A fairly short Caramel x Twilight shipfic written for Hearts and Hooves day.
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Cloud Quake
Used to write, doesn't anymore. Incredibly gay.
Cloud Quake
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Finally! A story that doesn't involve instantaneous smooching and pretty darn obvious stuff! Not that I have a problem with that style, but it's refreshing to have a romance that doesn't end in sex.
Thanks for writing this!
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No problem! Even though most of my writing is barely above one thousand words I try to take things slowly, and personally I don't want to know what would happen if I tired writing clop
brovo so far. hope to see more.
LOL yeah lots of the romance stories end up in stuff we readers expect
D'aaaw. This story was sweet. I do wonder if Rainbow had any luck with that book she borrowed.
And then they had sex.
I enjoyed it, but there was one thing I saw happen quite a bit. It's referred to as "show, not tell". Basically, tell is "he kissed her", while show is "he slowly leaned towards her, cheeks burning, etc. etc". I noticed that there was a lot of tell in this fic, which can be effective in certain sections of a story, but there was too much of it here and not enough show.
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Hmmm, well if you wanted you could read the last romance fic I wrote "One Winter Night" and just pretend that it took her eleven months to get a guy.
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Thanks for the feedback! I'm a tad too lazy too lazy to go back and edit this for that kind of thing but I'll definitely keep it in mind for my future writings.
I gotta say, that's a pretty awesome story. You thinking about a sequel?
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Thanks! I've done sequel's to my one-shots before but I'm not so sure about this one. I think this was ended off on a good note and I don't want to tinker with that too much, not to mention the fact that future chapters might wind up coming out as half-clones of the chapters from my last romance fic. If you want to, you're free to write up your own part two and upload on your account, just make sure to link back to this one.
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This is now my favorite picture on the internet. Thank you.
2104094 Me writing a sequel? Maybe. I'll have to think about it for a bit.
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Well that was a pretty sweet story so caramel wanted to ask Twilight out but unfortunately she was pretty busy and it did not work too well and towards the end of the day she thank him for helping her since Spike was pretty busy even caramel asked her if she wants to go out which she said yes again it was a pretty sweet one keep up the good work
Aw, cute! Please make more!