Hero's and villains

The correct pluralization of "hero" is "heroes"; the word "hero's" is a possessive indicating something belonging to a hero.

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Will fix, thanks

With a few bounds, I was moving with an ease that would make one think that I had always had this shape. The distant sounds of animals going about their lives echoing throughout the trees. “Well forest, show me what you’ve got, I’ve always loved a challenge.”

Never provoke fate

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Exactly. And foxes are supposed to be smart too. The same should apply to kitsunes.

ohh baby I am ready for this, I wanna see were this goes! cheers man this was a great start I can't wait for the next chapter.

Found two errors;
"It a small bark of excitement I began pulling things out of the bag."
I believe this should have; "With a small bark"
And;
" I was large a bear."
I think our Protag is saying, he's as large as a bear? I believe so.

With that done, I want to say, this is a lot better in terms of premise and interest. I look forward to what you have in stock next.
You've given in your authors note a bit on the why the ponies aren't goodie two shoes, and that is fine. I don't mind them not being the good guys for once. But I want to hear your take on the why, and the how.

Now I'm wondering how Spike is being treated, or how the poor guy is viewed. Maybe something that can be used?
There is a lot of possibility here, and the only advice I have gotten for myself that I will share, is patience. Patience specifically with yourself. That's all I can say.

I feel like I’ve talked with you before, author. I was probably named “Newbie” at the time if that rings a bell. If I’m right, then glad to see this back, and the first chapter reminded me of our conversation. If not, then sorry for the bother.

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Hi, thank you for your input. I fixed the first error but I think I might be blind as I can't find the second, I can't actually find where I mentioned a bear at all, can you tell me which paragraph it is.

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Well, I can't find it either, but I swear it was there man.

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Well, I'm sure someone will find it again.

Glad to see a rewrite however I am unsure how to feel bout the hermaphrodite thing, I remember your old one had him as just a male witch I liked. When you gender bend the MC or the like it always seems off to me. Don’t get me wrong imma still read it, just hope I don’t see that stated to often and if we do get chapters that has that as the main focus I hope I’ll be able to skip it over if not we’ll I can power through, I enjoyed the original story for I love a good kitsune MC in the MLP universe it always brings quite the tale.

Anyways, all my words here aren’t meant to offend or anything of the like so please I hope none of you take it as such and I do hope to see the next chapter relatively soon.

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He/she was a hermaphrodite in the original too, it's not mentioned till the third chapter however and it's rather brief, the lack of detailed descriptions was part of the reason I decided a rewrite this in the first place, though at the moment the main character hasn't had a real need to change from he/him pronouns. Similarly, the subject of his name hasn't come up for the same reason. However, as time passes and he begins to experiment with his ability as a kitsune he might begin to change.

The original thinking behind the hermaphroditism was the fact that this character is somewhat of a self-insert in the light of the fact that he thinks a lot like how I do. With me being relatively gender neutral and Kitsune being natural shapeshifters I reasoned that his natural shifting would probably settle somewhere in between male and female hence him being dual-gendered.

Also, as a side note say what you will, I don't get offended easily, and as long as you're not being purposely insulting I'll generally take most comments with good humor.

This is going to be fun. *smiles like a kitsune, while snickering*

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Ah, I don’t remember that in the original but who am I to argue with the author. Anyways point still stands, can’t wait to see the next chapter.

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Though the existence of the magical rabbit did foreshadow the likelihood that there was other magical beast in this forest. I was large a bear I could try my luck with, but a pack of dire wolves or worse a Badger or wolverine. No thanks, I liked my testicles where they were thank you.

9th paragraph from the end.

Also, watch out. That could be I'jin

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Thank you shiro.

Already like it a lot and welcome back. Hope to see more in the near or distant future.

And I couldn’t, despite my rather sudden change in shape and gender any attempt to impose my old form using a memory simply changed the memory to seem as if I had always had this shape. That time I caught my first fish, I had used my tails to hold the rod, not my hands, despite me knowing I was human at the time. The memory of that one family picture everyone takes, I logically knew I was human when it was taken but the image I recalled had a kitsune in that group of blurred faces.

is he a girl or a boy

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In a rather impressive display of agility, I curled my body so that I could look under myself, I still had Male bits, though much to my shock a bit of probing about with a tail revealed that I was a Hermaphrodite.

This one sentence answers your question whether you mean past or present, at least in the biological sense. As a human he was male. As a kitsune he's a hermaphrodite, as in both male and female.

Again, that's biological. If you're referring to gender identity, logically one would think he identifies as male given his initial relief that his family jewels had not been stolen. However, it becomes less certain when you consider that his memories associated with his identity have all been altered to be as though he's always been a hermaphroditic nine-tailed kitsune.

I couldn’t help but stare dumbly at the letter as it began to smolder before being consumed in a flash of blue flames. I couldn’t help but feel a bit of dread, I played role-playing games. I knew what it meant when the game master starts with a set of powerful magical items, and who the fuck was CG, the fucking chaos gods?

Or perhaps something worse. A musician

I stared at it before silently slipping on my face. The mask fit my face smoothly and settled so comfortably along my muzzle that I imagined it would be easy to forget that I had put it on in the first place, startled as that warmth spread down my body. Looking at myself I watched as a bamboo chest plate formed over my midsection, reinforced with bands of silver covered IN faintly shimmering runes. I hesitated to call the metal silver, it was brighter and seemed to shimmer even beyond the runes etched into it.

Bold italics, I shall use. Small grammar mistakes, point them out I shall.

Forming on all of my tails where the fiery fur started to shift into a deep inky black was a series of silver metal bands that were paced evenly down my tails, twelve on each tail. The rings didn’t seem to weigh much and if I had to guess they would, in theory, act similar to brass knuckles or a roll of quarters. Their metal surface flickered with dim symbols whenever my tails moved too fast. Three thin chains of the same metal distances existed between each ring connecting them to each other and the main armour.

What is this word supposed to be? Is it even supposed to be there?

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fixed