What if two human brothers were sent to an alternative universe where a vampire tyrant has overthrown Celestia and everypony has been turned into vampires? The Mane 6 have tried defeating her with the Elements of Harmony, but she summoned the Elements of Blood to stop them. The Mane 6 have been turned into vampires for all eternity. Centuries later, each of them has found love and created a foal. Will the two humans escape the vampire Equestria and push away the bloodlust and affection of the daughters of the Mane 6?
Chapters (4)
That is a lot of unnecessary capitalization.
Capitalization errors I can remedy. Fixing this mess of clichés, however, is beyond me. Seriously, what is it with people and vampires?
Soooo...
They took Scootaloo?
Anyhows, lemme jussay one thing...
The part with the humans didn't make sense at all. That and the fact that you kept on using numbers as in '2' instead of saying two, really threw me off. This isn't bad, but you need more description and stop using the 1234567890... Use written words, more professional.
Well, I suppose... Oh, that wasn't a question.
Ok.
good story.
Update anytime soon?
Hey najee its me. I know you have 17 chapters of this story on fanfic.net why dont you put them here. Dont leave these people waiting.
anyone else feeling a sense of "Da J'a vu"
An interesting premise, though the human side of the story, at this point, seems to somewhat intrude on the pony side. Also, don't be so concerned with exact measurements. All I can say.
is that it!?!
2420773 post a link pls
4088972 I would if I could but he took the story down on fanfiction site. He has another good story which has some vampires. Just google "Najee fanfiction" and you should find it.
its been 59 weeks since he has last been on i think his stories are dead
da ja vu
This is so cliche. "Mysterious" objects just popping into the world with no explanation given by the author? Also, I've also taken the time to read your other works including on the other site and they're just sad. Never reading anything from you again.
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4390445 there dead alright.
Ow boy the are so screwed I can't wait to see what happens next keep up the good work update soon