Princess Luna had hard time, getting along with her subjects from Poniville, but with assitance of Twilight Sparkle everythung ended well. But Fluttershy reacted freakingly bad. What happend to her? Have she met Princess Luna before?
Why was she that histeric? Is she just "being Fluttershy", or there good reason for reaction? Twilight as alwayes have to discover.
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Hello everypony! I posted my first chapter! english isnt my first laungauge, so please, help me!
and comments please!
You really need an editor. The story itself seems like it could be interesting but it is riddled with errors. Twilight Sparkle's name, Ponyville and etc are mispelled a few times and some sections have two speakers in them, which makes them confusing to read.
Even the summary had lots of errors, which will turn people away from this story. It doesn't invite them to come and read your story.
So just look for an editor. There's lots of people out there that are willing to help you out with your story
oh! thank you!
yes english isn't my first laungauge, and I was thinking a lot if I sould try it at all.... i'v got many ideas, and there not many bronies at my country.....
But how to find an editor?
Hello, everypony. Nopony proofreaded it yet, but I am still looking, someponies said yes...
But I haven't heard from them, since.
So, I proofreaded it myself, and found a dozens errors, so I fixed them. I still need proofreader, but now it's more readable.