Ummmm..............I really like her...mane *good story*

Hmm. Good art and zebra characters? You sir have my full and undivided attention....oh look shiny thing.

The writing style is interesting. Other than a few misplaced dashes and colons, everything checks out. The accents could use a bit of work though. Having set rules for certain words helps, but it helps even more to sound whatever you're writing out. Accents exist to make speaking easier, so what you write should just roll off the tongue.

Applejack seems a bit out of character. Sure, she should embody the southern racist, but she just isn't that kind of character. Her harsh treatment of Applebloom and her brutal honesty aren't very endearing, either. Hopefully, the plot — which is brilliant, by the way — can explain this a bit more and redeem her.

I like it (good stuff, you think those ponies would learn racism is bad (Especially sense that brought the windigo to there ancestor and nearly turn there world to a eternal ice hell.)

We need a Zecora emoticon. Until then Celestia will have to do KARMA baby. Nice use of Poison Joke in this story, I imagine Twilight will have a VERY interesting report to make to Celestia. Now I must read Chapter 2 :)

I LOVE IT! (I want to see more) btw heres some stuff to see

http://adcoon.deviantart.com/art/Applecora-274056243

http://iopichio.deviantart.com/art/Zecora-271424488

http://zomashu.deviantart.com/art/With-Some-Pie-241396805

I agree to a certain extent with the above post. However, I disagree on the racist part. To begin with, the ponies don't actually hate Zecora, they actually seem to be more afraid of her supposed hexes and curses more than anything.  If Applejack was racist she would just use "Zebras" instead of "Zecora" when she was talking about her.  As for Applejack's treatment of Applebloom, she is just trying to be a good sister and is worried about Aplebloom's safety in the latter half of the story.

As for the writing itself, the dialogue fits well with the characters and the setting is very well written. I can;t wait to read the next chapter.

Great story, I really liked it. Would've been funny if Applejack had become a Zebra in the TV show

Wait. Incomplete means more chapters. YAY!

Favorited!

This sounds pretty damn good. Will continue reading, my good writer!

-Glassed

>>8926389263

  Actually it means that I fail at ensuring I clicked the correct button when submitting a story.  Sorry, that's all she wrote.  

>>8911389113

Hmm, thanks.  I'll take another gander at it regarding the accent

>>8920089200

Woo, thanks! : D

If I may say, you could leave it at that. A nice ending, it definitively had.

This could have been an ending, of truth and friendship. Yet keep them coming, and...

Ah buck it! I liked it, please make more!

-Glassed

A story of zebras I must see this.

And what's this, featured as well?

Thid is a story no one should miss,

All I can say is, aw, what the hell.

I love this story to it's entirety,

Please make more for the sake of society!

I implore you, good sir, don't be shy to make more.

These escapades written we do so adore.

But if that's all there is, and this story is shelved,

I'll simply make do, and just write more, myself.

wow dude. amazing story!

>>8964289642

Awwwww

YAY!! RACISM!!!

Applejack does seem a bit out of character, but I love the whole gag about her being literally forced to rhyme everything she says.

i would like to say ''i like this story''...

...but i hope it turns a bit gory

i have a what twisted mind....

...its the blood shed i like to find.

but even so it makes me grin...

...and difinitely a laugh came in.

for as it is, as it is now...

...i do have to make my bow.

the story about a pony in organge...

... ow snap well asome job keep it up

Great story but I have to wonder, if Applejack is this much of a bigot with zebras why did she give Twilight and Spike such a warm welcome? Are Zebras more deadly than dragons now? And if she was this angry at Zecora she might have murdered Gilda. O.o

I have to say that this is the first fic where I've wanted to sock Applejack in the jaw.

That being said, it's an interesting idea, well written, and the characters, including Applejack, are depicted in a believable manner

4.5 stars

It is over

Cool story bro.

that is all oh and 5 stars

We're surprised to have seen such racism

from creatures every color of the spectrum.

It's something that you wouldn't expect

like that allegorical episode of the oldest Star Trek.

In every episode of MLP we see

three pony races living in harmony.

