This story is a sequel to The Shadowed Nightmare
The Elements of Disharmony have been discovered. As they choose their new masters, it is a race against time to find the wielders before they discover their Elements, or the safe streets of Canterlot will erupt into a full-blown war between the masters of Harmony and Disharmony. However, it will not be that simple. Somepony is working behind the scenes; somepony is pulling at the strings of the Elements of Harmony and Disharmony alike. Who is this certain somepony? Twilight Sparkle is summoned to Canterlot to find out, where Princess Luna and a group of scholars are studying the Elements that they have found.
A storm is coming to Equestria...a storm that, when it hits, could destroy everything in its path.
Sequel to The Shadowed Nightmare. If you have not read that, what happened in that story should become apparent as you read this one--though if you want to go read it, by all means go ahead. My personal/"ponysona" OC will not be a character in this story, although this story includes the original villains The Shadow and Puzzle Master from The Shadowed Nightmare.
UPDATE December 12, 2012: New chapters (which is to say Chapter 6 on) will feature cover art by Youkaiyami.
UPDATE May 6, 2013 (Geez, I've been working on this for a long time...but don't worry; I haven't abandoned it): Yeeaah, it's been a few months since I've seen any activity from Youkaiyami, so....welp. So much for the whole cover art thing. :( ah well.
UPDATE May 13, 2013: Next chapter will be released May 27, and from then on new chapters will be added much more often.
UPDATE November 29, 2013: The final chapter will be released at the end of next week at the absolute latest. Also, since I am going to submit this story to EqD, I will be revising some of the earlier chapters to fix some basic writing mistakes and flesh out the scenes with better descriptive imagery.
UPDATE February 18, 2024: Haha, okay, so it turns out that I may have slightly overpromised when I wrote the previous update a decade ago. Best I can do for now is quote Douglas Adams: “I love deadlines. I love the whooshing noise they make as they go by!” I plan to finish on chapter 20. Hopefully this time I can make the wait a little shorter.
Intresting... Will keep an eye on this....
Ive been mulling this same kind of notion over...
glad somone is doing it
"Who is this certain somepony?"
ITS DISCORDDDDDDD
this, i gotta see
Elements of Disharmony? I was thinking about this a few days ago and you went and made a fic about it. Well played.
So, elements of disharmony?
Lying, Dishonor, Greed, Wraith, Hate. Then what would magic be? Evil magic? Whatever. Im going to read now.
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dark magic = science!
1559416 I actually think it's Reason. Now that I think about it, I've been re-reading the Magic or Madness series too much
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1561208 Actually, in this story, it's Power. Not really having power, per se, but rather craving it.
Admiral Ackbar: "It's a TRAP!"
lol... seriously though, cool start... Tracking... :p
Wonderful Chapter!
Loved the chess match...
Also love the little picture at the end...
Spike is the element of Greed isn't he?
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Confused? No backstory? Ok plot and story
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Of course not; what are you talking about
1570752 Well, this is kind of a sequel to another fic I wrote, The Shadowed Nightmare, which you can find the link to in the description.
1571217 Oh, Ok, "of course not" heh heh.
Puzzle Master makes me happy!!
So I was right about Spike!
1633533 Not sure if that should make me feel flattered or disturbed, depending on what exactly you're trying to say...
1640177 Yup.
Whoa.
And so... IT BEGINS!!
This story is seriously creative. I really like it.
1678843 Speaking of which, Discord and the Element of Power both come in next chapter.
EDIT: Sorry. Upon writing the next chapter, I found that I needed to split it into two, so actually only Discord and not the Element of Power are in it.
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Somehow I think the situation is going to get grim for Equestria...
1) Nightmare Moon
2) Queen Chrysalis
3) And... Discord?
And this comes without even mentioning the Puzzle guy... wow
1685070 Yeah, it looks like everypony's pretty much bucked...
Sure, living in eternal night whilst having you emotions siphoned kinda sucks...
But hey... Chocolate rain!!!
So the plot thickens..... I have no idea..
First!!!!
Impressive story my friend keep the chapters coming.
This fiction has 12 times as many (the Disharmonic 6 and the inner darkness of the Mane 6) villains as the average season finale.
My little Spikey-Wikey!
For that, I give you massive kudos.
I feel like Spike as Greed is highly appropriate, but I'm also sensing that he embodies a perhaps unforseen stumbling-block for the Elements of Disharmony, since all Spike REALLY WANTS is Rarity, who is his equal and opposite reaction, if you will.
Definitely watching this.
