Prolouge. (DECIDE ROUND 1)
Applebloom was walking out of sugar cube corner. After a short talk with Pinkie, who was quite busy, Applebloom learned there was bad storm coming that wasn't schedulded. All the weather ponies were on vacation at Las Pegasus because of there being no plans. Applebloom was curious. She wanted to know why a storm was coming.
Applebloom ran down the road, saying "Hi" to all the familiar ponies that she passed. She trotted down a dirt road until she reached a familiar looking cloud. It was a perfect size and shape for a Rainbow Dash to sleep on.
"Hey! Rainbow Dash!" She yelled. No answer. "Rainbow Dash! You up there?" She asked with faith for an answer.
"Ughh, who is it?" Rainbow Dash said sleepily.
"Applebloom." She replied.
Rainbow Dash carefully lifted her head to see if the speaker was the true filly known as Applebloom. To her surprise she actually was. "Go away kid." Rainbow said angerily.
Applebloom was starting to get worried. Not only had the farm just ben plowed and seeded, the Apples just planted some Apple tree saplings 4 days ago. "Rainbow I need to tell you something!" Applebloom pleaded.
Rainbow lifted her head. "Can't you see I'm busy right now?"
"Busy doin' what?" Applebloom asked.
"Busy sleeping!" Rainbow answered in an annoyed voice.
"Well your gonna need to get up.." Applebloom said, "'Cause there is a big storm headed straight for Pony-ville!"
Rainbow let out a hardy laugh. "A storm? Un-scheduled? Hahaha! Your so funny!"
"Ahm bein' serious Rainbow! Look!" Applebloom pointed out.
Rainbow shook her head and looked at the sky to see that there really was an unscheduled storm. It was big, black, and headed for Pony-Ville. "Alright squirt, I guess I owe you one, but for now, I gotta go take care of this storm."
"Alright, just please don't let the wind blow on the orchard, we just planted saplings yesterday!" Applebloom explained.
"On it." Rainbow replied while flying away towards the villainous cloud. She wanted to get this over with, she had a nap to get back to.
Stoner Stanley grabed Greg's arm really tight. "I don't wanna go there!" Cried Stoner Stanley. "I can get caught by the cops!"
Good guy Greg spoke up. "Don't worry buddy, I'll tell 'em I had the drugs."
"With me, the cops will know its a lie." Bad luck Brian pointed out.
"God dammit! Flying through a frickin' wormhole takes to much time! Ain't nobody got time for that!" Sweet Brown replied.
After several hours of flying they reached the end of the worm hole and flew through Equestria's sky.
"Look at this place." 60's Spider Man said. "A whole new WORLD for me to not give a fuck!"
"You will give a fuck when we get caught from drugs." Stanley said.
"Fuck the police!" Shouted Spider Man, not giving any fucks.
Suddenly, Rainbow Dash swooped in to rid of the storm cloud but ran into Brian on the way of doing so. They tumbled to the ground as more memes began falling through the clouds.
"What was that?" Derp asked.
"It looked like a flying pony." Answered Derpette.
Physics Troll was the last one out, and he came through the wormhole standing on top of a chair.
"When we are about to hit the ground, I'm gonna jump off this chair and land safely!" Physics Troll yelled.
The memes fell for about 20 seconds until they all hit the ground. Everyone that fell got hurt... Except Physics Troll, who stood there and did a stupid dance. After he finished his dance, he pulled out a back pack and began trying to sell books on how to be an expert and physics like he is.
60's Spider Man stood up. "Dammit! I hurt my arachnids!"
Good guy greg spoke up to Spiderman in a sorry voice, "Sorry man, I should have cushioned your fall."
"Not that I give a fuck, but why do give a fuck?" Spiderman questioned.
"Because, I'm a good guy." Greg said, annoyed.
"Not that I give another fuck, but where are we?" Spiderman asked.
All of the memes looked around. Everyone was stumped. When looking to the left, you can see what looks like a forest. When you look to the right, you can see what looks like a field with a few houses spread about. What they didn't know is that they were in the outskirts of Pony-Ville.
"AAAAAND not that I give three fucks, but where is that bad luck douchebag?" Spiderman questioned not giving any fucks at all.
Derpette raised her hand. "Ooo! Ooo! Pick me!"
"Whatcha got stick fucker?" Spiderman asked, turning to Derpette.
"A magical flying pony crashed in to him while we were flying in the air!" Derpette answered with confidence.
"Magical pony? Are you a fucking idiot?" Spiderman asked confused more than the time he almost accidently gave a fuck..
Derpette looked annoyed. "No, actually, she picked him up and headed torwards that little town over there!" Derpette pointed at Pony-Ville.
"Oh, so you saw a magical pony walk in there? Please tell me how we won't look like a bunch of idiots when we enter the city." Willy Wonka said in a sarcastic voice.
Socially Akward penguin smaked him in the back of the head. After a couple minutes of thinking, arguing, and deciding. They thought they would leave Bad Luck Brian behind, because he's just that, BAD LUCK. Troll, being himself, didn't listen and ran into the city anyways.
The other memes shrugged along with Spider Man, cause, you know, he doesn't give any fucks. So they ran in with Troll to save their friend.
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(YOU DECIDE WHO IS AGAINST WHO! EX: FLUTTERSHY VS 60S SPIDERMAN! GO AHEAD AND SUGGEST AND ILL GET WRITIN'!)
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Where would this lead?
2351511 Well that wasn't very nice.
2351511 Not very nice at all.
Author: Do NOT kill yourself.
Now that's out of the way... you need to work on your grammar, A LOT. If you continue with this story, I strongly advise you get an editor.
Characters are OOC.
And finally - where's this story going?
2351558 oh. Well here is a useful tool for such an endeavor.
