That morning:
Fluttershy woke up and she looked around the her little room, where was the animals? she got out of bed and made her it, she walked around her cottage to find Angel tapping his foot impatiently for her, He seem to say, 'where were you?!'
"Oh, I was sleeping, what time is it?" Fluttershy said softly and looked at her clock.
"OH DEAR!" Her voice was as loud as Rainbowdash's normal voice, "I forgot I have to go see Rainbowdash show of- I mean practice for the talent show! but who will take care of you animals?"
Maybe Applejack?
No she's a little too ruff and she's busy.
Pinkie Pie?
Maybe, but she's too excitable,
Twilight?
I don't think she's good with animals,
Rarity?
Well, no..... she doesn't like dirty animals.
I guess Pinkie Pie,
"Uh, I guess Pinkie Pie would do.... I don't know...." Fluttershy said, and walked outside, "Be good until I get back...." She ordered softly, and closed the door.
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Twilight was happily eating at a restaurant with Spike. Twilight a dandelion sandwich with Pinecone juice, while Spike had crispy, lightly salted hay-fries. As they where chowing down, Twilight was halfway done with her sandwich as Spike was wolfing down his. And across the court, Twilight could make out a wall-eyed Ditzy-doo and her Daughter; Dinky-Doo.
"Spike, Do you ever wonder who is Dinky-Doo's father is?" She asked,
"No, because its not my business," Spike said crossly, and burped, "S'cuse me," He added, as fire scorched her sandwich, even burnt her cup. Which Spike thought was impossible
"Great skies Spike!" Twilight sighed, "You ruined my sandwich!" She dropped it and said, "Ah well, I can always pick up an apple from Sweet Apple Acres, lets go...." Twilight stood up and paid the bill and started on there way towards the acres. The sight of trees began filling the foreground, she soon found Big Macintosh resting from plowing the field.
"Hey Big Mac, Nice day we're having, eh?" Spike asked,
"Eeyup," He replied,
"Have you seen Granny Smith? Its been forever," Twilight asked,
"Nope," Big Mac said shortly,
"Are you sure?"
"Eeyup,"
"Re-"
"Talk tar Applejack, Ah'm tired," Big Mac stated, clearly annoyed with Spike's way to get Big Mac to talk.
Twilight allowed Spike on her back, "This shan't be long," She declared
Two Hours Later:
"WHAT. THE. BUCK?!" Twilight said, aggregated its been hours looking for they're freckled friend,
"Oh hey Twilight; Spike," The orange mare said, she was following them. Trying to see how far Twilight will push it until she swears, "Ah reckon y'all were lookin' fer me?"
"AH!" Twilight screamed, "Applejack!" She laughed, "I hate you!" She added playfully,
"ha-ha, Now what can Ah do ya fer Twi?" She asked,
"Spike ruined my sandwich and I was hoping I can purchase an apple," Twilight asked, levitating her bag for two bits to come out,
"Yer more than welcome Twi!" She buck-kicked a Apple tree, hard enough for one apple to drop, "Now, If y'all can't pay fer this, I can jus' put it on yer tab."
"No, that won't be necessary, but thanks anyways." She said
"Well shucks Twi, Its mah pleasure!" She blushed a little, and received the bits. "Hey, Ah'm done with mah work, mind if ah join y'all?" She asked,
"Yeah, I guess there's enough room for one more!"Twilight said, then Applejack, Twilight, and Spike was on they're merry way.
But however, they saw smoke. "Great, was ANOTHER DRAGON in that Mountain again?!" Twilight asked.
"TWILIGHT!" Bon-Bon and Lyra came galloping towards them, "GREAT GOD! THE EVERFREE FOREST AND FLUTTERHY'S HOUSE IS ON FIRE!!!!" They both yelled in union.
"WHAAAAT?!?!" Spike, Twilight and Applejack screamed,
"YES!" Lyra yelled,
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Fluttershy had evacuated the animals, as well Pinkie Pie, she was watching the forest perish as white hot tears stream down her yellow muzzle, she was sitting on a stump as the forest was burned down, she choked and sobbed. She couldn't believe what had happen. She was homeless, her animals had no home now, and she was just sitting there, crying and watching hopeless as ever.
She looked up to find her cyan mare friend looking for her, "Fluttershy?! Where the hell are you?!" she called, and Fluttershy refused to say anything. She just cried...
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Actually, It's important stuff like if you want to PM me something important and Copyright shit,
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Title:
*This. Is. War!
(I'm assuming since this is how you spelled it in the description.)
Description:
*author's
*Celestia
*visiting
*auditions
Prologue:
*putrid
They just got what? Did they get wrapping paper? Are they making gifts?
Is this some kind of title? If not, tornadoes should not be capitalized.
*favors
*army
*republic
*alliance
*you
*Equestria
Chapter 1:
colon, not a comma.
*were
Sentence fragment; It should be:
RAINBOW DASH
excessive repetition of 'eating'
Not actually a word in the English language, but if you want to be nit-picky, everyone else spells it as "Eeyup"
again, colon; not a comma.
Semicolons in place of the commas.
"Oh hey Twilight; Spike."
O.o
*push (???)
Let me fix this for you:
PLEASE stop ending every single paragraph (and most sentences) in a comma; This isn't poetry.
This is Singed's diagnosis
Stay shaken, not stirred.
Thank you,
As I said on my other story, DON'T SUGAR COAT MY STORY! I want the cold realization.
And I have a habit of typing a little too fast and I will have to proof read before I publish another chapter. So I need to slow down and take my time like you said huh? As I said about m typing, I actually look on the screen(NOT on the Keyboard) and a few things I actually meant to get wrong! Just to see if you were actually paying attention.
I Shall correct these errors right away and you let me know if anything else is wrong?
'Kay? OKAY!
-Flameriver