Still not sure how I feel about the Author's Note thing... . Oh well, new chapter! Have at it. Happy Holidays and all that.

Also, for some reason, it doesn't look like my total word count updated... .

Edit: Nope, word total updated now. Never mind.

1844860 Fifteen drinks is kinda drastic at three in the afternoon... .

Your such a tease

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NotATree

Fifteen drinks is kinda drastic at three in the afternoon... .

I abuse ellipses, why I said it was an unrecommended drinking game. I didn't have any in the Introduction chapter, save for one in the story description and two in that chapters Author's Notes. As the characters become more sure of their selves in the situations they are in the number will drop because there will be less uneasy trailing off. But still, expect to see a lot of dots from me... .

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chaosking243

Your such a tease

I never I said I wasn't. Some people like that you know. I guess you'll just have to stick around for the payoff... .

Sorry, I didn't like the chapter per se. It feels like introduction for readers to "BDSM 101 for dummies and horses" (It only lacks explicit mention of SSC), and anyway I'm pretty sure people who are still reading this know all this stuff already. It doesn't advance the story or characters too far.

Enough of theory. Practice time. Show, don't tell

i like where this is going

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Librarian

Sorry, I didn't like the chapter per se. It feels like introduction for readers to "BDSM 101 for dummies and horses" (It only lacks explicit mention of SSC), and anyway I'm pretty sure people who are still reading this know all this stuff already. It doesn't advance the story or characters too far.

Readers may know these things but Rarity didn't. Also I have learned not to assume things about people. Someone may have liked the first chapter because they enjoy literary BDSM but don't know how it works in real life. I know I was one of those people who had some slightly wrong ideas until I did some honest research and got into The Scene. Also, this is an alternate world, they may have different "Play Rules" so I needed to establish that they are very close if not the same to ours. One thing I didn't cover that I just couldn't quite work in was how magic effects the play but I'll get to that soon enough.
Also I want to take the time to point out that Twilight kind of half-way covered Safe-Sane-Consensual, that is a failing on her part for not going over it completely but she did hit the most important part: it being Rarity's choice.

I understand wanting to get to the action but I am the type of writer that feels these little bits of character building are very important to the overall narrative. But don't worry about having to see this kind of thing for the rest of the main six. Rarity and Twilight did talk "off screen" before but since Rarity was so nervous she needed to go over it again. And my a-fore mentioned reasons outside of the story. The others however... well, you'll just have to wait and see.
I could have used Fluttershy for this chapter instead but, um, well, she's Fluttershy. I don't think she'd be willing to try this sort of thing until at least a few more of her friends have given it a whirl.

I appreciate your feedback and I thought about it before writing this chapter but in the end I felt it was necessary for a number of reasons.

Librarian

Enough of theory. Practice time. Show, don't tell

Chapter two is very much a "show" chapter. Just, please stand by.

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DavidPony

i like where this is going

Glad to hear it! I'm sure you'll like it even more when it's there.

Keep it up!
Also: this = you:
http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m0ebelQjQa1r1cmfg.jpg
Fantastically written!

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Mane 6

Keep it up!
Also: this = you:
http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m0ebelQjQa1r1cmfg.jpg
Fantastically written!

Thank you for the complement.
And yes, so far, still no regrets!

I have to admit, I was pretty bored after I realized there'd be a huge introduction to BDSM and probably no clop in this chapter. However, after the first wave of disappointment was gone, I enjoyed it very much. Most guidelines you named were nothing new to me, however, I often appreciate this introducing a character into the scene, instead of hanging them above a pit filled with freshly imported tentacle monsters from Japan and spanking them with a cat o' nine tails until they bleed out, if you can forgive me this little exxageration (I assume we both know sometimes it isn't one.)
I couldn't write something like this chapter. I'd become too excited by the 'fun' part and not be able to write this introduction properly. However, it was done very well, and I like this idea with the alter ego to get more into the whole scene. I haven't thought of this before until now, probably because I'm a pervert at heart and don't need to get into the scene first xD.

Kudos

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Luminous Shot

I have to admit, I was pretty bored after I realized there'd be a huge introduction to BDSM and probably no clop in this chapter. However, after the first wave of disappointment was gone, I enjoyed it very much. Most guidelines you named were nothing new to me, however, I often appreciate this introducing a character into the scene, instead of hanging them above a pit filled with freshly imported tentacle monsters from Japan and spanking them with a cat o' nine tails until they bleed out, if you can forgive me this little exxageration (I assume we both know sometimes it isn't one.)

I object! You can't spank with a cat o' nine tails. The very act of using the cat makes it whipping. This is basic stuff here you know.
But, seriously, yes, info dump chapter. Didn't originally plan on it but I just let Twi and Rarity talk in my head and it happened out that way and I felt it was for the betterment of the story as a whole even if there wasn't any real action. I also worked in a few bits important to the over all plot that may not be as easily caught the first read though or even seem that important until more information comes to light.

Luminous Shot

I couldn't write something like this chapter. I'd become too excited by the 'fun' part and not be able to write this introduction properly. However, it was done very well, and I like this idea with the alter ego to get more into the whole scene. I haven't thought of this before until now, probably because I'm a pervert at heart and don't need to get into the scene first xD.