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2351562 JUST LET ME CONVINCE HIM TO DIE YOU...YOU...
DOUBLE NIGGER.
2351589 Double... Nigger?
2351595 I want more I just want to be loved.......NAO!
Edit: Don't talk to KWGB Like that! That's not very nice.
2351605 Right. That is queer. You are queer.
I shall ignore you from this point on.
2351615 I'm pretty sure I made it clear that story will not be continued - one shot only.
If, however, you want to read a sweet-sad-slice of life one shot - check my stories over the next two days.
EDIT: You write a sequel, I'll link ;)
I want rainbow dash vs rainbow dash dat plot meme
2351636 I already have two fics I'm working on!
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2351657 Then I don't really see how you could be complaining/demanding.
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Mine is better then yours.
2351562 2351548
Ok, get an editor. Will do
Second of all, BLERERGERGREGEGRG YOU TELL ME WHERE TO GO! THATS THE POINT.
2351511
If you don't have anything nice to say, keep your freaking mouth shut.
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(Thanks for actually reading! I will get an editor!)
Did anyone even find any parts funny?
2351672 False. Everyone knows that Twilight Sparkle is worst pony and Rarity is best pony.
>
You can see a proper example of this right here. :
2351680 "Interactive" stories only work with an interactive audience. At the moment... you really don't have one. You have to write a couple on your own, and then maybe you'll draw in enough people to tell you where to go.
2351680 I want good guy Greg and Flutters to duke it out with kindness
I believe we meant that we want to know where the story will GO. Or is it just random BS?
2351688 Well... I see potential, IF you sort out the grammar.
2351691
> 
Oh, and author? Ignore "Kill Witches Get Bitches". He's just a troll with nothing better to do.
2351744 you see how replying gets you nowhere?
2351691
I prefer Vinyl Scratch.
2351696
Yeah... You're right...
2351697
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Well, the point was that the audience decides, and someone just suggested that I go ahead and write another chapter on my own. Please don't take me as being rude or anything but random BS? What? This is my first story evar. No one has even told me the funny parts they liked. Everyone is just arguing. (mfw
2351763 The best thing to do about the pointless comments is to just delete them. None of 'em are relevant and whats his face is just being a dick.
2351744
Hey author.
1. Go to KWGB's userpage.
2. Hit Block.
3. Delete all of his comments on your story.
Don't argue with him; you're only adding more fuel to the fire. Besides, you can't reason with the unintelligent.
How about we talk about something else? What was the funniest thing in the story?
I just looked at the comments section... are you just deleting all negative comments? That's a terrible thing to do.
2351763 Right, I'm gonna be frank with you.
No one's commenting about the good parts of your story mainly because there is no story. Memes vs Equestria was an interesting crossover idea, but as far as I can tell you're just going to write chapter after chapter of fights, with literally no plotline in between. I think that whole plan is flawed. For a story, you need a plot. You need heroes, villans, character development, action, obstacles, and a solid conclusion. And you need to put all those things in balance.
I'm not trying to be mean here - I'm just being honest. Plus, I might be wrong. This is just my opinion. So consult other people as well before making a move.
2351814
No, I'm deleting all the unintelligent comments.
There is a difference.
2351814 I can vouch for that. Deleted comments were along the lines of "Kill yourself".
ALRIGHT! IDEA EVERYONE! Instead of picking fights, just pick a pony, and that will be added to the story line. Pretty much, the memes will go on an adventure to meet all the ponies. After what derpette saw, she wants to learn more. Maybe she can talk to Twilight or something to learn. So, give it some time. This is my first story EVER.
2351841
Really? Wow, that's a little harsh for not liking a story.
2351850
Never use "this is my first story" as an excuse. Never. That is no excuse for a poorly written story.
2351821
Good, because I just read the first chapter and have some feedback.
Get an editor. Holy shit, you need an editor so badly. The grammar and spelling are, simply put, atrocious. I almost couldn't get through the whole thing. No matter how good the plot may be*, you need to have at least a basic knowledge of punctuation and grammar or else nobody will read it. It's the icing on the cake, and nobody wants to eat a cake that looks like a dog took a steaming shit on it.
Please don't take this badly. It's constructive criticism. It looks kind of mean, I know, but I'm just a mean person. You should see the comments I leave on other stories.
*I personally don't like this idea, but hey, that's just my opinion.
2351850 We get that it's your first story, all right? But I say again, your need to get an editor FIRST. A good editor will not only correct grammar, but also help plot-wise and story development-wise.
[Can't believe I'm offering this] If you can't find one, send me a PM. I'll do my best.
EDIT: I've served as editor on six stories now. Author of a couple of one shots.
2351885 I have no idea what you're talking about. Sorry, I actually don't - not trying to be smartass.
2351885
...Yes? Is that the correct answer? Was that a question? I don't... I don't even know what you're saying.
Memes vs Equestria? This can only lead to chaos.
2351905Just saw his 'double nigger' comment....disliked it too. My bad!
2351921
Wait, why are you replying to me? How does this answer my question of what were you saying in the first post? I'm so confused.
2351929Sorry, just forget anything I said. My time here is nothing but an illusion...and will self-destruct in 10 minutes. Tick Tock! Heheh, heheh, ah heheheheheheh!
Editor?
Ooh! Ooh! Pick me!
This fic demonstrates the very reason why Double Rainboom wasn't that good. It focused on memes and references more than good story and prose, and only a minority of people who understand them can enjoy them.
Ashamed and tormented by the idiotic caricatures his creations have become one hive minded being must save not only one world from cancerous oblivion, but two.
Anon Vs. Cancer part deux
Cumming soon in a theater near you.
"lolol get trolled XDXD ain't nobody got time for dat but acually is dolan nub"
Am I doing it right (read: like a moron) yet?