Applejack goes missing one day, and loss gives way to confusion when Twilight discovers that the 'loyalest and most dependable of ponies' may not be nearly as honest as her element.
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Done purely for myself. If you enjoy it, neat. If not, I really don't care. If you don't 'get it', not my problem either.
Just something I did to help me vent.
Seems interesting! I'm going to dig in immediately.
It's an interesting premise, not quite sure what to make of it though.
Well now. After, ah, earlier tonight. . . this sure gives me the chills.
I've got a dozen questions in my mind, none of them proper, or possibly safe, to ask. Hope it helped.
Kind of a shot from The Twilight Zone (no pony relation). Very unique one-piece. Hard to believe, but the most shocking suspect for a revelation like that.
It is late as I read this, but my thoughts are this is rather deep and very thought-provoking for myself. Perhaps it is because I don't necessarily think that Discord quote is wrong, or maybe it is something to do with a similar situation I found myself in.
A few days ago, my sister, bless her 9 year old heart, was nearly struck in a parking lot by a driver because she had not paid attention and ran ahead of me. I was scared obviously, and reacted firstly by saying, "You should be more careful!!! ..but I am glad you are safe."
This was the truth, her decision to run and me correcting it, was the truth, however, my brother said the truth of scaring her would do her no good, and she'll resent me. I am sorry to say, he was right.. Almost a week after this, I haven't seen her except to try and apologize for being insensitive, which I fully admit I was blunt towards her. Heck I even gave her my Derpy vinyl doll to cheer her up, but nothing, the truth stung and she resents me still.
I suppose I am ranting due to being tried, but I get this story in a way others may not. perhaps in the morning I shall blog this, and not bring up this stuff on your story! =p
Loved this story, and hope your situation resolves itself, as I know mine shall too.
That was very interesting. Although short, I liked it.
I think the obvious question is, how does this pony, lying about who she is, become the element of honesty? What part of her character made the element resonate with her? Is there something about her motivation for the lies that caused it to overlook that? You hint at this, with the mention of the organisation, but it really doesn't address the issue.
I find this incredibly intriguing.
The premise, deserves more than just this single shot story; I believe it deserves an entire series.
If 'the organisation' was intended to remain anonymous, and retain absolute anonymity, the I suppose the idea of a series, is kind of stupid.
But, still. I suppose, and would very much enjoy, to read a series based upon this sole premise.
Okay Twilight, redouble your efforts and then mop up that so called secret organization.
All in a days work eh?
Great one-shot that leaves me wanting more. Hope you continue writing, sequel or not!
Ouch. Just... ouch.
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Tsk. Tsk. Shameful, I say.
Hm, so the southern accent was also fake. This was an interesting story to read at such an early time in the day.
-strokes mustache-
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I may be reading too much into this, but perhaps, like Twilight herself, her efforts trying to obtain the elements unlocked who she was deep inside. Just like Twilight only unlocked the element of "Magic" (friendship) in the short time before she was able to wield it, so too had Applejack only understood the deeper truth of who she was and wanted to be, allowing herself to make friends and get close to the others.
Though everything in the letter may be true in some sense, read it again with the thought in mind that her old life is the lie, a lie that she has fallen back on to protect her friends, since she knows clinging to them and being with them, holding on to her new truth, would put them in great danger. The Applejack everyone has come to know and love is her true self showing through, and the letter is her way of slipping back into the lie.
This makes the story that much more heartbreaking, and opens it to a far more interesting twist and more than just the one shot as presented, while still allowing Applejack to be the element of Honesty.
Nice!
absolutely wonderful, i give it 11 out of 10
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It's better to be alive and resentful than dead and blissfully ignorant. She's nine, she'll get over it and thank you later.
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That's my thinking as well. Although you'd think I did something terrible by doing that according to her and my parents.
No matter, good stories help view one's current predicaments in new views.
There's been a number of people asking for an explanation or an expansion of the fic, so I figured I'd say something. This fic will never receive a sequel, nor will it be continued or expanded upon in any way, shape, or form. It's an extremely personal piece, done solely to help me vent after being blindsided with a bit of bad news, and it did its job - I did indeed feel better.
You see, once upon a time, there was someone who lied to those closest to her for several years, and she was perfectly okay with it because she thought she was helping them in the end.
This person was my (now) ex. The entire fic is, more or less, about her and the things she put me and others through, intentionally or not. It was a way for me to express my own anger and disbelief. That's it. That's all there is to it. If this bit of extra info 'ruins' the fic, then so be it - as I said, this was done purely for myself and so I could give myself an outlet, and I really don't care how many dislikes it gets, or how poorly it's written.
Well, that's the thing... it's not poorly written at all. I like it a heckuva lot. I'm glad it was therapeutic as well. It's just that, separating the story itself away from the writer's motivation, the element of honesty being used by a liar doesn't make much sense. I did like TomKayito's thoughts on that though.
Nope, not buying it.
Interesting, and the back story to you shed light on it. Writing out your frustrations can be therapeutic, however when you make it a story like this out of it criticism will happen. I find myself doing it now, its well written the premise is good, but the choice of character is a head scratcher.
...Damn.
That was pretty cool.
I liked enough that I can ignore the plot hole bigger than... Well that big plot hole that I will not mention. Good work as usual Var
Wish it was a couple chapters, but It was great. I hope this becomes as famous as Cupcakes (Not as scary though)
Still wanting a expansion
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I have one thing to say, this should have been the last thing in the story...
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Do you plan on keeping this as a one-shot or making this into a story? Because I'm DYING to know if anything happens next!
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One-shot.
That's a shame, really. I could see this developing into a full-fledged story. But, it's your call; you're free to do what you want, and you have every right to do so without me hampering your judgment. Still, this was a very well-written piece, one that I think you could expand upon, if the idea ever caught your interest.
This would have been an amazing story I hope you make a sequel for when she comes back!