Just a little scene I wanted to get out of my head. It'll hopefully be part of my OC story and I don't think this chapter gives away too much of the main plot. Most likely very rough and not as 'meaty' as a finished one would be but hey, this is a trial to get it out of my head.
Yes it's rough, I'll add more to this scene whenever I write the rest of the story
Hrm.
You broke an italics thing here.
And here.
I think you missed a 'C' at the start here.
I can't see things other than these three though. I didn't look at it in too much depth, but it seems that your grammar and spelling are solid.
Please do write the rest of this fic though, it seems a tad bit odd to just post a random scene as a standalone, particularly as a lot of the effect is lost through not having buildup.
Thumbs up. Also, I seem to be the second view . Hopefully you won't get too much negativity from people who don't like the standalone thing.
ending option 1: and then he died
ending option 2: and then they bucked
That was one great story!
You have earned my thumb!
take my 5 spikes!
You had a double at the end of the story.
And try not to get wings ripped off, now, please?
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I don't know why the entire thing was in italics
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Fire the edit-cannon!
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I choose option two
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Edit Cannon Fired!!
How does it look?
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I fully plan on writing the rest of it, I just gotta finish up Apple of Twi's Eye 'cause it helps explain something's I want in it
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It looks quite nice now that italics aren't everywhere, and now there's something distinguishing the thoughts it makes things better too.
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And this is a good thing. If your excuse is that you're writing something else, it's the best excuse !
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now, write that story it's part of!
I can't wait to read it!
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Gotta finish Apple of Twi's Eye, but don't worry, I'll tell you when I post the entire thing.