<---Writing of this story has been canceled--->
Worthless. That's all he believed he was. He's a coward, he's weak, and he's given up on life. As he awaits his wrongful execution in the toughest prison in the world, he's offered comfort from the most unlikely of places, the King of Evil himself! With the promise that they will die together as friends; the two of them, the Legend seeking retribution and the Kid with nothing to live for, go to their graves. But they are offered a second chance in a new world with new bodies...if only things were that simple though
There is a strong religious element in the 1st chapters. It fades away after that.
Don't bother trying to find the story I've crossed over with MLP. It's a story I tried to write a looooong time ago and never finished. I don't know what ever happened to it, but it was a pretty detialled story...about 150 pages long! I may try to recreate the story some day, but until then, I'm putting together profiles on the different Races, Species, and places that existed in the story. (Luckily, I remember most of the details) I'm not saying I'm going to limit myself to those creatures or that I'll use all of them at some point, but you can peek at them if you wish in My Gallery on Deviantart.com
---MAY CONTAIN SPOILERS---
This is weird... but good! I'll bite. Favorite and like for you, bro.
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Thank you very much. It's always nice to get Likes and Favorites
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So..... I didn't really get the gist of the story from the description. What's it about?
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You have two men; Shadaico is the model of all things evil, and Nash who has been wrongfully convicted and sentenced to a very gruesome death. In the first two chapters they get to know each other and both learn that they aren't as evil as everyone thinks. The day comes for them to be executed, but they don't stay dead exactly. They are reincarnated (as Shadaico theorizes) into Equestria, but they've been turned into some rather strange creatures...especially Nash.
I think you need some exotic tastes to find this story good
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you...........have my attention
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Cool beans. Will read later.
Interesting... I'll be tracking this.
dayum
I like this story.
MOAR
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You want a little extra background info to tie you over? You can go to my Deviantart Gallery (threw together yesterday on a whim) to get a little more info on Shadaico's past and some of my crossover world's species. It's just there for me to keep track of if I ever feel the need to add it to the story. I'll add species and stuff as I remember them. My crossover world is from a story I wrote years ago, like when I was 12. Don't know what ever happened to it cause I can't find it now...
My Gallery
1720873 So what did Shadico get turned into? is he a pony or what?
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I was planning on keeping that a secret until Nash was thoroughly captured by the ponies, which is about two chapters away...if you just can't wait, I'll PM it to you
1721105 nah thats cool. I cant wait to see what happens tho!!!!
I like the current format.
Cant wait for more. Kinda hope that nash gets turned into the princess
I LOVE TACOS TOO BLAAAAAAA!!!
very nice
Anti first. And that was good
she gunna be pissed
killing of one of the mane 6 would be a grand mistake my friend
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Did I send that kind of message? I'm sorry. Nopony is about to die, especially not a member of the mane 6. But in maybe two chapters, Shadaico is going to unleash some serious violence
Interesting little story you've got here... Just one tiny critisism: Nash should be able to tell whether or not there is a breeze by comparing the movement of Celestia's mane to the other ponies' manes--something easily noticeable in passing observations without the need to look for it specifically.
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Good point, thanks for pointing that out in a friendly way
1763945 i see keep up the good work this is realy good
a timberwolf?
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NO, he is going to be a big black real wolf.
Ah man they weren't even on my mind when I typed that up, I didn't account for that possibility!
Sorry about the confusion, that was toltaly my bad.
1795957 no prob i just needed to make sure keep up the good work
Good as usual
Dang! With all this build-up of constantly mentioning the guards "maybe" wanting the get revenge against the Changelings through Nash, I'm expecting something big to happen with that.
... I'd be very disappointed otherwise.
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Sorry to keep you waiting, but that isn't suppose to happen for a long time. Not till after a *cough, cough* certain rescue attempt meltdown...
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I don't mind waiting; I have my own writing that I should get to now that Christmas Break is here, anyway!
Can't believe I forgot to include before that I'm also interested in seeing how Celestia (and Luna?) will act when her/their interrogation of Nash doesn't go quite as planned.
... I guess I've put favoriting off long enough, now that I'm invested in the action!
keep up the good work!
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But a little editting later and it seems more nuetral now...I hope...
Yeah, I was kind of worried about this chapter. The first draft made it seem like I was going for a romance or a clopfic of the weird kind. (Which I'm not!)
Holy shit Celestia.
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To ease your mind, I didn't get a single hint of a feeling that this was turning towards romance or clop.
Interesting view on Celestia and Luna, but I'm actually of the opposite opinion! To put it as short as possible, I think they were probably as you describe a thousand years ago, but have sense changed because of what their actions led to. Celestia regrets banishing her sister, so now takes into account "what she feels is right" before acting. Luna, in contrast, now suppresses her emotions since they were what led her to becoming Nightmare Moon in the first place... All headcanon, of course; I still love this fic (it helps that I think my view can still support their actions so far in this story, too)!
wooo this is a good chapter keep it up!
I know I'm probably too late, since you say the next chapter is pretty much done, but take some advice anyway. For next time, maybe.
The secret to writing a sneaking scene is to not care about the sneaking--frankly, it's boring. Keep in mind the "why" of the sneaking, and reference to it occasionally, perhaps along with reminders that the character(s) are basically going through it blind and acting very much on-the-fly. Throughout, have troubles in the sneaking about impede the character(s); make them backtrack or perform some daring move that could get them caught, but which they have no choice but to do if they want to succeed. Mostly I think this is good general advice no matter what the characters are doing, but when one is trying something new it's easy to forget what one does unconsciously for other kinds of scenes.
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Thanks for the tips, your not too late either, I had a major change of ideas and i'm re-organizing the chapter. I'm adding a little to the beginning so it makes more sense and rewording a bunch of it. And you gave me an idea for a whole new scene, I might change how some of the rest of it went too.
And I'm now on Winter break and have all the time I could ever want to write, expect many rapid updates!
Last sentence was the 'you dun goofed' moment of the chapter. I can't friggin' wait for the next part!
lets rock......
fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/219/7/1/mlp___hush_now__mommy____by_danteincognito-d5a6bxq.jpg NNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
and
are both one words.
should be "hear."
Oh, Shadaico... I knew he was a pretty big idiot, but... damn. Part of me is, for some reason, still hoping he's not going to die. Here and now, anyway.
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Thank You, Thank You, and Thank You...and it's gone.
I'm not really satisfied with the term Stompling. if anyone has a "good" alternative suggestion, I'd love to hear it.
Mm-HM! Interesting development!
I'm guessing the existence of these various Changelings indicate Nash is not just "a Changeling, except tiny," but one of yet another hive... perhaps a hive of... Squishlings?
Why are Chrysalis's Changelings called-? Hmm... Chrysalis... Chrys > chry > cry?
Nice battle scenes. I'd never be able to write something like this! (My skill lies more in battles of words...)
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I had a think and have a thought: Trampling!
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Trample-ling!
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Get it?
Okay, seriously this time: How about Heftling? -or Bulkling? -or something else that emphasizes size in a negative way?...
It's just so good
The ending doesn't bother me because it should, in a way, be "anticlimactic." Putting the screws back in is like... bomb disarming--it's about stopping something from happening, so the fact that nothing happens (after the screws are back in) is good rather than anticlimactic.