Back in the Cutie Mark Chronicles, while telling the CMC's her own story of how she came upon her Cutie Mark. Twilight looses control of her magic, releasing a surge of power that could do things that no pony at her age should have been able to do. What happens though, when that untold power bubbles to the surface again, surrounded by untrained ponies and evil who want to harness its power.
Chapter 1 is just a teaser of the story. It's to see what people think and if they're interested for me to continue with proper, full length chapters.
Characters involved to be added as they appear.
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hmmm... interesting.i shall track this.
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Thats what I hoped I could get from this little teaser, some watchers to follow it before I start posting much longer chapters.
I'm lost....
AJ's accent is a little thick.
That doesn't mean I'mma give up on this though.
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As much as I like the southern accent, im not too great at impersonating it. Trying to keep it in character as I dont like stories that change a characters personality completely.
rules of writing. separate each speaker with a new paragraph. Those large blocks of text would be better if they were broken down into smaller chunks.
other than formatting issues, this is a good story.
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I'll try to edit it.
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What do you think? Better or over did it?
2332706 The story, simply in terms of plotline, was like chocolate. Now with better formatting, it is like you added peanut butter or caramel. Horay for good stories! have this:
what happen next chapter?
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I'll be honest, I put a heap of effort into this story with the intention of getting it on EQD.
But of course, their automatic proof reader points out non existent flaws to prevent it from being posted. After a couple of failed submissions, kinda just dropped the story. Maybe, might consider trying to continue it again, possibly.
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please?
Please continue the story! I'm begging you! I really like it!