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The Price of Redemtion

A young stallion finds himself awake in the middle of the Everfree forest with no recollection of who he is. He wanders aimlessly through the forest until he manages to find his way out. The stallion finds himself in an unknown place, Ponyville...and they need help. At the same time, he hunts endlessly through his memories, searching for every memory he can find, trying to discover who he is.

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Mr Skeleton

Mr Skeleton #1 · Mar 16th, 2013 · · ·

i enjoyed this immensly. cant wait to see were its going

Black Wolf

Black Wolf #2 · Mar 16th, 2013 · · ·

2274339 Okay, well I'll be updating soon.

Jagged Fox

Jagged Fox #3 · Mar 16th, 2013 · 1 · ·

Just sayin', you might want to edit your story just a bit. The plot is good, but your writing needs some tlc. It's best not to focus too much on pure paragraphs as if reading an essay. Other than that, it was actually a really good story. I hope to see some updates soon!

Mr Skeleton

Mr Skeleton #4 · Mar 16th, 2013 · · ·

2274928 yay

Naden Gryphus

Naden Gryphus #5 · Mar 17th, 2013 · 2 · ·

You've got my interest. I like your writing style.
I felt that that the growth of his abilities was a bit sudden, you don't a Mary Sue in your hands.
I'm liking our character here, he seems like the only kind of person that would not go crazy being alone that much time.
He seems like a bad-ass, I wanna see how others react to him.
I suggest you hold some of these tags back until you really introduce what they mean. I see no romance in this chapter, for example.

P.S. : Your title has a typo it should be 'The price of redemption'. You're missing a 'p' in there.

Write on!