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Only one glaring error:
All those words came undone and now I'm not the only one]/i]
Also, as a fun exercise, the second time round (or the first, if you're a fast reader), try to keep up.
Poorly written sex scene. However, it's not a sex scene; it's a love-making scene, distinct difference. It is, however, a decently-written love-making scene.
is Josh supposed to be James from Pokemon? I didn't read the other chapters...
Well, Joshua and Rainbow Dash did the deed. Seemed written well enough. Jamlamin had a point about the speed and stuff. Only thing I found weird was that Meowth just flies. Couldn't he get wings too? Or like a flying machine or something? No? Well, I guess he's just sort of a sidekick. That's the impression I was getting. He's Joshua's answer to Twilight's Spike or something. Fine chapter.