That is extremely well written! (Not sure if it is based off of a story that was already published or not) But if it wasn't... then good show!

--Just needs more ponies

I will watch and see where this goes.

>>17803421780342

Well, I'm glad to have impressed!

What did you like about it, if you don't mind me asking?

Oh my!

>>17803571780357

Is this a promising thing?

>>17803651780365

I will be reading this as soon as I have time.

Bad Horse has been notified...

This is very promising indeed.

Omahgerd... Following this. A little too high continuity winks quotient, the Rosa-Morrison numbers are flashing, but very good pastische of the original writing, and nice to see crossovers with the classics!

>>17803501780350

Its classic feel, witticism, choice wording and all-around flow.

I saw this and I came. You earn my like and favorite good sir.

Sherlock Holmes: like a boss...scratch that; is the boss.

>>17805381780538

I concur. He rather is.

A very entertaining read, I'm interested in seeing where this story goes.

Keep up the good work :D

>>17805861780586

Glad! Mind if I ask why it was so entertaining? Or could improve on, rather

Sherlock Holmes and Watson in Equestria...

Watson in Equestria...

WELL WRITTEN Watson in Equestria...

ALL MY YES

>>17806121780612

All of my thanks to you, good fellow!

>>17803421780342

Actually, I gave your comment a thought, and are you thinking of writer's The Casebook of Sherclop Pones? Because that is rather a sound piece.

This is excellently written. You forget halfway through you're actually reading an MLP fanfic!

Can't wait to read the next chapter!

Sherlock Holmes meets Discord... Oh the possibilities...

After reading the first chapter I have only one thing to say

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This ranks up there with...well, a lot of things I can't remember at the moment. Despite my lack of sleep, however, I can tell you with some confidence that you are brilliant. Simply brilliant.

I like this.  It is definitely written in the style of Sir Aurthur Conan Doyle.  

Okay, let's take it from the top:

1) Discord is running around mid-Victorian England.  This is not a good thing;

2) Holmes and Watson are now in Equestria.  Given the urban location Watson describes, they are most likely in Canterlot;

3) Have they stumbled across a human who is enslaving Equestrians for some reason? Or is Discord trying to crossbreed Terran equines with Equestrian ones?

4) Rainbow Dash has again proved that there is no situation so bad that she cannot make it worse with her short temper and lack of forethought.

Just to add, I loved Watson's description of crossing what I presume was some magical portal similar to a wormhole or Einstein-Rosen bridge.  Fifty years before Einstein, it would be hard for a writer to find the words to describe the experience but he did well.

I'll be following this unique crossover.  Well done on this start!

This is an amazingly well told story. I don't think many can pull of this style of writing but you do an amazing job of it. Take my faves and my likes, do you have anything to add Rarity?

Why does this not have more likes?

>>17806081780608

Things I liked

1) The pacing: You have remarkably achieved a style that presents the breadth of details one would expect from a Holmes story, without sacrificing your readers attention spans. Not an easy feat by any stretch of the imagination.

2) Maturity: Currently you have not insulted my intelligence as a reader. Its clear from your writing style that you have put a lot of effort into your work. Additionally your story seem to have been well thought out and planned from a development stand point, which is always a plus.

Areas for improvement / Caution

1) Characters with purpose: Currently you are not guilty of this writing pitfall. The Holmes and MLP universes are stock full with interesting characters. Often times in these types of stories many writers attempt to include the "whole gang" as it were. Characters with purpose and meaning in the events of a story are infinitely more engaging then pure fan service. But if your current work is anything to judge, then I don't foresee this being an issue in your story.

I hope that answers some of your questions :)

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Unfortune twists of fate, I suppose. There are no dislikes, and the comments are exclusively positive, so I'm pretty pleased all the same!

>>17806681780668

Oh the possibilities indeed

>>17806761780676

Well I do hope you read the second as well!

This chapter actully had me bouncing up and down in my seat the entire chase scene as well at the ending!

Oooooh! i can't wait for the next chapter! THE Sherlock Holmes telling of Rainbow Dash and Twillight!!! This is just to good!!!

