• Published 8th Jun 2023
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They're after me! - EndlessPossibilities58



Someone help! They're coming for me!

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I need help!

Marcus ran as fast as he could, his heart pounding violently. They were hot on his heel, unrelenting in their pursuit of him as he tried to escape them in the dark forest. He was running blind, desperate to get away before they could catch him.

How did this all go so wrong? When he first appeared here, he thought it would be a dream come true - but it quickly turned into a nightmare. He should have noticed something was off, should have noticed how strange they were acting, should have realized the danger he was in. But he didn't, and now he was about to pay the price.

They were closing in on him, their hoof steps pounding on the forest floor not far behind. He dreaded to think of what would happen if they caught him, the thought too terrifying to imagine.

He kept moving, leaves and branches smacking him in the face as he ran. He just had to get away, he just had to.

And then the unthinkable happened.

He tripped.

He slammed into the forest floor, the impact forcing the air from his lungs. Ignoring the urge to nurse his pain, he quickly scrambled back up.

The fall had cost some valuable distance between him and his pursuers, who were now almost upon him. Knowing he wouldn't be able to outrun them anymore, he took cover amongst the foliage around him. Hiding behind a large mound of dirt, he got out of sight before they could spot him.

Soon the sound of hoof steps could be heard coming to a stop, as the owners started to search the area for him.

"Oh, Marcus~" trilled a singsong voice. "Do please come out, darling, we only wish to... talk..."

"Yeah, we promise we just want to hug and cuddle you half to death, definitely nothing more sinister." Chimmed in a familiar, bubbly voice.

He didn't trust them, not one bit. He knew that behind their assurances and sweet smiles, their intentions for him were not good.

He kept silent, doing his best to control his breathing and avoid drawing them to his position. They continued to search for him though, drawing closer and closer to his hiding spot. He knew he had to move, or else it wouldn't be long before they found him.

Making sure the coast was clear, he abandoned his hiding spot and started moving through the thick bushes around him.

"Got you!" Shouted a brash voice.

For a second, Marcus thought it was all over, his heart leaping in his chest. Whirling around, he expected to see one of them looming over him menacingly, but thankfully, that wasn't the case. Instead, he discovered that what really happened was that a certain rainbow-maned pegasus had jumped out at where he'd just been hiding, clearly expecting to find him there, with a confused look on her face when she didn't.

With a small smirk, he kept moving through the bushes. Once he felt he was far enough away, he stood up and was about to make his escape.

"Hello," said a soft, meek voice from behind him.

Marcus froze, fear overtaking him as a chill ran down his spine. Slowly, he turned around to the sight of a small, butter-yellow pegasus staring up at him.

He bolted.

"There he is!" he heard one of them shout, the ponies soon converging on his position.

They were right behind him, Marcus running in a panic through the woods as he tried to shake them. He didn't know where he was going, he just knew he had to get away.

Soon, he broke out into a clearing, a river running through it that blocked his path. He tried to double back, but before he could, six ponies burst out of the treeline, covering him.

He was trapped.

"There's nowhere to run," said the alicorn, Twilight Sparkle as she stepped forward.

"Please, don't do this," Marcus begged with fear.

Unfortunately, his pleas for mercy went on deaf ears to Twilight. "Get him!" Cried the alicorn.

At her word, all six ponies charged at the human, their eyes filled with hunger. Marcus tried to fend them off, but they proved to be too strong as they overwhelmed the poor boy.

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"Ohh, he's so cute. Yes, he is, yes he is," cooed Fluttershy in baby-talk, pinching Marcus' cheek.

As the ponies started swarming and showering him with affection, Marcus did everything he could to shake them off.

"Please," he begged again as Rarity started planting little butterfly kisses on his face. "Stop."

"Oh, I'm sorry," Pinkie Pie shook her head. "But after your little escape attempt we're going to have to tickle you twice as hard now," she smirked devilishly as she ripped up his shirt and started blowing raspberries on his belly.

He tried to resist laughing, but with the addition of Rainbow Dash and AppleJack tickling under his armpits, and Twilight nibbling at his toes, it was pretty much a futile effort.

"Hold on," said Twilight, getting the others to pause. "Look at us. What do we think we're doing, smothering this poor boy out in the woods?" As she spoke, Marcus felt a spark of hope bloom in his chest... but then that hope was quickly dashed. "We should do it at my place, it'll be much cozier there."

The rest of the group cheered at her words, getting off of Marcus as they started heading home. He tried to scramble away, but quickly found his feet enveloped by Twilight's magic, preventing his escape. Soon he found himself getting dragged along behind the ponies, all of them giggling with childlike glee as they made for Ponyville.

"No. No. Please!" Marcus pleaded desperately as he was taken along. "Let me go! Please, I beg of you."

He dug his fingers into the dirt, creating claw marks as he was dragged off. "I just wanted some personal space!" He cried as he was taken to his cute and cuddly fate.

Author's Note:

Just a little one-shot I came up with a little while ago. What do you think?

Comments ( 56 )

He dug his fingers into the dirt, creating claw marks as he was dragged off. "I just wanted some personal space!" He cried as he was taken to his cute and cuddly fate.

:facehoof:.

