Hi, my name's Dice. I make steampunk fashion designs for ponies normally, but I like to write on the side. steampunkdice.tumblr.com
Applebloom is a filly no longer, yet her flank remains blank. Though Sweetie Bell and Scootaloo have moved on, she remains, trying to figure out who she is. This is, however, ideal for the Canterlot intelligence forces, who kidnap her and force her to join their ranks. Applebloom has to see a dark side of equestria she never knew existed, and she hates every second of it.
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Wow! Looking pretty awesome so far. Keep it up.
Hmm, looks promising.
I liked it!
~Syn3rgy
omfg, those ponies dont fuck around! Cool story bro... :3 it took me till now to actually find the dern thing. but I'll totally read on . idk what else i thought about it, im tired lol
"...you get to do all the really cool stuff and go on the really cool missions!"
Stuff like spying in the zebra lands, interrogation, and NINJAing when applicable
Do you want to sketch some cover art to be vectored (again)? I think I know a pony who can vector
Anyway, keeping an eye on this, great story so far and I'm sure thats a trend that will continue.
Cheers.
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Thanks, Ti!
I could email you the sketch (since I'm out of town) But are you sure you're up to it? It may be a little more complicated... 
And I'll be posting plenty! Got lots of time on my hooves!~ Have a merry Xmas!
And I'd simply adore it if you would!
(Joke) Alt. Title: In Blooming Under Pressure and Blooming Ice Ice Baby
....wow
you're amazing...
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Hehe I may have to use that as a chapter title
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Awww thank you!
Man, this is perhaps not the best fic on the site, but it certainly deserves more views and more upvotes than what you have here.
I like this story. It's intriguing and it's well-written.
Have you considered maybe joining a few groups and posting this story in them? It's massively under-appreciated.
And for critique, I think Applebloom's rant was kind of sudden and maybe a bit out-of-place. She was being perfectly placid, just watching these new ponies, then she just exploded. Since we were in Applebloom's head, maybe you could have shown some of it building?
And as for format: I know it sounds silly, but you should put a space between all of your lines. It makes stories on the internet so much easier to read. Having it squashed up might have been turning a few people away.
So, yeah. That's everything. Keep with this! I like it.
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Thank you so much!
I really do appreciate your constructive criticism- it helps me improve so I can write better stories in the future!
I'd love to join groups, but frankly, I'm unsure as to how. I'm still rather new here on FimFic, and I'm still getting the lay of the land.
I'll work on the formatting, and I'll see if I can make future chapters more readable.
Overall, thank you so much for taking the time to comment.
I really appreciate it when people take the time to give me a nudge in the right direction 
Another good chapter! Can't wait for the next
Such a great thing to read on a birthday.