*Phew* Now that i got that out of my system all i can say is that i applaude your EXELLENT writing, you are so very faithful to theh way the original SHerlock Holmes stories were written, and i just love how much detail you put into describing the characters as well as their surroundings and landscapes.

Also, i really like how true you are to Sherlock and Watsons character, you write them just like they are in the books, i can't wait to see how Sherlocks rather uniqe personality and with all his quirks will react to the rather colorful bunch of the main six personalities.

This is by far one of the most exiting MLP fics i have read, and me being a massive Sherlock Holmes fan makes it just all so more wonderful!

I've, regretfully, never read any of the Sherlock Holmes novels... but if they're anywhere near as spectacularly done as this is, my friend, then i'll have no choice but to pick them up some time soon.

I too haven't read any Sherlock books, but I have watched the Granada Television series. It was so easy to insert Holmes and Watson from the series into the scenes painted here. In fact I'm going to go so far to acuse you off using that as inspiration in your descriptions off their expressions!

Anyway what I want to say is Jolly Good Show so far, and godspeed for the rest your endeavor.

Yeeees..

Been waiting for this; I look forward to reading its final form!  

Wow, I do like.

Rainbow lost the instance she tried to match Holmes's glare, it's the original Glare which batman somehow inherited.

Old habits die hard apparently.

Did Watson use Holmes' hit as a kind of resuscitator to restart his heart or something? I've never heard of anyone suffering from DTs go down like that so it can't have been him missing his time.

Meanwhile... I suspect that Dash has decided that she's going to give Rarity a run for her bits when it comes to vanity.

The sundial issue interests me considerably, as it should.  Holmes is too practised an observer to get that wrong.  The fact that the university has a similar feature to a square in Canterlot suggests that this is a journey that has been made before and not just recently either.

A for the author.

Excellent, an update!

I'm gonna try the Holmesian approach to breaking up a squabble, the next time my friends are over.

Only Sherlock Holmes could react in such an awsome way of seeing mini unicorns and Pegasi for the first time.

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It works, always. And you saw it here first.

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Close. Very close. Don't stop what you're doing, by the way. I love this running commentary

>>18442531844253

They are the hardest to kill.

>>18444831844483

Thank you, old boy!

>>18463681846368

Lets hope that it is the first of many!

Sherlock Holmes and My Little Pony? AND done in the proper Doyle (or should that be Watsonian?) style?

I will be following this story, sir, and vastly enjoying it.

I feel somewhat obligated to read this... for whatever reason.

Air Robert was so close.

Ummm.... I don't generally do this but this one stuck out, and I thought it was funny, but shouldn't that be Sir Robert?

This is brilliant. You are matching Doyle's style perfectly, and writing Holmes like no one else. I greatly look forward to future chapters.

A challenger appears!

This certainly got my attention.

I daresay that these particular events in this piece of ficion facinate me so. Quite amusing, if I may say. I'll be eagerly awaiting further updates with restless patience.

Wonderful, wonderful!

>>18840851884085 Also,

I must be clear of mind, while Watson here, well, his small penchant for the drink has turned somewhat .”

There's a space before the dot, which makes it break into the next line on some settings.

No other spelling errors noticed, though.

Can I preserve you? For SCIENCE? I need more of this in my life, though I did notice the good doctor had made a minimum of 2 typos this chapter. Onwards I go, and may the rest of this be at the same quality.

You are giving me a headache. The high pitched squeeing sound issuing from my mouth has not stopped since I found this.

I'm Dr Watson, the rock N roll detective!

I do cocaaaaiiiiine!

I've rather forgotten. This is queer, is it not?”

She rolled her eyes.

“Yeah, there are a few ponies doing that these days."

Gay joke?

Holy crap. Holy fucking crap! You are officially my hero. You wrote well written Sherlock Holmes in Equestria! Classic Sherlock Holmes from the books, in Equestria! I... I... I think I love you!

It is Sherlock Holmes all right, i keep losing where they are. The story is good!

This is, without any amount of qualification, awesome

>>18442531844253  Not with modern fMRI!  You can find the brain regions activated during the habitual impulse and get them cut right on out!  

A few minor issues.

