Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie have been friends for a long time now. There's always been a special connection between the pair, something only the two of them can understand - though they have trouble ever expressing that to each other. One night after a prank went wrong the previous day, Rainbow Dash finds herself needing to confess how guilty she feels to Pinkie for not taking the blame - though, she quickly finds herself confessing a whole lot more as the pair grow more and more intimate throughout the night.
A short fic that's supposed to be cute. You might find it cute. You might not. How mysterious. *wiggles hooves in a mystifying fashion*
**images of ponies grinning stupidly at each other not included
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EXCELLENT MUSTACHE, SIR.
Also, great story! It's very cute, and it does give you the warm fuzzies.
If there was one criticism I could give, it would be to romanticize more. Add more details, make it more wordy.
Even so, a very cute story. 5 mustaches
I give you mustaches.
I want to read this, but I can't. First off, you didn't indent your paragraphs, you just used the space bar on them. To indent your paragraphs, use the tab key. Second, you have absolutely no space inbetween paragraphs, causing for a big wall of text. I commend you for your effort to make recognisable paragraphs, but it needs a little more work. Double space and indent your paragraphs, and make sure that you make a new paragraph when the speaker changes.
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i'm a dreadful person
thanks for the tip about the tab key, i write these things on openoffice before uploading them to here though
and i was pretty sure i started a new line every time the speaker changed, but i suppose i might've missed a few places
haha well what do you know you can do it on openoffice too, guess i should try and actually understand the program i'm using before writing on it :|
oh and thanks for all the moustaches.
This made me d'awwwwww
i appreciate dem likes
and dem moustaches
'specially the moustaches
uhm... a little too stale for my taste, a more interesting plot (or sub plot) would have fixed some of that... maybe even a twist of some sort.
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pinkie secretly desires cupcak-
nope nuh-uh dun want to
MMMMM.... not bad
take a this moustaches
you like mustaches, yes? laviere can see it. I came here to get thigns that could improve how much of a mustachio I am. preferably small things that fit inside of pockets that would not be missed
Strangly Great!