Kudos

We all have different writing styles and pose, it is what makes reading such a joy. I like to think that I am very strong in dialog and location description with my weak points being keeping my tenses the same throughout a paragraph. I am sure I've got a few more than just that one but that is my major one that I'm constantly working on.

As for the "alter ego" as you put it Role-Playing is one of my big kinks so you can expect to see it a lot in the coming chapters. And it really does help some people get more into the action if they have some mental barrier, no matter how thin, to hide behind.
Thanks for the comment and complements, still working on the next chapter, no ETA just yet so please be patient.

Okay, I don't know If this is intentional or not , but is it supposed to say "sleep over" here? ->

to forget our last little group sleep ever.

Also I am loving this! More please!

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Compass Rose

Okay, I don't know If this is intentional or not , but is it supposed to say "sleep over" here? ->

Yes, thankyou. IT has been fixed now.,

Compass Rose

Also I am loving this! More please!

More is on the way! I'm having a little trouble getting the scene to play out like I want it too but I'll come, don't worry!
But not before next year at this rate... .

Hey vladspellbinder. would you mind sending the next draft to me through FimFiction? I forgot the password to my dummy email account I created for the story, my ipad ate the note I made containing the password and I can't use my legitimate account because it's swamped with mail as is and my parents sometimes comb through it with me. Just copy paste it to a message and message me. I'm twiddling my thumbs while I wait for uni to start up again, so feel free to send it to me whenever, alright?

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Knight of Cerebus

Hey vladspellbinder. would you mind sending the next draft to me through FimFiction? I forgot the password to my dummy email account I created for the story, my ipad ate the note I made containing the password and I can't use my legitimate account because it's swamped with mail as is and my parents sometimes comb through it with me. Just copy paste it to a message and message me. I'm twiddling my thumbs while I wait for uni to start up again, so feel free to send it to me whenever, alright?

Still working on the next chapter, but I'll send it along via message instead of e-mail when it's ready. I'm back working again now though so that's less time I have in my week-days to work on things so it may be a few more days before it's ready. -_-

1893913 whenever you can is fine. Don't feel like you have to rush yourself, either. I'd rather a well-written chapter in three months than a lousy chapter tomorrow. Also don't sweat the grammar and so forth too much. It's my job to catch any mistakes you make; yours is to keep the story interesting and everypony IC. Which is to say, don't sweat it. Looking forward to your first draft!

Damn this story is good! Could use some more chapters though

2022994 chaosking243

Damn this story is good! Could use some more chapters though

Thankyou, and yes, sorry about that everyone. Work cut about a month and a half off a project deadline so I've been putting in a lot of overtime to get it done and that leaves me little time to write. Things should be settling out soon so hopefully I'll be able to get back into the swing of it again.

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A month and a half off? holy shit, that must suck!

2027391 chaosking243

A month and a half off? holy shit, that must suck!

In ways I can not describe. Me and the rest of the people on my team have been scrambling all month to get this done. Our only saving grace has been that another group don't have their stuff ready and we would have had to wait on them so it's given us more time.

Maybe two, three weeks I should be back to my "normal" work load and have a bit more time for writing.

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That really sucks, I wish you the best of luck in meeting the deadline.

Hey. Hey. You there. Hey.

Write more. Royal orders.

2116416 cherryfourier

Hey. Hey. You there. Hey.

Write more. Royal orders.

Who, me? Royal orders? Eigh, what's the worst that can happen? I hear the moon is a nice place this time of year... .

In all seriousness I've tried to get back to writing but haven't been able to find the time for various reasons. Not sure when I'll be able to get back around to this but I'm trying.

This still alive?

2513063 chaosking243

This still alive?

Kinda. A lot of stuff has been going on these past few months so I haven't really been able to dredge up enough energy to work on it. However, because the way my mind won't shut up about things, I've got sketches for a couple of chapters (the next one and some other later ones) tumbling around so when I do finally get around to an update it'll be a big one.
Right now I'm kind of at a little block with the current chapter, as the dialog and actions just don't mesh like I want so I'm fiddling with it all to get something that doesn't seem forced yet delivers on expectations and desires.
I am also touching up the previous chapters, not anything near a full rewrite but I'm trying to fix tenses and spelling mistakes and so on so new readers will have a bit easier time getting caught up. I have added a little something to the Introduction, at the end. When I upload the new chapter it'll all get updated at once.
Hopefully soon, but, well, I keep getting thrown curve balls so until that stops... .

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thanks for the answer

Just checking in, how's the writers block going?

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Thankfully the block is gone. I've got a good draft of the next chapter and just need to add some polish. However that various events in my life have taken another swing for the busy. You get one thing done two more pop up, that sort of thing. As evidenced by me still being up at this forsaken hours. -_-

I really wanted to put out two chapters for my next update, but I'll probably go ahead and put out the Rarity scene within the next few days... . Hopefully.

No sleep for me. *giggles, hair springing up out of place.*
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Know that feel. These last few weeks, finish one exam, another pops up, finish all the exams, lab reports abound, get those done, assignment time, finish that all, exams again. It's a vicious cycle.