Not gonna lie this could be better . Both chapters so far seem rushed and both are actually kind of hard to read. Try using some paragraph breaks and maybe adding more substance to your chapters. That being said its a good story but it could be a great one with more time and attention to the details that seem to be missing.

I agree with the above comment. Plus, the characters just seem too... Robotic. For example, when Rapter called them all weak, you would expect Rainbow to defend her honor with a comeback or challenge, but nothing comes. Also, when he meets Spike, he doesn't even care that this strange creature just picked him up without permission. And then there's the fact that none of them seemed even slightly wary that this giant ship just came out of nowhere, and this stranger just asked them to get inside it with no precautions whatsoever.

I would really recommend a rewrite, because, no offense, this story is really looking like a piece of crap.

It seems like a list considering that almost all the places a . should be there is and and i agree with the previous comments

Bro, slow down, more details, and read it outloud to find mistakes, but I like the idea