The Adventure's of Fire Team EQSC

by Firebrand22

Chapter 5 - Oh no

The fire team began to go deeper into enemy territory
“Just from looking at the size of these hallways and rooms this base must go pretty deep underground, Dr. Halsey could be anyway!”
“This place does seem to be really complex Twily, but it’s not impossible I figured if we could get to the top of the spire that’s most likely is going to hold valuable info and maybe even Halsey.”
“So anyone see a quicker way up?”
“Erm I do” Fluttershy mumbled.
“Which way?”
“Down this corridor but err.”
“But what you seem unsure what is it?”
“There’s Hunters!”
The Tiny wail that Fluttershy let out alerted the Hunters to their position and now they have to fight.

Comments

[WarKing76]

This is strange fic indeed but I guess I'll let it slide since you said that it was a school project. But I felt that it could have been better, for example: adding more description about the SPARTAN IVs themselves like what they are and what they do for the people who are not familiar with the franchise and whatnot.

What I'm basically trying to say to you is that the story needs more detail and back story.

Oh and one question. The characters here are humanized, right? That or the whole UNSC in this story are bunch of ponies.

[Firebrand22]

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Oh they are humanized i belived i tagged it as humanized you mite have missed it.