Believing that the essence of Harmony is threatened, Twilight plans to remedy that through a form of extraction. As her ambitions manifest, Twilight struggles through an internal war between her harmonious plan and the consequences of her acts.
227695 Glad that you feel like you need more... but hold on a second.
You say that you want me to make you vomit/throw up your organs? You say that when there are two of Twilight's friends left to eliminate? You say that when one of them in the one that you begged me not to give a painful death to?
Not really a big fan of this chapter but that's because I'm more of a slasher guy. It's still very beautifully written and enjoyable to read. Keep up the good writing!
227849 Go ahead and go all out on Fluttershy. Or else Pinkie's coming for you...[img]fc05.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/325/9/9/pinkamena_by_davidlc-d45into.png[/img]
227909 I said that originally, but I feel like Fluttershy has to have the most heart breaking, Saw 4 status death in the story. It feels, right. Well 'Shy, Shadowed Rainbow's gonna take care of you for a while. Have fun!
usually when i watch or read something particularly gory, i need to stop, clear my innards, and continue later. with your story, i end up hungry as fuck. for meat. sweet, bleeding meat. didn't get a whole lot of that out of this chapter, but i liked it anyway besides. I DEMAND MY INNARDS BE FORCEFULLY EJECTED FROM MY REAR.
228943 Ah, so yet another person who wants me to cause something to happen to their organs? Well, as stated before... CHALLENGE ACCEPTED!
By the way, I changed up the chapter a bit because I realized a procedure that could be done more on Applejack... that's what happens when I try to rush a chapter out.
But I will take my time with the next chapters and make sure they are as I want them to be!
232041 Glad you think so - I'm glad that inspiration hit me fast enough so I was able to make the change quick!
It might take a bit longer to get the next chapters out, but I am hoping to make them as best as possible... and hopefully cause the desired nightmares and organ-spewing (... particularly my plans so far for the chapter after next....)
The orange pony was shaking, struggling and failing to hold back tears. "You're... y-y-you're..."
The frequency turned up still further. The memory became hazy to Applejack. The unicorn manipulating it so she only remembered pain. Physical and emotional. Destroying every bit of confidence.
The frequency turned up still further. The memory became hazy to Applejack. The unicorn manipulating it so she only remembered pain. Physical and emotional. Destroying every bit of confidence.
"A-A-Alright! Y-Y-You're not mah friend!" Applejack's eyes were darting, each word hurting emotionally just as much as the physical pain she was being forced to endure, if not more. Applejack's heart ached with each word she said. "'Ah've hated you ever since I first saw ya! I've always been afraid of you! I've always hated you!" Her words were mixed with screams and cries of regret, confidence to tell the truth completely shattered. To her, truth was pain. She still cared for her friends, but to say truth would only bring agony with it...
You kinda repeat a paragraph there... thought I'd point that out.
"He's met with a terrible fate, hasn't he? It didn't have to be like this. He didn't have to die..." Her voice returned to a sinister tone as she shook her head slightly, now turning to the horrified, struggling Applejack. "But he was in the way. He threatened my base of operation. I did what I had to do."
Twilight, don't go referencing Him. You know what happens when you reference Him. Or maybe you don't. At this point, you are no longer sane enough to care.
This so fucked up.
I NEED MORE.
AND YOU HAVEN'T MADE ME VOMIT YET. I WANT YOU TO MAKE ME THROW UP MY ORGANS.
227695 Glad that you feel like you need more... but hold on a second.
You say that you want me to make you vomit/throw up your organs? You say that when there are two of Twilight's friends left to eliminate? You say that when one of them in the one that you begged me not to give a painful death to?
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227776 Oh yes...
There will be blood.
Not really a big fan of this chapter but that's because I'm more of a slasher guy. It's still very beautifully written and enjoyable to read.
Keep up the good writing!
227789 Oh yes indeed, there will be... and torture... and I, uh... apologize in advance for anything that might happen to Fluttershy.
227826 Hey, as far as lying goes I didn't see much of a thing for slasher-ness... but soon I think you shall be quite satisfied...
227849
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yay!
227849 Go ahead and go all out on Fluttershy. Or else Pinkie's coming for you...[img]fc05.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/325/9/9/pinkamena_by_davidlc-d45into.png[/img]
227874 Lol @ that Nightmare Moon picture! And I am actually quite eager to write that...
227876 Really? And you said you didn't want me to give Fluttershy a painful death before, oh well, no regrets, yay!
Fluttershy: *looks terrified*
227909 I said that originally, but I feel like Fluttershy has to have the most heart breaking, Saw 4 status death in the story. It feels, right.
Well 'Shy, Shadowed Rainbow's gonna take care of you for a while.
Have fun!
usually when i watch or read something particularly gory, i need to stop, clear my innards, and continue later. with your story, i end up hungry as fuck. for meat. sweet, bleeding meat. didn't get a whole lot of that out of this chapter, but i liked it anyway besides. I DEMAND MY INNARDS BE FORCEFULLY EJECTED FROM MY REAR.
228943 Ah, so yet another person who wants me to cause something to happen to their organs? Well, as stated before... CHALLENGE ACCEPTED!
By the way, I changed up the chapter a bit because I realized a procedure that could be done more on Applejack... that's what happens when I try to rush a chapter out.
But I will take my time with the next chapters and make sure they are as I want them to be!
231722
i read the changes. very good!
232041 Glad you think so - I'm glad that inspiration hit me fast enough so I was able to make the change quick!
It might take a bit longer to get the next chapters out, but I am hoping to make them as best as possible... and hopefully cause the desired nightmares and organ-spewing (... particularly my plans so far for the chapter after next....)
232786
yay violent projectile organ-spewing!
234760
I've read a lot of screwed up fanfics, and comments in fanfics, and so far, you people have scared me the most...
You know, I hate gore. I abhor it. So why the hell am I still reading this?
Good quality of writing though. Let's see if I can make it through the entire story to date.
You kinda repeat a paragraph there... thought I'd point that out.
2263868 I agree with this strange entity known as Jsnick.
Meh...it's kind of an overdone reference. I see it everywhere. This is an actually justified context, though.
Twilight, don't go referencing Him. You know what happens when you reference Him. Or maybe you don't. At this point, you are no longer sane enough to care.