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The Kiss of the Alicorn is a spell only an alicorn can cast. Once in their life, they may share their immortality with another, granting one other pony eternal youth. So that they have another to stand beside them. So that they do not have to face eternity alone.
But it can only be cast once.
Twilight has more than one friend.
My submission to the Thousand Words Contest, Drama category.
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Such a simple concept, yet teased into an absolute soul crushing blow. Very good.
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Bad bot.
An outcome that is as predictable as it still manages to be heart-wrenching.
>Applejack is the last who survives
Figures, best sensible horse wins again.
I was looking for a name for this, since I have something similar in my stories, and it will come up in several of them. So consider this used.
come to think of it the gala ticket was also celestia's fault
This is a very interesting story. I would love to see it continued it a full story but only if you want to tell it.
Should’ve given it to Starlight. That’s all I have to say.
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Name checks out
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Okay, but logically she is the best choice.
She’s the Headmare Of The School Of Friendship and can personally oversee it does not burn to the ground whether she retires or not since she’s immortal.
Starlight has less to lose from the deal compared to all the Mane Five. At worst, she loses Trixie and Sunburst, but she’d be spending eternity with two of her other closest friends, Twilight and Spike. She’d eventually recover from their loss.
She may not be an Element Of Harmony but Twilight clearly loves her and I’m personally OFFENDED she was not even a consideration.
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Ah, perhaps I've spent too much time on reddit. My response was not really to your suggestion and meant only as a joke.
You may well be right. Starlight might be the right choice. I'd have no idea, though. I stopped watching the show right as she was introduced as a main character rather than a villain, so I haven't the first clue about her and wouldn't know how to handle the interaction.
And if you'd allow an old man his headcanon, my choice would be for her to actually give it to Spike. Though dragons are long-lived, I do not believe them to be immortal.
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So she’d kiss her brother? EW
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I agree, I think Spike is the obvious choice here.
So that make celestia and Luna eternal virgin's who never scored and never got special someponies to use their kiss on
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You say that like there are good bots.
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great concept but I always hate the notion she can't make friends with anyone else, twilight was more than that
great story though
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That would be reddit rubbing off on me.
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I think we all know who should have been kissed.
Uh, it sounds lame when you say it like that.
She’s right though sugarcube.
As if there was any question!
Go on Twilight.
Come here, big guy...
I’ll be your friend forever too, Twilight.
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Heart-breakingly beautiful.
Words arenʼt enough to tell you how amazing this piece. You made me feel the feels in only 1000 words.
Take my upvote and best of luck in the judging!
Does the kiss heal old ponies or leave them old and withered but unable to die?
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Excellent question. I’m gonna go with “heal the old” since the story’s description says “eternal youth”.
So clearly the kiss goes to Sunset Shimmer!
Bacon mare stay winning 😎
aww, it really is the Gala ticket all over again! though before Celestia rendered it a non-problem with an alicorn ex machina, we know what Twilight’s solution was…
oof, this does make it sound like that will be the solution, just one by one…
noooooo :(
oof!
this is a premise and arc that i am sure has been told a thousand times in previous fics, but this one really does keep it fresh by distilling it down to the core. well done!
Eh. These immortality blues stories always ring hollow for me. She’s the Princess of Friendship. Yes, her first friends will always have a special place in her heart, but there’s nothing stopping her from making more. Heck, even here, you left out Starlight.
Sorry, I just couldn’t get behind this one. Flagrant heartstring tugging like this is one of my pet peeves.
Which just leaves Starlight, the best pony! Good choice princess
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She is the main character after all :)
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Mate, that's terrifying
You know what? I'm going to make it even worse
Applejack closed her eyes. Life slowly faded from her body.
In a flash of panic, or maybe sudden anger, princess made a decision and kissed dying earth pony. Nothing happend. Was she to late?
AJ slowly opened her eyes. "It hurts"
Twilight looked at her concerned. Then quickly scanned farmer's body with her magic. Her mind was healthy but her body... necrosis just started. Body was dead.
Twilight gasped "I don't understand, it should work!"
"What did you do" AJ hissed through her teeth. Pain slowly became unbearable.
"But you should be healed! Allicorn kiss suppose to grand you eternal youth! Which is... " and then Twilight understood. In face of infinity, everypony was young.
Applejack screamed out of pain "please make it stop!"
But Twilight was aware there is nothing to be done. Spell locked orange pony in current state, for all eternity.
There, I ruined it. Enjoy!
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Yeah this just felt incredibly forced.