While the scars of the War will forever remain, Schneeblume has been helped along by the three Crusaders over the years. Now, she must lay to rest some more demons that have haunted her. To do so, she must return home to where it started: Alemaneia.
One day, the Crusaders happen upon Ponyville’s newest, specialty flower vendor: a young mare from Alemaneia named Schneeblume. They think she’s hiding something. Turns out she is, though not in a way they expected at all.
In a world without bacon, five humans find themselves trapped... grazing on mother bucking dandelions. Friendship is magic. Too bad none of these jerks are friends.
The Cutie Mark Crusaders find the unexpected when exploring in the Everfree Forest. Something they are morally obligated to help. However, it may be more of a challenge than they think.
Aside from an error here and an error there. This seems like it has potential and I would actualy like to see where it might go. Take my Fav/Track and know this... I'll be keeping an eye out for slips. ...
(However, as with the before mentioned errors... Well, here's what I believe I spotted.(And that is a huge 'if' by the way as I may or may not be as blind as a bat when it comes to spotting errors in writing. But hey, what can you do?))
A Solid grey cylinder popped out of the pile with a vigorous force.
That capitalized 'S' shouldn't be there.
"Now look here little sis, I know your curious about things out side’a Ponyville,”
Umm... not to be rude but I believe that out side is actually supposed to be outside.
Trapped for over twenty years with nothing to eat but a flower that could regenerate and would conveniently recycle the air the whole time, allowing her to survive? Ehh, I've heard stranger things. I hope it had a lot of water inside it though or she would have shriveled up long ago. One thing bothers me though. Did she have a place to, ahem, GO or did "Reggie" eliminate that basic need while she was in there eating him? Or is this one of the, "Because, magic" plot-holes that no one cares about.
1741697 I figured the "because magic" clause is the reason there is such a diverse array of fanfics for this show. Reggie is as logical as the poison joke is in this world if you ask me. As for her "expelling of waste", I didn't really find it necessary to delve into that, considering it might actually put people off. And besides, Discord never needed to "do his business" while encased in stone for a thousand years (not like he had much choice). These are only plot-holes if you over analyze the story, rather than approach it for what it really is, a fan fiction about ponies. As for the water thing, I realize now that I should have gone more in depth into Reggies "abbilities", like storing enough water for this pony to just barely evade dehydration, but again, I didn't think it to be a drastic thing to worry about. I appreciate the feed back and all in all hope your at least enjoying the story
Haven't read it, but you might want to fix the typo in your title.
1735859 Off to a great start -_-
Scootaloo's reaction to meeting a new pony in a suspicious location: BOOT TO THE HEAD.
BRILLIANT!
This looks interesting. Gonna track and see where it goes.
Aside from an error here and an error there. This seems like it has potential and I would actualy like to see where it might go.
Take my Fav/Track and know this...
I'll be keeping an eye out for slips.
...
(However, as with the before mentioned errors... Well, here's what I believe I spotted.(And that is a huge 'if' by the way as I may or may not be as blind as a bat when it comes to spotting errors in writing. But hey, what can you do?))
That capitalized 'S' shouldn't be there.
Umm... not to be rude but I believe that out side is actually supposed to be outside.
1736374 Thanks for the assist! I kind of rushed through the proof reading of this so that's on me.
Interesting.
Trapped for over twenty years with nothing to eat but a flower that could regenerate and would conveniently recycle the air the whole time, allowing her to survive? Ehh, I've heard stranger things. I hope it had a lot of water inside it though or she would have shriveled up long ago. One thing bothers me though. Did she have a place to, ahem, GO or did "Reggie" eliminate that basic need while she was in there eating him? Or is this one of the, "Because, magic" plot-holes that no one cares about.
1741697 I figured the "because magic" clause is the reason there is such a diverse array of fanfics for this show. Reggie is as logical as the poison joke is in this world if you ask me. As for her "expelling of waste", I didn't really find it necessary to delve into that, considering it might actually put people off. And besides, Discord never needed to "do his business" while encased in stone for a thousand years (not like he had much choice). These are only plot-holes if you over analyze the story, rather than approach it for what it really is, a fan fiction about ponies. As for the water thing, I realize now that I should have gone more in depth into Reggies "abbilities", like storing enough water for this pony to just barely evade dehydration, but again, I didn't think it to be a drastic thing to worry about. I appreciate the feed back and all in all hope your at least enjoying the story
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Yeah, that's all I really needed, thanks. Thanks for answering and clearing that up.
Interesting so far! Can't wait to see what happens.
Oh i knew it
that plants EVIL and not the nice evil the bad evil
O M Celestia
just imagine Twilight going "it's a bad day for me"
You know, whenever I read the name "Reggie" I always end up thinking about "Dr. Reginald Bushroot" but that's probably just a coincidence
Oh boy.