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Having lost much of her past, memories and purpose in life, Aurora Borealis stumbles upon the junkyard and its sole inhabitant Scraps. Having regained her name and desiring to find her past and place in the world, she begins to walk the paths of discovery. But what she finds and what impact she has may be more than she ever expected.
Eh, it happens. The nature of differing opinions, some people don't like particular variations on a setting or idea. Still makes me sad to get down-starred just for choice of venue, rather than actual quality of writing. But hey, the star rating is there for expressing opinions I suppose.
The best at parties! Never have to worry about talking over the music again!
Sadly doesn't surprise me about the errors. I found three minor errors rereading Chapter 5 shortly before submitting the story here. Wouldn't surprise me if there are others in the other chapters I didn't catch. Spelling and grammar, why you so hard? 
Alright, finally got to reading this. Now, I'm not the best reviewer, I admit. It's just the way I compose it or something. Whatever the case is, I'll try my best.
*cracks hooves*
After reading what you have so far, what strikes me most isn't the characters surprisingly. It's your style of writing. The way you sew the emotions, weave the sensations into your descriptions... it's... it's just amazing, really. From Aurora's crushing guilt from ravaging the raider fortress to the euphoria of tasting food likely for the first time since her transformation, the way you write is just spectacular, magical. After reading the first opening paragraphs of the prologue, I thought to myself, This is gonna be good. That feeling doesn't come often, especially not after just the first few paragraphs. And you didn't disappoint, let me tell you. Your conveyance of emotion and atmosphere... job well done. Job damn well done.
Characters... I'll be honest. I think it's a little too early for now to say how well you do them. Aurora is done very, very well to be sure (though I was a tad skeptical of having an alicorn as a main character, even if released from the Unity by the balefire bomb detonation if what I suspect correctly), and Lilac showed a surprising amount of depth with this most recent chapter. Requiem... she keeps on being a wild card. I'm interested to see how she develops. However, some things seem a bit... inconsistent. Arsenal, for example. She's supposed to be Enclave, likely military judging by her accuracy with the gem-powered rifle and the fact that she has power armor training. Yet she complains that much? Granted, the world above the cloud cover is likely much better in quality-of-living, but with what she had to go through for military training... it just doesn't add up.
It certainly makes her as annoying as Aurora and Requiem make her out to be, though.
Aaaaand, I think that's it for me. I'm not too keen on reviews, again. I do hope, however, that I do well enough for you. You're doing an excellent job so far. Keep it up.
Cheers,
Adder1
>>120923 Not stopping any time soon, most likely. Hoping to finish it someday.
>>120950 I'll be honest, the emotional tone is something which worries me at times. Because how deep it gets into that swings very heavily depending on what I'm writing. And it worries me that I may be getting too thick on introspection at times.
Arsenal, for all of her complaining, is tougher than she lets on. Remember that when Aurora first meets her she's been kidnapped, maimed, starved and probably raped and beaten more than once. She is, at this point, about as far down as you can get. Her complaining might have gone a little thick in Chapter 5, but she has good reason for it. There's also some other elements to her you haven't seen yet, which may help explain why she acts that way. Just hope I can make them stick right when I get there.
>>121005 It fits Aurora's character, though. She gets so caught up in these emotions she stumbles into things without noticing them beforehand. As for Arsenal, that makes sense. She's still a relatively new character. Well, best of luck when you reach that point in developing her then. 
I just love the relationship thats building between Aurora and Requiem 
Its a great contrast to the evil of the wasteland and not as used as lover relationship.
Maybe aurora was a mother running away from loosing her foal(along with her whole stable?) before she joined Unity?
Still one of my favorite FOE sidecfics
>>135048 Yay! Glad you're enjoying it.
I knew the relationship between Aurora and Requiem well before I started writing the story. There's still a lot more of it to grow and change over time.
You'll eventually get Aurora's backstory. But the details may take a while to come out. I imagine most will have guessed the over-all shape of it long before I get there.
Alrighty. Let's see what I can do...
Aaaand... I totally got nothing. See, this is why I suck at reviewing. I can't pull my thoughts together. Maybe I should just try giving commentaries as I read or something...
Your way with emotions still amazes me. I just absolutely love your style, and it blends with Aurora's character so well. That, at least, I can say.
Also, I half-expected Requiem to be some kind of monster that could disguise itself when she popped back up. Judging by the fact that she leveled up and gained a new perk, I guess not. Huzzah!
... unless you plan to give us a mindfuck later.
Confound you Ilushia! You drive me to irrational thoughts!
Don't you hate it when people say something "constructive" to another person without elaborating or telling them how they can improve. Just because the plot doesn't interest you doesn't mean it's a bad story. You have a right to your opinions just like everyone else, but at least try to come up with a good reason for thinking the way you do. K?
Wait... You mean...
Jesus tapdancing Christ, you went there. Now I really am speechless.
Well, at least you aren't Somber. She achieves levels of sheer sadistic fucked-up-ness on a regular basis to such an extent that her work is simply breathtaking. Hell, she'll kill off her main character, but not before crucifying, raping, and dismembering her. In the same chapter. At least she ended up dying peacefully, holy shit!
*looks at footnote* wait...there's something missi... OMFG YOU DIDN'T DID YOU?!?!
You cant be serious , i survived Sombers torture of Blackjack but this... this is gawd damn it...
No ,just no , before i rage ill wait for next chapter... *takes deep breaths*
Somber at least tortured her character for ages now,,preparing us this comes out of the blue really ,if Auroa did it i really dont know how she would live considering what all she went thought to protect her, she would crack her already messed up mind and just let go and be a mindless slave of Doublethink freely...
