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The Equestrian Tour


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Four months ago Princess Twilight decided to try out a new spell she made. The result was a broken Equestria filled with: strange creatures, harsh terrain, and deranged stallions looking for a mare. That is where the story enters, on a young mare who is trying to survive in this new Equestria.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 2 )

Looks good so far, though a couple of things stood out for me...

Maybe italicize when the main character is thinking to herself, instead of quotes? Quotations make it seem as if she is speaking aloud.:twilightblush: There are quite a few typos as well, but a quick spell check should do the trick!

Hopefully there will be more to this story! Well done over all. :twilightsmile:

2236889 Thank you very much, there is more to come really soon, I'm typing as we... You know type.

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