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Deadpool accidentally dimention hopped into the land of Equestria I don't how and neither does he, pretty sure it had something to do with a cosmic toaster and a primordial Jacuzzi buuut its the marvel universe they dimension hop for weekend get aways there so it don't matter. Deadpool ain't happy about being there either i mean talking ponies WTF?! 1000 years of peace, ah hell nah! This place just isn't Deadpool's style! But leaving is going to prove to be difficult in a land whose technological age can't seem to make up it's mind. Well, He can always pass the time by killin a few Hydra or fighting a princess that should keep him entertained for a bit.
Please rate fairly. I don't mind if you down vote just give a legitimate reason before you do. If you enjoyed it however I implore you please up vote. The more people that like this series the more i will work on it.
I would like to give a big thanks to my editor Darklordtheslayer who has helped improve my work immensely!
Please leave comments on your thoughts of this dialogue good bad or ugly just not rude i dont like rude people cuz their rude but yeah as its my first work im not expecting much out of it
Use more periods to separate the sentences.
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Hey people if your gonna give my work a thumbs down i dont mind just please let me know what you didnt like about it
I havent read it yet but i mean cmon...deadpool right?
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Damn Straight bud Damn Straight
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specially in the pony world that just adds more to how awesome he is speaking of its been a while since ive read more then clop...imma read this! :)
k i read it fucking awesome!It feels like you actually reading a deadpool comic that insaneness also a note for the authors note:i am a big fan of trixie but i mean if your gonna get upset about someone beating up a fave character then why read it and why listen to cuss words infact your reading deadpool someones gotta get shoryoken [sorry trixie
] [i just murdered that word] to the face i mean cmooooon :) 
also lmfao
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Im glad you enjoyed the story and yes I do read the Deadpool comics and if its one thing that i learned from them and MLP its funny when the character occasionally breaks the fourth wall but annoying when the writer breaks it so i make sure to keep that in check
if you read the comic where deadpool shoryukens Kitty Pride you'll notice some similarities in character personality at the time cuz Kitty hates Deadpool and was being a real bitch to him at the time even though shes usually one of the nicer characters so thats why i chose Trixie
and a heads up chapter three is gonna be out real soon and its also a whole hell of alot longer than the previous two also its a tad more serious as well
I'm just giving this a thumbs up 'cause it has Deadpool.
I'll actually read it later...
Why you thumbs down and no tell why!?
I art dissapoint
You have a lot of grammatical errors... Also, the capitalizationand sentence structure could use some work. I'm rather disappointed, really- It's a novel concept.
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Yeah i got a problem with grammar im tryin to fix that id love to get an editor for this kinda thing
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2162667 This would normally be where I offer to do that, but I'm already behind on both of my stories on here AND on my requests on DeviantArt.
So I can't.
Well i appreciate the thought man I'll eventually get the stories fixed also i still gotta figure out where the hell im going with this story I've got some good ideas i think but still nothing solid
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oki!i will make sure to read that right away when it comes out i also gotta catch up on a babs seed story....:/
but this is a exeption (same with the babs) i usually HATE reading online storys with chapters but if i really enjoy them i will read the chapters insteada being the picky shit i usually am.....but yea thisll be one of them ill read every now and then.lol also when i get my good computer back...this is a random sidenote would you mind if i read this for a video?all credit would go to you (accept voice and stuff) but all writing credit.(and if you say yes)just let me know and ill let you know when i get my good computer back and ill start it and send you a link of my channel :P
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THe new chapter was really good oh and the comic youre looking for is....uh let me find it real quick...
---30 minutes later----
I think it is nomad,and for some reason my cover fell off so i dont know what issue lol.
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id really appreciate it and would you happen to be any good at editing cuz i know im probably losing a few readers off of my shitty grammar
Dude that would be sick as fuck if you did that
and actually that does sound about right i recognize the name deadpool was barely in that comic but when he was he fucked shit up and this was back when he was still working for tolliver wasn't it?
Also i really appreciate the praise im thinkin about doin the prologue next but im gona leave out exactly how he got there cuz its the marvel universe man does it really fuckin matter?
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will do ill let you know when i get it back...(prolly gonna be a while,but i could ask about it to see when it should be here
and then yea sure id be happy too....i personally dont get why people would leave ya cause of minor grammar obviously MLPFIMF thought it was good....would you just want me to read it and be like ok tas spelled wrong or....?(and to answer your question yes im good at editing)
it does sound like the comic i pulled out of the abyss of my room.....so maybe i was right!i read it last year in school so i thought it sounded familiar what you where talking about in the desc.also i think it may be nomad #2 or 3? i may be wrong i actually think i am wrong....lol
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Alot of people have trouble reading through a story when the grammar and such is bad cuz it just makes it harder to read and less enjoyable and i really want to appeal to a larger majority of readers to gain popularity for the story so its always good to make sure my grammar is right.
