Hero's and villians, concepts formed by civilization, but where is that line drawn, when does good become evil? I suppose I'll find out. A new shape and a new life, question is, who do i save and who do I damm.
Very interesting turns of fate. Curious how the hunter is taking things. Also possible signs of blooming romance? Or at least mutual violent lust? Either way they seem to be in for a painfully fun time. Which is definitely better than just a painful time.
Your biggest writing issues I can see have to do with punctuation. Several places where one sentence should be two, a comma would be good for clarity, or where an extra comma makes things awkward to read. It isn't too bad. There were no points I actually struggled to understand anything, just had to take a few extra moments to re-read and figure things out. But it could certainly be improved with a bit more attention to that aspect of things.
11861192 Well, I hope my spelling is better at least, unfortunately, the software I use now is a pain in my ass. Grammarly regularly removes commas from places I intend to put them and adds them to places I had no thought to put them in the first place. I do hope it is an improvement over my old story at the very least.
Read the first 2 chapters and haven't read since until now and I slept on this one, good story. though I am kinda glad I waited this long, Now I can get a better idea of what the story is and if I should invest my time into it, which I am going to.
Now to wait what road this huntress chooses. And hopefully Spike wakes up that he's more than a "pet".
Very interesting turns of fate. Curious how the hunter is taking things. Also possible signs of blooming romance? Or at least mutual violent lust? Either way they seem to be in for a painfully fun time. Which is definitely better than just a painful time.
Your biggest writing issues I can see have to do with punctuation. Several places where one sentence should be two, a comma would be good for clarity, or where an extra comma makes things awkward to read. It isn't too bad. There were no points I actually struggled to understand anything, just had to take a few extra moments to re-read and figure things out. But it could certainly be improved with a bit more attention to that aspect of things.
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Well, I hope my spelling is better at least, unfortunately, the software I use now is a pain in my ass. Grammarly regularly removes commas from places I intend to put them and adds them to places I had no thought to put them in the first place. I do hope it is an improvement over my old story at the very least.
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I didn't notice any spelling or autocorrect issues, so I think you are good on that front.
It is a shame that the programs we use to help with our writing so often end up causing issues of their own.
Read the first 2 chapters and haven't read since until now and I slept on this one, good story.
though I am kinda glad I waited this long, Now I can get a better idea of what the story is and if I should invest my time into it, which I am going to.