That pic looks like it came out of a horror movie.

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I know right, I found it on Derpibooru.

Dude that was a great story. I thought you put all the evil versions of the six in your story. Super misleading! I love it!!!

11604081

For once, I agree with your opinion.

:moustache: Yep, There goes another one, Room three...
:duck: Spike are you okay?
:moustache: Na, Just wanted some time with ... Myself... Yea that.
:raritywink: I'll help, Ice cream?
:moustache: Sure
:trollestia: Twilight why is the castle full of hoomans?
:facehoof: Lyra? It's got to be the hands!

11604107
Thanks, that's what I was going for. I'm glad you liked it.

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11604109
And what would that opinion be exactly?

And so Marcus suffered a fate worse than death. Getting cuddled, tickled, and kissed by 6 cute ponies. Those evil monsters.

Uh, any way I can suffer that horrible fate too? I've been a bad little boy, so I deserve every bit of the suffering from those monsters,

But seriously, this was a cute funny story. I kinda figured more or less of what was going to happen, but the twist was still amusing just the same.:rainbowlaugh:

Marcus ran as fast as he could, his heart pounding violrntly.

You misspelled violently here

DAWWW SO CUTEEE.
Raise hoof Can I have more of this cute story please?:twilightsmile:

11604136

I personally think that the guy was being such a baby, and should have just take it like a man.

11604151
Thanks for telling me, I just fixed it.

11604158
Maybe so, but take this into account. In my headcanon, they are smothering him, like he's a puppy or a baby. So much so, that he literally had to run away to get some air.

11604153
Hmm, what would you like to see more of exactly?

11604169
More cute stories of Marcus and the main 6 loving on him.

:rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: Marcus, why so serious? This is one best possible outcomes should you find yourself in Equestria.

:rainbowlaugh: what did I just read

11604151

a fate worse than death.

You know, I was actually going to use that line. Originally, I was going to have it go.

"I just wanted some personal space!" He cried as he was taken off to a fate worse than death

But, eventually, I ended up doing it the other way.

11604168

Okay, fine. Being smothered by literal ponies does seem too embarrassing to endure.

But, if it was in the mlp anthro universe. Where the Mane Six are tall, amazon-like anthro's with some nice and big figures, and assets. Loving you and smothering you, well that's a entirely different story. :ajsmug:

He dug his fingers into the dirt, creating claw marks as he was dragged off. "I just wanted some personal space!" He cried as he was taken to his cute and cuddly fate.

Famous last words. Literally, I’m going to remember this for the rest of the day. XD

Judging by the cover, I thought this was gonna go way different. Pretty cool though, good work

11604221

But, eventually, I ended up doing it the other way.

I think the way you did it was better, so I say it was a good call to change it.




11604256

Okay, fine. Being smothered by literal ponies does seem too embarrassing to endure.

And this story wouldn't be nearly as funny or even that interesting IMO if Marcus did just take it and not even try to run, and nothing else happened, so there's that too.

Death by snu snu

11604313
Ha, thanks, Even before writing it, I knew that was how I wanted it to end.

11604589
900+ words buildup for such a simple joke. That’s what I call talent. 👍

Wow that was funny and also a bit scary! This was a great story!

Death by a thousand.

Hilarious, but the image cover is scary ASF. Applejack's eyes are the worst.

11604813
I know right. When I was searching for cover art for this, I knew I wanted an image with the main 6 that had a creepypasta vibe to it, and this one fit the bill perfectly.

I wrote a story similar to yours.

In my story the Mane 6 chase him down over an understanding.

I have to admit, humans running from ponies for being TOO cuddly is pretty funny.

Good job.

11604874
The one with the brain-sucking slug on his head? Yeah, I read that one, I even dropped a comment on it. It was good.

Is this supposed to be a good or bad ending?

11605030
Depends on which party you ask :trollestia:

But really though, as far as good or bad are concerned, I consider the ending as a 'good' one. While Marcus isn't very happy with his predicament, he is in absolutely no danger and they have no desire to harm him.

There is no personal space in Equestria, there is only...

Cuddles...

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die of laughter counts?

Fair enough. I would probably do that too if the roles were reversed.

He dug his fingers into the dirt, creating claw marks as he was dragged off. "I just wanted some personal space!" He cried as he was taken to his cute and cuddly fate.

Yeah, no.
I'm afraid you have unrealistic expectations.

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You see, among ponies personal space isn't exactly common.
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Source.
And even those are just the examples from season 1...

Edit: So many examples you can't even fit them into Fimfiction.net, you have to click here instead:
https://derpicdn.net/img/view/2018/11/23/1889331.gif

I really could feel the feeling of fear from the main character at the start, It really got me!

(Also, technically tickles were used some centuries ago to actually torture people, so the ending can actually still be scary, Lol)

11605789
I'm glad that you found the story immersing.

(Also, technically tickles were used some centuries ago to actually torture people, so the ending can actually still be scary, Lol)

I did not know that.:rainbowhuh:

I went into this expecting an grimdark crossover edgefest straight out of 2012
What I got instead made me chuckle.

Good job

11605867
Thanks, that was my intention, I'm glad you liked the story.

just out of curiosity, what did you think it was crossing over with?

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