*looks between you, then No One, then Somber*
How the hell am I gonna come up with mindfucks to rival this?!
But, that aside, time to get to the review... *cracks neck*
Her attachment to the slave collar and her reactions to the group of slavers adds more mystique to Aurora. Yaaaay, just what we need for a story where she's already struggling to find out who she is and was!
And Stable 66. Alright, I'll say it now- you did an amazing job with writing it up. I was able to get a great sense of Aurora wearing down both physically and mentally as the chapter dragged on. Reading the GDoc version, the small print gave the impression of whispers in the back of her mind... just simply amazing. Two more interesting things to note- nice job with "stimulant" there (guessing Stampede). The total shift in character and writing style brought it out. Second... oh hai Tom, interfacing with her PipBuck! *is waiting for a "Lookout, here comes Tom!"*
And Iron Clad. Wonderful. Somehow I knew this wasn't going to end well when she decided to free him. Good Goddess Aurora's plan to get in... I knew it wouldn't work. It just never works! I mean, just look at FoE!
Doublethink, though... that was definitely not what I was expecting. Definitely a very creepy ending that left us on a good cliffhanger.
Dammit, Ilushia, you and your way of pulling off ambiguity at the end! I can't be sure until the next installment which I will similarly devour like this one!
Again, bucking amazing job, Ilushia. Can't wait for more more more! 
*looks over comment post* Yeah, I think I'll keep this style. I think I'll keep it.
Aww. I wouldn't worry too much about mindfucks. Write your story the way you want to tell it, I'm sure it'll come out well!
There's a reason she wears the collar, and why she reacts to slavers and raiders so horribly.
Thankyouthankyouthankyou. Stable 66 had me chewing on my knuckles all week long while working on it. I'm still really terrified that I didn't do it right and people will hate it and argh. Yes, that would be Stampede. Glad it was easy to tell what was going on there. Tom is indeed a very, very special missile launcher.
Heh. Iron Clad. Not the last you've seen of him.
Doublethink was... Honestly that section is one of the major things in the chapter which made me terrified while writing it. I was really, really afraid that people wouldn't be able to tell what was actually happening there. The ending as well. Really hope it came through okay.
Next installment will be coming whenever I finish it. Next week sometime most likely.
Misfits is definitely more unique, but I'd say this is a bit better-written and better exemplifies the FO:E flavor. I mean, this shit got dark fast. And don't you dare apologize to me again Ilushia, I love this kind of stuff. Grimdark is the best dark, when done well. I mean, all signs point to Aurora mindlessly killing the most precious thing in her life, a little filly who probably saw her as her mother. Now that's a lot to bounce back from. There's a reason childkilling in the old Fallout games destroyed your reputation almost instantly. You have a shitton to work with.
Wrote that previous comment while pretty tired and didn't feel like going more into depth with this, but after reading your comments, I can't believe that you'd be nervous about this, it was wonderfully written. I really like the way you implement all the different voices in her head from Unity. I also thought the Doublethink part was fantastic, I was honestly expecting something more along the lines of Littlepip trying to sneak into Paradise, but I had no idea how much more could go wrong with sneaking into a slaver den.
Also this, "I should be protecting others, fighting her, not doing what she said! Like... Like a good pony should!" Mindrape perfection. Loved it.
Much like I am in complete denial about Project Horizons' chapter 33 ending until the next update, I will hold back the sorrow from Requiem possibly being dead.
If Heroes updates this week and Serenity dies too... Oh man. Can't think about it. 
I'm really, really relieved to hear this from people. I'm a paranoid kinda person and this chapter had me going "Everyone is going to hate this and hate my story and leave in droves when they read it and ARGH!" for a long, long time. Comments like this one still really do make all that pain worthwhile, though. So, thank you.
Your average time is ten days, I'd say that's more than decent for a waiting period, especially for a fic and how little time you're able to devote to it.
Y'know, with games, any familiral assistance you need to provide and that whole impersonating me and getting smacked over the head because of it eats a lot of free time.
Damnation! I am just barely 1/2 way through Project Horizons and Now a Fic pops up about one of the more interesting creatures in the story which is the Alicorns!!! 
Anyways had to get that out, I am going to finish Horizons and then your are next...or maybe i will just do both? I dunno but anyways Thanks for an already good looking fic! 
Whew! That was an *intense* chapter!
I think the thing I love most about the FoE setting is watching characters struggle to maintain something like basic decency (to say *nothing* of actually being *good*) in the face of a brutal wasteland. Watching Aurora trying to keep herself from becoming a monster (or, at least, convince herself she isn't one already), only to completely lose her 'self' to Doublethink. . . It's just the right kind of heartbreaking. And, of course, that ending. . .
I liked this story from the start, but this chapter moved it up from 'Liked' to 'Absolutely hooked'.
In short: Well done!
Don't worry, Ilushia, you can't alienate readers from your story so easily. You keep mentioning how you were afraid that we wouldn't like the way the chapter was written and we would hate what happened in it. TRUST me when I say I tried to quit reading Project Horizons. It got so sad that I just tried to walk away. And then I came crawling back and read it again. You have to do WAY more to the average reader than break his heart. As long as you don't intentionally trash your story, you should be fine.
I'm very pleased with how it's progressing and I can't WAIT to see the next installment.
Also, I have no idea how she'll get out of trouble with Arsenal if what I think happened really did happen.
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and with legit fallout 3 fawkes was my homeboy so ya know 
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