Mmmmmmm Sex.

Well, that was pretty damn good. One part felt a little hamfisted though. I think I read "How good Big Mac's cock felt inside me" in different wording or orientation like ten different times.

>Though I’m not sure if Snails’ noticed it
What is that apostrophe for?

>didn’t have any trouble finding it’s place
This should say "its".

I noticed "my" when it should say "me", but I do not remember where.

I'm willingly reading it, but why do I feel the need to cry in shame and be terrified?

I find it refreshing, as a dude to read something like this from a female perspective.... good show lad

Damn...
Me like

these reactions ocurred when i read this

I like how it is from the girls perspective. Sexy.

Wow, I can actually say for real that this fan-fic makes me want to clop, and mean it.

Well, the sex has started, but my comments are still formatted the same way!

… “he hadn’t been expecting to pushed so far” – Needs a ‘be’ between ‘to’ and ‘pushed’.
… “no part of my ready” – ‘my’ should be ‘me’.
… “His cocked seemed extra” – ‘cocked’ should just be ‘cock’.
… “watching my all night” – ‘my’ should be ‘me’.
… “as he caressed me” – two spaces between ‘he’ and ‘caressed’. Only one is needed.

I'm inclined to agree with the comment of Sorren, with regards to how good Samantha felt being used way too often with regards to the proximity of one time to another. If it was throughout the entire chapter, it wouldn't be too bad, but it's mainly isolated between the half-and-three-quarter mark. It's not 'bad', just 'noticably overused'. Well, last chapter. Not sure what else to expect...

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You have really done a lot of work in front of this story and I respect that. This is a really good story. I have to say.

Tell me that what kind of "sex" is admitted to write?

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Then do it. Who cares...