Firstly, your spelling of ‘Somerset’. The Brits seem to take pride in the fact that very little of their language is phonetically spelled.

There is also the issue of the ‘baronette’. There is a rank of ‘baronet’, which is the lowest ranking hereditary title in the English peerage system. There is also a ‘banneret’, but this refers to a knight who has been granted the honour of flying his own banner into battle, not a member of the landed gentry, and so I doubt you meant this.

“We were expecting this sort of reception, but the voracity by which he approached me spurned Holmes into action.”

I should think you meant ‘spurred’ here, what with  ‘spurn’ meaning ‘reject’, whilst you clearly meant ‘encourage’

Other than those, I didn’t see too many other errors, and none that were too objectionable (although, were I born of London , I may have objected more to your forgetting the capital ‘L’ that it deserves as a proper noun).

What I did see, however, was a delightful story that seems to almost fully capture the very spirit of a Sherlock  Holmes novel.  Bravo.

Okay, minor sense of ambiguity here. Ignoring the spelling, as I believe I have already mentioned that, your usage of 'Summerset' is confusing.

I had assumed you meant 'Somerset' - the county in the south of England. But at different times you appear to be referring to the county and possibly some sort of settlement within it.

Of course, that would seem to be no longer an issue, as we have now left England, but the point bears raising.

Other than that, I can say that you, ser, have good reason to be proud of your skill as an author. Mimicking the style of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle so perfectly is an accomplishment few can lay claim to. My only suggestion for improvement would be to, perhaps, be cautious of your penchant for capitalising random words.

Your writing is awesome and you should feel awesome. This left my mouth hanging in awe.

You, my friend, are awesome. I am impressed that you have 100% thumbs. This writing is amazingly good and you should feel good.

Something that bugs me whenever someone with a gun is unwittingly thrust into an alternate universe: how many bullets do they have left?

Holmes really doesn't like it when people or ponies interrupt him.

Well, this should be interesting.

>>>“The Devil, sir! He stalks the hills of Summerset! Ten feet tall, at least! Eyes of fire and rage! Oh I shall see it in my nightmares, on the day I die! It had the tail of a snake, but an arm of a lion, and another of some vile bird. And the head of a goat, sir! Oh and the horns, one cannot forget the horns!” >>>

Alondro's eye twitches.  The building he's in shakes as a tremor of seething rage races through ever atom of his body.  A moment later he rises into the air as a burst of limitless power atomizes the area around him for a radius of 1,000 miles while from his throat explodes a mixed piercing scream and thundrous roar resonates across time, space, and dimensions, "DIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSCOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORD!!!"

In an instant later, Alondro is in the Summerset hills, and punches Discord square in the face

Alondro is currently rather miffed at Discord, in case you couldn't tell.  

This... is... so... AWESOME!!!  

And I hope they kill Discord.  Kill him to death, even!  

Also, are Discord and the weird old guy one and the same?  It's tough for me to be sure, because the weird old guy was emanating pure hatred, while Discord is more insane.  Is this another villain?  Or is this version of Discord much darker?

I ejaculated

I wondered if we would see this little nugget of outdated language.

165:0 like to dislike?

How is this possible?

Paper_mate_Pony: I have been recently introduced to (and plowing through) the 1984-1994 "Adventures of Sherlock Holmes" series with Jeremy Brett as Holmes and David Burke/Edward Hardwicke as Watson.  I didn't have much exposure to the stories before this...oh, the new Sherlock series with Cumberbatch is really awesome, yeah, but I guess not "traditional".

Then you write this and it's really spot-on.  Favs and Likes for you, good sir.  Just don't let this languish if you can help it...the problem with writing a good story is now you have to finish it!

This is... really spectacular.  The style is dead to rights, and even things like Watson's rememberance of the ponys' speech stood out.

So thanks for that.

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Fancy seeing you here, Danny boy.

Loving this so much. I love how you use the language style to deal with MLP. It just works.

One note: "I guessed it might be the same size, and of similar gate"

"Gate" should be "gait", if you mean how she walks.

This is fantastic. MOAR PLZ! But no rush. Write at your own pace.

Ah the joy of finding yet another fantastic literary crossover.

