.
It's almost as if people can't fathom what Celestia had to deal with. To me, that's just pretty damn sad. So, you can hate all you want - just keep in mind that out of the two camps, only one of us tends to be shallow.
Uh-huh . . .
I want a follow-up to this chapter.
It practically demands a follow-up considering the premise.
Also, I'll be honest, I'm still not sure which, if any, of these stories follow from others.
They don't really follow each other at all. Just random little ideas.
Also in regards to chapter 5, I'm not a big fan of how it treats love.
When you have a story, short stories in particular, you want to focus on the main issue. But this leads to the problem of excluding other things.
(In my experience it's a particular problem with romance.) That sort of exclusion can lead to a kind of one-note character, someone who seems to only have a single dimension to them. In this case we have a Celestia with an undeclared love for Twilight, so when Luna goes after her instead Celestia gets all morose and then that's basically the end of the vignette. It makes her appear very limited, and to be honest we don't know much about Celestia to begin with, so it can be hard to write her.
On the one hand, the story is about romance so it should definitely stay centered there, but on the other a character whose motivations and thoughts are so utterly centered on the romantic can simply be unrelatable. There's just not enough depth to make them seem like an actual person (or pony in this case).
Just my two cents.
>>16466661646666 We don't know that eternal night would be as catastrophic in Equestria as would be in real life, we know almost nothing about Luna's fall from grace, and I'm pretty sure Luna was more lonely than her sister during her banishment. You have to make quite a few assumptions to come to the conclusions that you have. Also, while Luna tends to be the more popular character she is usually portrayed as inferior to her sister by the fandom.
This was a well done chapter, I enjoyed it
Yes we do. Word of God, Lauren Faust. Eternal Night is just as dangerous as it logically would be.
And you're making some hefty assumptions there yourself, whereas I used deductive reasoning. You're assuming that Luna was even conscious while bound in the moon. It's not like NMM was up there stomping around on the surface or something for a thousand years while Luna was along for the ride. You can be alone, and lonely, in the middle of crowd of adoring people fawning over you every moment. If you can't understand that, then I can see why you might think Luna was worse off.
>>16477761647776 "Yes we do. Word of God, Lauren Faust. Eternal Night is just as dangerous as it logically would be."
I never heard what Lauren Faust had to say on the matter, but until it's in the show it isn't canon.
"And you're making some hefty assumptions there yourself, whereas I used deductive reasoning. You're assuming that Luna was even conscious while bound in the moon."
So you're saying she wasn't?
"You can be alone, and lonely, in the middle of crowd of adoring people fawning over you every moment. If you can't understand that, then I can see why you might think Luna was worse off."
Now you're making assumptions about me. Don't make this personal. Nothing I said was meant to offend.
Doesn't matter if you heard it or not, it's what she's said. And it was meant to be in the show, but was cut due to time constraints. Go look for it yourself, you'll see what I mean.
You said she was. I said you're assuming she was. She might or might not have been, however - it's far more likely she wasn't. For one, she was possessed. Two, she was sealed in a celestial body. That's two levels of shit to be buried under when it comes to one's conscious.
No one made anything personal. I said IF YOU CAN'T understand it, that's not offensive any way you look at it unless you are -trying- to see it that way. If you don't have the frame of reference necessary to understand that concept, then yes, it makes sense to me that you can so easily disagree with that part of my stance. Big difference between knowing something, and experiencing it first-hand; a difference we call understanding.
Anything else you want to misconstrue in a negative light?
>>16481731648173 For your information I have more experience with that than most. I did not say that I was offended by what you said, only that I did not mean to offend you. It seems you've made up your mind that Celestia is a better person and more sympathetic character than Luna and take personal offense when someone expresses an opinion to the contrary. I only wished to have a polite and civil argument, but unless I'm misjudging the tone of your replies, you do seem to be upset by what I've said. So, I apologize for touching on such a sensitive topic, and I find it unfortunate that who your favorite pretty pony princess is should be a sensitive topic.
Love is not diminished by being shared so
What we have here is a lesson.
When one gives their all they recieve nothing in return.
When one gives nothing they recieve it all in return.
As you said Celestia's just too selfless to take anything for herself and thus is doomed to sit upon her gilded throne with the love of a nation but none of the heart.
It is so tragic and I wish she'd be more selfish... She of all deserves it most.
So much irony. When you posted that, I was in the middle of a heated discussion where I was in Celestia's position in all this. The universe is fucking with me.
Its what the universe does best...
Sorry but thats how it is.
and i though i was the only one who ships twilunestia
there needs to be more storys where they share twilight
and this is the story about how luna had to sleep on the couch.
And where Luna learns that Twilight knows a ritual to make her horn floppy.
Luna is quite the troll
Been a while since I've seen Trolluna make an appearance...
I was expecting it to be a fake ritual from the beginning.
I was not expecting it to be so trollicious.
And that's how Luna got banished to the moon for a second time.
And then sexy times happened?
Luna trolling? News to me.
Wow Luna way to make Twilight feel like an idiot, nicely done
i do not see the point of having her perform that ridiculous "ritual"
Poison Joak for the win!
I think it's to get Twilight to do a bunch of silly, embarrassing things in front of luna, so she feels more comfortable with her. I think.
DING DING DING!
That's exactly the reason.
What do I win?
Trollestia has competition!
YESSS UPDATE THANK YOU SWAG
oh.... oh shes GOOOD.
A trip... TO THE MOOOOOOOON!!!!
>Darn BBBFF song, ruining my headcanon.
Just because they looked out for each other and were BBBFFs doesn't mean they didn't have sibling rivalry. In no way does that song invalidate your head cannon, I just means that at times they got along rather well. It doesn't mean there wasn't conflict at other moments. Like Twilight said, "The best and the worst."
That was cute. Good use of psychological theory.
Honestly? The fact she never mentions him until the season finale of season two only supports your headcannon - why would two siblings who got along that well be THAT out of touch?
Only one line, really. "We never had a single fight."
BUT YOU MUST. FOR PLOT DEVICE.
No offense to Daniel Ingram,but I call bullshit on that.
I mean,they are siblings.Siblings not fighting,not even a little bit is just so...unrealistic? I haven't met any siblings that have never argued,fought or quarreled.
Oh, most definitely. I'm glad I'm not the only one who found that a bit far-fetched.
Well ... she may have been exaggerating. 'We argued and sparred and fought a few times/ He said I was found in the garbage, I turned his toys into limes' isn't the best way to introduce a pony to someone..
That. Is. Adorable.
Damnit swag, you spoil me with these updates