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Fluttershy Gets a New Fridge

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Fluttershy gets a fridge. Hilarity ensues.

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rip4thwall

rip4thwall #1 · Mar 20th, 2013 · · ·

... I don't know what to think, so I'll just mark this for when more chapters arrive.

FloydienSlip

FloydienSlip #2 · Mar 20th, 2013 · · ·

This is interesting... go on.

oop

oop #3 · Mar 21st, 2013 · · ·

I'm not entirely sure where to start with this one...
It's imaginative to say the least, though a little bit odd. Correct me if I'm wrong about this but i got the impression you were trying to not do anything that was too story changing for fear it would coincide badly with something in the future series or something you had forgotten from the past series. If that is indeed the case, i say you should branch out a little, build some OCs, have some fun with it. If not, just try to make the stories a little longer. I also recommend working on your hook for the start of the story. When i read through it I did it with a kind of slow and dismal pace that told me i just wasn't really all that interested in it. I know this story really isn't meant to be taken seriously, but you should still work on pulling people in with some more commonly used storytelling.
-CC

Bingles

Bingles #4 · Mar 21st, 2013 · · ·

2294505 Thanks for the feedback man!

Quylaa

Quylaa #5 · Mar 21st, 2013 · · ·

2294505 You know, it's a weird feeling to GET some constructive criticism, as I'm usually the one GIVING the criticism...

I can definitely see where the story is a little slow, and we'll definitely be working on that in future chapters. In the meantime, I'll see what I can do with this chapter to make it more interesting. Thanks for your help!
~Q

Habanc

Habanc #6 · Mar 21st, 2013 · 1 · ·

This looks brilliant. I'll be following and watching in earnest as it progresses.

Inferno demon Dash

Inferno demon Dash #7 · May 15th, 2013 · · ·

Huh, random but enjoyable, other then a few errors and remembering to separate your paragraphs I like it a lot, I shall await more, wonder if any creature is inside the fridge, I hope not, a nice, humor fic would do well just for me but we will see