Instant favourite; I hope you will update soon.

Oh hell yes!

Bested by the potty break, Holmes old boy!

DO MY EYES DECEIVE ME, OR DID THIS STORY UPDATE?!

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Wait, so this isn't taking place during the normal timeline of the show?

I'm now confused. Shouldn't this have an alternate reality tag now?

Or am I just incredibly dense?

EEEEEEEEEEE! It updated! Loved the chapter! It was awesome to see Sherlock go all... putting-the-clues-all-together on Rainbow.

I think I need a yardstick to measure the width of the smile I currently sport.

I feel the sudden urge to buy a deerstalker hat, a pipe, and take a quick walk to make "observations" with a magnifying glass.

Fantastic chapter. Watson's writ is pretentious as ever but it is of course the tale, not the narrator that draws interest.

The base was classical in its nature, and from which four, solid columns, wound like a helix, rose toward the centre.

Holy crap on a cracker it updated!

Very nice... you've captured the tone of the Holmes canon quite well.

Oh, what I wouldn't have given to have seen Rainbow's face when Holmes started laying down the induction.

The "elderly gentleman" must be Discord.  I'm assuming that his 'reform' was a veneer only and he struck when it suited him, deposing the Princesses.  Canterlot does seem to be partially abandoned at the moment and the destruction of knowledge would suit the mindset of the God of Chaos, explaining the hidden nature of Twilight's current library.

The case of the sundial is an interesting one and it implies two things:

1) Discord has visited Earth long before, at least from the Equestrian time-line;

2) Either (a) he can move through time as well as space and dimensions or (b) there is a time-speed dissonance between Equestria and Earth where centuries in the land of ponies are just a matter of a day on Earth.

It's still guesswork what his ultimate plan is here.  Knowing Discord, there may be no ultimate plan, only a whimsical desire to cause disruption.  That doesn't make him any easier to anticipate and vanquish, of course.  If anything the lack of any logical pattern to his actions actually makes him harder to beat.

Awsome! Sherlocks cheeky English gentleman attitude remains strong even in front of the goddess of the moon herself!

By Celestia i love that man!!

I always love the way Holmes casually explains his elaborate deductions.

This is one of the best fanfictions I've ever read. Aside from a few minor grammatical and formatting errors, it's practically perfect. I don't know why so many writers seem to use "it's" and "its" interchangeably - it's a small detail, but one I like to nitpick. Also some of Rainbow's dialect ("we need to get this lot to Luna") sounds a little more British than the way she speaks on the show, but again it's a subtle nuance and not a very big issue.

I'm glad to hear that updates will be more frequent. Know that your work is very much appreciated and I look forward to more.

Cheers!

Okay, so let me see if I can get this straight.

Discord, an unknown gentleman, and what appears to be the Canterlot Royal Guard are stealing horses from the English gentry, while a rebellion of some sorts has forced Luna into hiding, emptied Canterlot, and done something to Celestia ("we'll find her, kay?" comes to mind). In the meantime, a university sundial has been sent to Equestria's distant past, the drunk Welshman is actually much more than he lets on and is very good with levers, and a hit of cocaine appears to have cured a bullet would with a possible mild case of deadness. On top of that, this is all to much awesome for me to reasonably handle.

Did I miss anything?

I'm so enjoying this!

Grammatical note: patients are people being treated by a doctor. The virtue of waiting for something without expressing fear or anger about the delay is patience.

One cannot make a judgement on events when these events do not, for all intensive purposes, exist in one’s realm.

Hum! Wasn't expecting an alternate timeline here.

The first two chapters definitely seemed more Holmsian than this one, which I suppose is appropriate since this ain't London no more. Still, y'got Watson down right. Holmes himself definitely seems to be the more upbeat, energetic Holmes of post-Reichenbach Falls – or is that the pony-charm rubbing off on him?

El-drunko guy seems to be destined to become history's first Brony at this rate.

Am somewhat surprised that no one has commented on the description of the "old man" yet. It's been awhile since I've read the tales, but if he's whom I think he is, well done, sir.

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Holmes has rubbed off on you: I can say that much. In a good way.