Also i was thinking going over the mistakes one by one would be kinda time wasting so i was wondering would you be ok with me sending you the entire chapter and you make changes on your whenever you see fit, and then sending it back. I'll mark you down as the editor in the authors note for each of the story's you work on. But you tell me what you want to do i cant really force you to do anything im just happy your willing to edit for me.
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i'd be happy to.and theese messages will be on here or on youtube or....?
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I'll just copy and paste the story on a msg through here if thats alright
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i probably sound like a retard...but what?sorry i'm good with tech but not really good there's still a lot of internet stuff i don't know
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I sent you a msg on here in the format this website uses when editing or writing a story thats how it looks as you type it up i thought it was wierd at first as well no worries
Stop down voting without explanation not cool people!
well....canterlot voice......just saying,also i really enjoyed the prolouge it was goood! :3
i hope to see more deadpool soon :3
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Canterlot voice? which part?
(sighs).
I'm at a loss with this story and frankly I don't really want to read anymore so I'll review these 2 chapters.
During the first chapter the wording was a little off which caused me to half lose interest in the chapter itself. As I continued to read you managed to do good on Celestia's personality while Discord's lacked. The tree's shooting out of the ground was kind of cool, though by the end of the chapter I was losing interest. A few lines into the second chapter I lost all care for the story.
This part made me facepalm. Does the character have a split personality or?
The problem I found with this is that you are over using profanity to the point of it being annoying and unpleasant to read. Wording was a little awkward and it had a bit of "jumpy writing" as I like to refer to it as, meaning it jumps from this point and all of a sudden the characters are here and your like "Woah what the hell?". You also had many grammar problems and sentence errors. One thing personally bothered me was the Luna part though thats personal since she is one of my favorite characters.
A few things that were good: Celestia's personality was close to normal though still a little off.
Discord expressing his boredom even if it was a little over the top.
Possible potential for split personality disorder though story needs different setting.
I rate your story 3.5/10
Work on your grammar, sentence structure and I recommend changing some elements in the story (The [ ] parts are ugly and can be solved with italics and font color).
-Rezz
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Hmmm I can see your problem with this story, and I completely agree with my overuse of profanity I'll be sure to tone that down. The second chapter is already scheduled for a rewrite as i realize it sucks, this is my first attempt at a fic so I really appreciate the help. The thing with the brackets is in fact deadpool's split personality talking to him as they do in the comic's so yeah and as with most things with deadpool you either love em or hate em. I'm sorry you were not able to enjoy the fic and so i will work my hardest to improve the quality of the work. My other story to come out soon is written in a completely different style and I think you may actually enjoy that one as opposed to this one. I will keep your words in mind as I continue to write. Thank you again.
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Oh and I understand your confusion as the story was written out of order the actual first chapter is to be released very soon and I believe is a bit higher quality than all the current chapters.
Also I'm really sorry i fucked up luna she is my favorite character as well how do you propose i fix her parts as i am legitimately concerned in getting her right as another story i will be writing soon will have her as one of the main characters and writing her parts has always been a concern of mine
Much better.
I can enjoy this so much more when I don't have to muddle through all the grammar errors.
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Really? I'm glad you approve. All further chapters will be edited before they are released for now on to ensure further enjoyment from the reader.
I like this despite the grammer you made deadpool perfectly I will look forward to more chaptetrs
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, the new chapters done but theres something wrong with my editors email and he hasn't been able to send the final draft
Thanks man I'm happy to hear that
I just extended the luna vs. deadpool fight by a few paragraphs as i thought it was too short after reading over it again more changes to the series will be made soon right after i stop being bogged down with essays and shit for class not to mention that i have also started working on another series along with this one so i'm excited about that as it is much more serious than this fic and not filled to the brim with profane language though it still has some (what can i say Deadpool's got a dirty mouth, his mother never washed it with soap...... she just beat him
sorry sad deadpool bit their)
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It felt appropriate. I couldn't find the actual audio, though.
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......... NOTHING!!!
Nothing could be more appropriae
meh I think Deadpool would have wiped the floor with Luna.
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buuut I couldn't let deadpool win in good conscience because luna still has sveral hundred life times of experience on him and she was going easy on him as she wasn't using magic 
I find your confidence in deadpool most pleasing
2419532 he does have the regenerative ability, plus if i were him I wouldhave aimed for her wings and horn. He could have killed her.
2429920 neither of them were trying to kill eachother though and his regen takes a bit to work on usually he doesnt rely on it like wolverine does cuz he knows it doesnt always work
Luna's got demi god strength as well if he tried to break either of those the same thing would happen
2432182 Well with Deadpool, the suprises are endless.
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Oh fret not friend the surprises are yet to come and the fights are only going to go up in intensity
I can't stop laughing.
i cant help but read it over again every now and then,when is the next chapter coming out?
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, I'm sorry about the delay between each chapter but I'll be getting back to work on all of my stories once finals are over
. I really need to finish these first parts, I've got so much shit planned for after the luna fight
Haha I'm glad to hear that
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Damn. Where'd all the time go, man?