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3498487 Huh? Can you point out the spot? As I said on my note, I rewrote this so I may have missed a lot of errors.
Hey there man! Finally got around to reading this. And I must say, that I'm a tad bit confused on some parts. I can't really remember specifics, other than the thing involving the guards coming on the train. Are they supposed to be some sort of bodyguard escort group for John and company?
Now... I would like to share my thoughts.
[ 1. ] The friendship between Celestia and John was some what of a surprise for me. I mean, I know that John has been the one that has been keeping in contact with the Princesses instead of Twilight, I just wasn't expecting Celestia to be so open to John like that. That's a good thing though, and I'm very much interested in seeing how their friendship develops.
[ 2. ] The whole exchange between Hilda, John, and "G" was interesting as well. Whatever Hilda's contractors wanted with John is still left as a mystery. So that adds another aspect to the ever growing suspense and mystery behind your story. And I'm assuming that was a cyanide capsule that she broke in her mouth, right?
[ 3. ] Dang. Rainbow Dash got banged up pretty good. From the sound of it, her wing seems to be in pretty bad shape. Also, even though Luna may have been a little harsh with Twilight about her 'predicament', I feel that talk was needed. Twilight has been having doubts that she will ever get her use of magic back. John may have gotten her out of her pit of despair, but Luna gave her a kick in the flank to let her know that since she is The Element of Magic, she can't afford to give up. Like Luna said, in summary, if Twilight gives up then everything is put into jeopardy. Equestria, the world, and harmony itself at stake here; that means Twilight needs to ensure that she tries everything possible to figure out how to fix her magic problem.
[ 4. ] Finally, we have the explosion at the end. Things look like they're about to get ugly, aren't they?
Good chapter, sorry for the late read/review, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
~ Super-Brony12
its good so far keep up the good work
Please update. thank you
4147849 Yeah, I sh ould, I kind of let this on a cliffhanger, didn't I?
Ahahaha...
I will update this at some point, don't you worry.
Thanks
So many twist to the story. You are good at this Bubbles, this is a great story.
And having Rainbow mas with John like that soo good. But I think there may be some feelings there that Dasie has for him and is playing it off. I may be wrong, but with Rainbow who knows.