This is the story of the adventures of a warrior exiled to Equestria. Follow him on his path to discover great threats and the magic of friendship and love!
mate, ya got to put spaces between senctences with different diologe.
We walked in silence for some time, until Rarity spoke up, obviously nervous “And, where are you from, Teridax?” She feared me, I heard that. Maybe they weren’t used to killing. “Listen, Rarity, I know that for some reason you fear me, but I assure you, the rightful don’t need to fear me.” “Well, Darling, I’m just not used to… killing, so I assume that’s the cause.” She gave me a forced smile. I sighed, and nodded. It was like that back home, the small folk always feared the Members of the brotherhood for our… rather direct methods of punishment. “Too answer your question, Rarity, I’m from a lovely Tropical Island” Her expression lighted up immediately “Oh, with pure white sand beaches and Palm trees?” she asked rather excited. “Yes, just like that”. “OH, it must have been wonderful, darling!” My expression grew sorrowful as I thought about home. Yes, indeed it was…”
We walked in silence for some time, until Rarity spoke up, obviously nervous “And, where are you from, Teridax?” She feared me, I heard that. Maybe they weren’t used to killing. “Listen, Rarity, I know that for some reason you fear me, but I assure you, the rightful don’t need to fear me.”
“Well, Darling, I’m just not used to… killing, so I assume that’s the cause.” She gave me a forced smile. I sighed, and nodded. It was like that back home, the small folk always feared the Members of the brotherhood for our… rather direct methods of punishment.
“Too answer your question, Rarity, I’m from a lovely Tropical Island” Her expression lighted up immediately.
“Oh, with pure white sand beaches and Palm trees?” she asked rather excited.
“Yes, just like that”. (might want to add something here)[ I replied ]
“OH, it must have been wonderful, darling!” My expression grew sorrowful as I thought about home. Yes, indeed it was....
(Something like this. Love the story, just your sentences get scrunched together)
mate, ya got to put spaces between senctences with different diologe.
We walked in silence for some time, until Rarity spoke up, obviously nervous “And, where are you from, Teridax?” She feared me, I heard that. Maybe they weren’t used to killing. “Listen, Rarity, I know that for some reason you fear me, but I assure you, the rightful don’t need to fear me.”
“Well, Darling, I’m just not used to… killing, so I assume that’s the cause.” She gave me a forced smile. I sighed, and nodded. It was like that back home, the small folk always feared the Members of the brotherhood for our… rather direct methods of punishment.
“Too answer your question, Rarity, I’m from a lovely Tropical Island” Her expression lighted up immediately.
“Oh, with pure white sand beaches and Palm trees?” she asked rather excited.
“Yes, just like that”. (might want to add something here)[ I replied ]
“OH, it must have been wonderful, darling!” My expression grew sorrowful as I thought about home. Yes, indeed it was....
(Something like this. Love the story, just your sentences get scrunched together)