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Oh, Syn. One would think I was leaving these out for you

Fixed and done.

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>>21705302170530 Yes, I do think it needs the alternate universe tag now.  Clearly, the entire history since "Return of Harmony" has been changed.  

The weathered look of the castle suggests that significant time has passed since this 'rebellion', almost certainly brought about by Discord, perhaps the Changelings as well working as co-conspirators, hence the lack of the entire Canterlot population whom the Changelings would imprison and drain of love.  But, Luna is still free and she is herself, meaning that there are two possibilities:  1) The events during the Summer Sun celebration took place as in the show and then the rebellion and Discord's actions occurred.  However, given the clue of the sundial, there is the more sinister possibility:  2)  After escaping his stone prison, Discord went to our world and enlisted some evil assistance, at some point travelling back in time with the sundial (for reasons unknown, possibly a spatio-temporal anchor to a specific time point and location between our universe and Equestria?) a thousand years ago where he began to spread his wickedness in secret.  Perhaps in this altered time-line Luna was never sealed.  Perhaps she won and Celestia is imprisoned.  The rebellion may have been against Luna in this instance.  Note that it is night.  Note that Watson feels as though the night is abnormal.  I wonder if there is ever day?  

But that is only one possibility.  Celestia could also have been captured by Discord and/or Chrysalis at some point and only Luna remains.  The next chapter, however, will clarify everything in that regard once we hear a little of her speach.  The most subtle of hints that she is in her Nightmare persona erases many of the other possible paths.

Interestingly, the lack of random and 'chaotic' objects other than the sundial might indicate that this is not the Discord we know.  His actions so far, assuming the 'elderly gentleman' is in fact him, suggest a complex plan far beyond what an impetuous and illogical god of chaos would be able to put into action.  

It may be instead that the 10-foot demon who so easily moved the sundial is Discord, and the eldery gentleman is none other than Professor Moriarty, who has somehow gotten Discord in his power, likely with some dark rite if this is so; akin, perhaps to the occult demon-summoning rituals which interested Arthur Conan Doyle.  Those rituals, assuming they functioned as intended, would be able to bind even Discord to the will of the summoner, providing that the price for the summoning was met.

I do lend some credence to this notion, given that time-line alteration while preventing a causal paradox is quite difficult even for a highly ordered and intellient mind.  Since Twilight and Rainbow Dash still know each other, it must be the case that certain events within the old time line were preserved, and deliberately at that, otherwise random chance would cause the likelihood of those events to drop to nigh-impossible.

Now, as to the plan itself, I cannot for the life of me make heads or tails of it as yet.  There are still too few obvious clues, and the stealing or alteration of Earth horses is quite strange.

In any case, this is one of the best Pony fanfics I've read in quite some time.  You have no idea how dull the repetitious and irrational romance stories, X-pony is really a changeling, vampire-angst, and illogical alt-universe fics are becoming!  I especially have come to despise those that expect me to believe that when, in a world were the griffons are violent, pony-eating warriors, the dragons are violent pony-eating monsters, and practically every race hates ponies, and even some ponies are traitors... that Ponyville is pretty much the same as in the show and the show's timeline still happened in the same way.  *grits teeth*  YOU CANNOT CHANGE THE ENTIRE WORLD AND LEAVE JUST ONE SECTION THE SAME FOR PLOT CONVENIENCE!!  

You haven't done that here, dear author.  No, I can see that you've meticulously planned out this darkened, dismal Equestria and each and every detail to explain what things were allowed or manipulated into being by the evil puppetmaster of this entire affair.

As I so often say, planning a story to ensure internal continuity and avoid plot holes are critical.  It's quite apparent that you've woven quite an intricate, ornate tapestry of a tale.

Not to be pernickety but with regards to the 'monogram on typewriters', it's a monograph (essentially an academic article) as opposed to a monogram

>>21931262193126 Not to be persnickety, but it's persnickety, not pernickety.

Also, sorry for being a sarcastic jackass, the opportunity was just too good.

Update, SCORE!!

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You certainly have a way of emulating the style of SACD. The story reads like a dream.

Well of course, Dr Watson.

Good to see a new chapter!