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1866548 The pleasure is all mine.
DONT KNOW WHAT TO SAY
ABABAB A I DIDNT KNOW IT WOULD BE THIS VULGAR AAHHHAHAHAHAHA IM NOT EVEN 13 IM 12 AND WHY IS THIS RATED TEEN CUASE IM ALMOST A TEEN
Uh... I think that part towards the end was a bit much. I'm not entirely sure if I want to keep reading this after that.
READ: That was too detailed. Dial it down a bit, please?
1866729 Well, the detail description was by design. It would be hard to convince the reader just how much of problem Bass's existence would be for Twilight. I wanted to convey the fact that Bass has no moral border. She is the embodiment of Twilight's mind that she can't control for now. It would no curse if the bearer doesn't have to learn to control it. Bass is Hyde, and Twilight needs to mature and learn to please her, without ruining her relationships and friendship. Sadly, no one makes the first jump.
Well, Twilight and Dash are perfect to being porn stars
Pinkie playing weird al? My life is complete! *Reads part with Bass and Rainbow* you know what, i think i should read something innocent to calm down, like 50 shades of gray.
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Well, I guess that's OK then. As long as we don't have too many more chapters like this one, I'll be more than happy to keep reading.
(honestly, I only skimmed through the latter part of the chapter, and even that had me wishing that Brain Bleach were real. Hence the suggestion to dial it down at least a little, if there ends up being more chapters like this. Putting immense detail like that in scenes like, well, that, let alone in a story rated TEEN, is going to drive off readers like me.)
1869374 Don't worry. Now that both the reader and Twi knows what might happen to Dash if she doesn't win, that makes this fight for supremacy all the more meaningful.
I know possible worst case scenario: twilight changes back during the night.
What the buck are you doing here twilight, what happened to mistress?
Ummmm... She... was... kidnapped by Molestia?
1870897 "Don't question my physical appearance!"
Le Whip!
"Sorry Mistress!"
Aaand there's the Mature rating.
Okay, I liked the concept overall, but you took Chapter 4 WAY too far (as I mentioned in my last comments). And with the Mature rating now on this story, I don't have much intent to keep reading anymore. Sorry, but if there is in fact going to be more like, uh, that, then I'm done.
TL;DR 500 points for concept, minus 400 for execution. Likely will not keep reading.
Ok i know twi will not go that fa, i really hope she can find a loop hole to this becasue everything have a loop hole........... wait a min....... there 2 personly in one body, if twi make a new body with out a soul she can put bass in it. ( ZSEWQ THE WOLF YOU BUCKING GUNIS YOU JUST FIND A LOOP HOLE IN THIS HA! )
1878967 I put the mature since chapter 4 more seemed rather on that side, not because I plan to go down that rabbit hole any further.
She is the Dash conqueror
Good work,
I figured the other Beatkin was either was Rarity or Octaiva.
Though that did get me thinking, How power full are they really mock one for speed and they can mess with sound, but to what end?
I also wounder if the really need to play initiation I mean I know this is a story about Twilight but I am just wondering if any new Beatkin are just accidents like Twilight?
I held of commenting until I saw what Bass Cannon could do.
this was an interesting story to begin with the music like cures.
I figured it would be a Jeckel vs. Hyde thing but the problem is they are both control freaks.
I for see this not ending well for either of them.
But still liked all the description in chapter 4 and how you impressed upon us Twilight's urgent need for supremacy.
But I hope it will be a fun ride to read, at lest to read.
By the way I take this story as it is. I know it is not to be part of the main cannon and I am just poking fun here when I say it but may I just say,
If the Beatkin can see changeling then why didn't Rarity see the fake Candace? Ha!
Like I said I am enjoying reading this story and I hope you continue.
Good luck in the future
1882918 Rarity did see Chrisylis, but if she said anything, Celestia would have found out and every single Sister would have been banished, including her . I am back to writing the story after New Year's Eve, so stay tuned.
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I had to read that part four times before I could focus enough to edit it. You don't even want to know.
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O_O
Molestia is most pleased.
ALL THIS TIME I THOUGHT I FAVOURITED THIS AND IT HAS BEEN UPDATING WITHOUT ME KNOWING?!
*kneels, shakes fists at the sky*
NOOOOOOOOOOOO!
.....Wut.
I mean......What.
I have no words.....
Submissive Rainbow Dash.....hmmmm....
Not sure yet if want....
hmmm...i liked dashie as the dominant one.....
but that was awsome