A.T.P 152 was doing his regular routine. Shoot Defectors. Shove around the Recruits during Recreation Hour. However, It morphed into shooting zombies after Dr.Christoff Brought the dead back to life, after attempting to kill Hank J. Wimbleton.
Well, this certainly has potential. Dialog seems a tad disjointed and there exist numerous spelling and grammatical errors. Considering the content of Madness Combat, it's easy to see this actually happening. Events seem to be going a bit fast though; I'd try to slow it down a bit.
Aside from that, this story has quite a bit of potential; we'll just wait and see where it goes.
Well well well... A new Madness fic? And it's looking pretty good so far? :D But I think 152 got used to the fact that he's in a new world with talking ponies with non Madness colours a bit too quickly though :| But what ever, I mean... Madness >:D (And if it's alright with you, I'll be adding this to My Madness group)
Wow, I've always loved Madness Combat but I never thought I'd see the day where it was crossed over with MLP.
You receive a moustache.
Well, this certainly has potential. Dialog seems a tad disjointed and there exist numerous spelling and grammatical errors. Considering the content of Madness Combat, it's easy to see this actually happening. Events seem to be going a bit fast though; I'd try to slow it down a bit.
Aside from that, this story has quite a bit of potential; we'll just wait and see where it goes.
I'm actually suprised to see that this story has good Feedback. I atleast expected it to be
All like people hunting me down like a dog.
Good...Good.
Well well well... A new Madness fic? And it's looking pretty good so far? :D
But I think 152 got used to the fact that he's in a new world with talking ponies with non Madness colours a bit too quickly though :|
But what ever, I mean... Madness >:D (And if it's alright with you, I'll be adding this to My Madness group)
2115371 I have an answer to that,;
I mean... Uh... *Cough Cough*Hismask*Cough*
Ok this is original right here I have never seen a maddness fanfic with a crossover awesome.
2115371 ALL HAIL THE WIMBLETON! HE IS THE DARK MESSIAH!!!!