And so darkness falls
let the chaos begin
Let this be spikezilla's theme preferably at 6:53
1822827 SPIKE WANT RARITY!
Oh, My, Glob. I'm on the edge of my seat.
Jeez the 6 sure have their work cut out for them and poor pinkie and fluttershy living with all that pain
before reading i will now guess the elements of disharmony
Greed- spike
Deception- Chrysalis
Cruelty- Discord
Fear- The shadow
Betrayal- hmm i think its luna?
Power- THE GREAT AND POWERFUL TRIXE LULAMOON
Noooo... Twi won't be logical anymore!
1938592 Mercy and friendship towards enemies are illogical concepts, which may be of vital importance later.
1934460 O_O
1941809 But, you should have them "master" their flaws, not destroy them. Flaws are just hidden strengths.
1945272 Fair point. I'll take that into account, although some story points in my plan can't really be rewritten to that degree. Thank you for pointing that out.
Wow, things are getting intense, I hope you will update soon.
1978697 Hey, thanks!
Unfortunately it might be a week or more until I post the next chapter; my family has politely suggested that i prioritize studying for finals at school over writing until those are over (next week).
Still, after that, hopefully I can pick up the pace on posting new chapters.
This chapter was both "unexpected" and very well done. I also find it poetic and/or ironic that they "put aside" their negative selves for them to be empowered by their elements, but, in a way, still allow their negative selves to "exist" so that they won't be overwhelmed by their element's power. I can't wait and see what will happen in the next chapter.
Kick ass bro
And so the epic fighting is coming to a start.
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I can't wait for the next chapter
And so the battle begins....
(I always wanted to say (in this case write) that
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Also, the fight scenes definitely make up for the lack of art
. to which I don't really pay much attention to.
Though it was not as "action-packed" as one might have expected, the "fight" between Pinkie Pie and Shadow/Soul Shade seem befitting of their elements, to which I enjoyed nonetheless
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Also, I found it very ironic that the bearer of the element of fear would be afraid of being laughed at.
2370798 I'm glad you noticed that. That irony was intentional, to add depth to the character. He's not the Element of Fear because he creates fear in others or because he uses fear as a weapon, as one would expect.
He's the Element of Fear because he is deathly afraid...of his brother, of other ponies, and most importantly of the evil within himself.
Whelp, since you were totally awesome and decided to read and review the first few chapters of my story, I felt it was only appropriate to take a few minutes to sit down and read and review your story as well, though no promises on how useful it will be, I tend to be terrible at this sort of thing. As a bonus, you get to hear this review from the perspective of someone who totally forgot there was a 'more' button, and was already a few chapters in before I realized that no, I wasn't supposed to be guessing about some of these characters because there was already a story before this one I should have read. so yeah.
Good news for you is that really, it didn't detract from the story very much, as I will explain further down.
First, the official stuff, I have read all the way through all your released chapters, and in terms of grammar, spelling, tenses, and so on and so forth you were solid, no glaring errors in syntax, or anything that I really needed to read more than once to understand, so solid work there.
One of the things I love about fanfiction, and yours as a case in point, is that you can take something that people already understand and using just a little bit of working, and some wonderful visualization, you can create something entirely new and engaging. Your descriptions of characters and scenery was engaging, while not so descriptive that we couldn't weave our own imaginations into it. You were able to strike a balance between scenes and symbolism that I also though worked extremely well.
Now, I know I really have no right to comment about this, seeing as though you did warn us that this was a sequel, and I certainly have not read the first one yet (though after reading this, I do plan to, expect a correction to this comment if my feelings change) however there were a few times with the new characters did confuse me in the earlier chapters. Your writing for the characters themselves more than made up for it as the story went on, and I was able to gather a lot about them without knowing their direct histories in the context of your first story, however I know when reading stories like these (be they fanficion or real fiction) I will often times have gaps between reading stories in series, and absolutely love it when characters are re-introduced, as it tends to help jog my admittedly terrible memory, and keeps me in the story without having to sit back and think about it.
Congratulations on writing such an awesome piece so far, Favorited and liked, and plans made to go back and read more.
Took you long enough. I forgot this story even existed !
Interesting, the fight scene were as expected but that ending was a surprise (to me anyways).
It would seem that Applejack and Chrysalis have something "in common", both of them will do anything to protect their (respective) families.
Nothing can stand in sadness before the Pinkie-force. Nothing!
Poor spike got the opposite of his gf
Was wandering if you was going to use spike
Great Chapter, it is both "heart-pumping" and heart warming
(at least, to me it is).
yay loving this story