One year has passed since the fall of the Princesses against the Gryphon kingdom, now captives in their own palace. But in the other side of the sea, in the tiny land of Neighpon far away from the reach of the Gryphon king a Pegasus stands against the loss of his country.
Hi everypony, I’m still learning English and this is one of the best ways that I thought to improve it, so this is my first fanfic in English, if there is an error just mention it, but be kind :S.
Here´s an art gallery about the story http://ghostreet.deviantart.com/
Chapters (3)
Good idea, but your grammar needs a lot of work. I suggest finding an editor. Might I recommend one of mine?
I really like the premise of this and do look forward to the next chapter. That being said I did notice a few easy fix errors with words. I can't point them all out, I'm on my phone, but one that stuck out from the beginning had to do with the usage of his. I think in several cases you meant her. But your story is way better than that of a lot of native English speakers. Thumbs up.
Not too shabby. I like the story. There are some grammatical errors, but that can be taken care of by a proof reader, but besides that, pretty great
2095027 that would be great!
2095301 Alrighty. Talk to these two people, and pick who you want to be your editor.
Miss Dark Angel - My main editor, so I trust her the most.
Garbo802 - Good friend of mine. Fantastic editor.
Okay, tell them I referred you, and here's one last thing. Don't take shit from anybody. If they talk shit to you for having bad grammar, just ignore them. Don't respond, don't delete the comment, just ignore them. Trust me.
Revising the story, I noticed several errors and correct them.
I loved this story. Although minor errors like the extreme usage of "his" over "her" occure I dont see why this cant be a wonderfull story.
Thank you trekee, I´m still improving my grammar and the third chapter will be posted soon, with some art of mine, like the meeting room, the camp and characters, I will take Seven´s advice and send the text to an editor.
Great! Maybe when you're done you can make a sequel called the lunar mare or something XP
I had to change it, because some sexual themes, nothing too extreme and didn't have time to finish my first drawing but i posted something in my deviantart profile
http://ghostreet.deviantart.com/