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Honey_Crisp


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When AJ refuses to try a fruit she thinks are horrid, disgusting, and most of all replusive, Pinkie begs her just to eat a small itsy-bitsy bite, and eventually AJ gives in. AJ starts to have cravings for the fruit that she used to dispise and begs Pinkie for more until it goes over-board. This makes odd events start to happen and Twilight can't even fix things now... the events Pinkie started, must be fixed by AJ, for only she can stop the cravings thats shes having, but maybe some unexpected ponies will come to help....

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Comment posted by Honey_Crisp deleted Jun 4th, 2013

It's a little on the short side but I like it so far :pinkiehappy: can't wait for more!

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Awww, thankies! :raritywink: I really appreciate that :heart:

Interesting story, a bit original to boot. However, there are some grammar and spelling mistakes that really need to be check on, particularly Applejack name (it is one word, not two). Also, story-wise, I have to agreed that it was on the short side, adding that it feel a bit rushed as well.

If you promised to slow down the pacing a bit, be more careful with the errors, and keep the word count above 1000, I'll give you a thump-up vote. For now, I'll just favorite it.

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Thankies c: I know I have misspellings in there :twilightblush: I'll fix that soon.

I'd change "dispises" to "despises" in the description -- I found out (the hard way) that people pay attention to those.

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Thankies :heart: I really rushed this :twilightsheepish: So I wouldn't be surprised if there was a lot of errors. I'll change it right away, tough.

I have never seen such a longstanding story get not even a single dislike.

I'm impressed. :pinkiehappy:

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