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Currently working on a new project. Let's see if it goes anywhere, eh?

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Canceled by reason of my editor convinced me it was a terrible idea. Not the story itself, but the location. I've changed enough, including but not limited to: the way magic works, the main characters, the reasons behind upcoming events (season three was essentially ignored), the upcoming war, the grey moral grounds of necromancy, and the MacGuffins, so... yeah. I've been told to move this into a world of my own make and rewrite it without the copyrighted content. My only regret is that I didn't finish editing up through chapter 6, when things really started to get going. That being said, I've also been told that waiting until chapter five to reveal the dramatic conflict was a huge no-no. So overall, this has been a fun experience. To those who were expecting more, I apologize my editor tells me I don't care. Whew, that might have made me feel guilty! Bye, all!

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Comments ( 22 )

In case you're having trouble picturing him, Thomas looks kind of like this:
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No, my real name isn't Thomas, and no, this isn't a self-insert fic. That being said, hopefully you are enjoying the story thus far. I know I've enjoyed writing it!

Please have a wonderful day.

EDIT: This comment was meant to only be posted into chapter two's comment section.

Special thanks to my pre-reader, Arckdevil, for all the work he's done in helping me set this up. Thanks, man!

Let us have a look at this one... Oh, and thumbs up to counterbalance the unjustified downvote. :yay:

Wall of text.

Might want to fix that, bro.

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Please explain what you mean. Should I have an extra space between paragraphs, or make it double spaced?

EDIT: Fixed. I guess. I added an extra space between paragraphs, as you prefer it that way. I'll change it back if I get more requests to leave it in standard fiction format instead.

Fix the wall of text by using

"Spaces between dialogue" Advised the comment

"I think I'll do that." Replied the Author
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and for future notice use section brakes when sudden changes in the setting take place
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Other than that, I think you are going to do fine. :pinkiesmile:

There's a slight amount of Mary Sue in here, but you get points for a fairly unique plot and knowing what an HK looks like. (except you used an image of a .45 :trollestia:)

Hmmm. Now if you go quantity over length than this chapter is worth it. I expect a full 2-3 chapters a day with 4,000 words each. I Keed, though your icon does the "Self insert" first impression, though if its just there for helping us then thanks, it helped.

Fun fact: double spacing after sentences is a holdover from the typewriter days. It is no longer necessary thanks to word processing and display software's ability to adjust character spacing automatically. Just thought you ought to know.

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FML. That looked almost exactly like my own pistol, though I've definitely noticed the .45 now that you've pointed it out. I'll see if I can replace the image. And believe me, I'm going well out of my way to remove the Mary Sue aspect of things as time goes on. Thanks for commenting.

EDIT: The image has been replaced. Thanks again for pointing out my obvious mistake! If you see anything else, let me know? I'd rather have comments telling me how I've screwed up rather than let the mistakes stand. Please have a wonderful day!

I don't quite get the dislikes on this story. Normally they're pretty bloody obvious as to why they're there, but this seems pretty good thus far. Am I missing something in the details, or was something whisked away in editing or what?

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"...he wouldn't have become the monster he is today..." -excerpt from description.
I'm guessing expectations of another obvious story revolving around how humans are the real monsters have killed this one by the description alone. I'm not worried about it. If the dislikes go up by a ton after I've gotten to around chapter six, then I'll be worried. As it stands, I'm just glad I've managed to get 14 likes in just a few hours, let alone several followers!

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Case in point. To answer your... comment, let's call it, no, I won't be killing them all. Hopefully.

1710626 Now it starts to make sense, vielen dank

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No, to you for commenting, and making me feel proud that my story is (thus far) controversial and interesting! Herzlichen Dank!

"I finished double knotting my sneakers (blue and white cross trainers, if you cared)"
Not really.

Being invisible is what Spies do. *ffssssshh*

I finally had time to read this and it was AWESOME great job, and good luck with the writing. :D

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Ok, I've looked over this comment a few times, and I still have no idea what it's in reference to. At all. Please specify? What does it mean?

2065542 I quote: "You invisible people scare the crap out of me."

From the note at the end of the chapter. Spies in TF2 have a cloaking device. I like to make people paranoid while playing Spy.

Sorry about the confusion.

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Thanks for clearing that up.

In the future, please try to be less conspicuous while following me. You spies aren't supposed to be seen, after all.

Cheers!

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