A young colt, destined to be a great flyer, fails his flight test. He is then taken to the Rainbow Factory, now destined to die. But he challenges the staff and goes for his escape. But can he make it out alive...
A young colt, destined to be a great flyer, fails his flight test. He is then taken to the Rainbow Factory, now destined to die. But he challenges the staff and goes for his escape. But can he make it out alive...
No.
Just, no.
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omg author u r my fav brony frend XDDDD (\ le 20% cooler <3 u bb 5eva
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R-Rainbow Factory...?
I should advise you as a writer on this site for fanfiction that stories concerning the "Rainbow Factory" as it is called receive much more hate than others simply for being involved with that universe. May I suggest thinking of your own unique story with colorful characters and loads of adventure in a new world? Anything besides the bland, cliche and
absolutely fucking terriblerainbow factory would be a nice breath of fresh air for this community and something interesting for you to write.*before reading*
This will be awesome.
*after reading*
So super sexily awesome.
Rainbow Factory story?
Okay, who let M Night Shamalamadingdong write fiction?!
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Thanks for the feedback. This is probably going to be my only Rainbow Factory fanfic, i just had this idea in my head for so long and didnt want to lose it. I understand the Rainbow Factory setting may be overused, but i tried my best. This was my very first fan fiction, so i am looking for ANY feedback, positive or negative. Thank you.
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you overused the word fast
you can use other words like quickly or swiftly
good story though
It was good except that killing rainbow dash was a bit to fast I was thinking of knocking her out or something like that but the story is your handiwork so I shouldn't be insulting it
~GoodSquidMC
YAY THIS STORY WAS AWESOME!!!!!
This was a bit rushed, but otherwise good enough for me to upvote it.