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Questions of Self

Spike comes to question who and what he is now? A dragon raised as pony with a deeper and hidden nature always calling under his skin? Is he a freak of some kind or a beast just playing make up? A talk with Twilight comes underway as he shows these fears and also a new side to who he is to him friend.

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Bronzedragon

Bronzedragon #1 · Mar 3rd, 2013 · 1 · ·

I'm not going to down vote this. However please go over your story. There are too many missing words, use of the wrong word, poor grammar and so forth to read this in a smooth fashion. Check on this site for authors who can preread your story and give you some pointers on improving it. I think you have a good premise here and it could even possible work into a two chapter or so story. Keep writing and good luck.

oaxaca

oaxaca #2 · Mar 3rd, 2013 · 1 · ·

It was a really nice story. The only problem was the grammar and the fact that some lines sounded... strange. You need to use more comas, and pace things in a slower way. You should try getting an editor.

Doublesims