Chapter 4 - Inflitration
“Steady Tree steady we don’t want to give ourselves away”
“Ok…”
As EQSC slowly approached the shield, an Elite saw them and ordered a grunt to let down the shield. The fire team slowly but surely were getting one step closer to Halsey and getting back to the Infinity.
“Team when the enemy board the ship to get the supplies they will realize that there aren’t any, so when they realize quickly dispose of them so no alarms are set of” ordered Shining Armour.
“Yes sir!” responded the team.
“Hush now I think there coming.”
Shining Armour gave the hand signals and the fire team let the shadows consume them. A couple of seconds later the patrol squad entered the ship and it was filled with light once again. The fire team hidden in the crevices of the ship remained unseen.
The patrol squad got to the middle of the ship before realizing that there was no cargo. Suddenly the fire team jumped out utilizing the element of surprise eliminating the enemy in a flash.
“Great work, now let’s advance before they begin to notice that this squad isn’t responding.
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Believe me or not, I have never played any Halo games, therefore I felt little confused while reading these chapters. There was a lot of action induced by dialougues, but the number of descriptions (which would vastly enrich the story and improve the setting) was close to none. Also, why so short chapters? You could easily merge them to a single one, add some descriptions here and there, explain the purpose of those Spartans soldiers as well as their mission - that would do well for the quality of your story.
Anyway, good luck with writing it.
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Firstly thanks you for the comment secondly i think until i get to about the chapter 6 the fic starts getting good there in my opinion i know the chapter are short but it never started out as an actual fic but then it developed and i decided to put it on to the site which would explain why some of the chapters are short.