The issues the writers seemed to have ducked

is that the Earth Ponies are throughly screwed.

dang raciest ponies im going to track this it a new perspective

Also great use of the poison joke i think you could even do the same to pinky

also who sort of caught on during the episode

Ah good story with a good plot. I enjoyed it.

                                   -Fin

Applejack's bitterness towards Twilight strikes me as something that needs resolution within the story. More as it comes to me, but this is an interesting idea.

Epic what if

scenario story

plz write more what if stories

I for one feel this story was too short,

and for this I will leave a small retort.

It was a short read,

but ended with a good deed.

Applejack had an unjust attitude,

But Zecora was very shrewd.

She saw through this ponies hate,

and they ended up friends, if just a bit late.  

nice, good, interesting solid story. Rhyming is awesome. Apple-rasist is very funny to read. Overall, I was happy

This looks to be a story of good pedigree.

What would have happened if Zebrajack used a word like orange? Would her brain melt?

>>9078590785 Or silver, if they tried to do that they'd probably panic.

I think they should make that a joke on the show...

Love the description and the story! :D

Cool story bro.

>>8964289642 I wouldn't be too sure about that.

I smell something roundabout, for romance hides about.

Just an idea to go on. But it certainly would be an interesting shipping to be sure.

Nopony has done it yet either.

Now my headcanon is that Applejack's "Zebra sense remark to Zecora in "The Cutie Pox" was actually an inside joke between the two.

Goooooooooood...

NOW SHIP THEM!

Very good story! I like the way you've explored Applejack's stubbornness and conservative attitude while also exploring the reasons for her prejudice in quite a reasonable fashion. The rhyming was very well written, and quite hilarious when Applejack had to do it.

>>9049290492 this could have turned into full on friend/romance-shipping, and i would have supported it all the way.

This was extremely good There isn't enough Zecora in this fandom.

Also I feel bad that you had to deal with all the Rhyming.

Heh, had me grinning like an idiot at the end, very good story, thank you!

(It also makes me realize we are missing Zecora smileys!)

>>9078590785

Actually, orange does have rhymes. Strange, Mange, Range, those are but a few that we've used many times.

>>9112291122 Silver, Sliver, River. You need not ryhme all of the word. You can ryhme just about half of it, so long as you have a reasonable amount of letters left, like the above Orange and Strange, and Silver and Sliver. Hell, they don't even need to be spelled the same. They just have to sound the same.

An amazing fic.

Truly unique in its scope.

Five stars all around.

(Poetry buffs, count syllables. )

Applejack just seems way too out of character in this.

Dem zebras I tell ya what

Nah I'm joking, I'm not racist, although I think Applejack might be.

Reading this tale was good and fun, I hope you write another one.

Created Potion of Cure Poison Joke. Alchemy increased to 35.

Now that the Skyrim reference is out of the way, I can tell you that this story is awesome. Usually I would follow praise with some sort of critique, but I really couldn't find anything wrong. Very, very well done.

Oh, wait. Just thought of something. I'm not much of a fan of Macintosh's portrayal as fairly thick-witted. In his few scraps of dialogue, I detected a subtle wit that hints at a fairly intellectual state of mind. Mind you, that's just my interpretation.

This is great my dear friend,

but can you keep going until its end?

I'd like to see how you direct this fic,

Then again I guess I'm just being a dick.

Or am I?

I cannot lie.

I love this work and you too bro,

And with that I suppose I'll go.

Lates

P.S. should we pester the creator into creating a zebra emote?

Silly Applejack jumping to conclusions

With these images of witchcraft, what silly illusions

Zecora made friends, without them, a terrible loss

So without further ado, your story was

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Fucking Daisy.

Very intresting. Maybe a bit out of charicter for Aj at first but then again it fits. i liked it.

Nice work on your story, now I just hope it doesn't get boring.

That was a very interesting story indeed! Please do more like this.

GAWD DAMMIT LILY!

Other than that, Awesome story man.

TAKE A MILLION STARS!, TAKE MY WARP STAR!, AND TAKE MY DRAGOON STAR!

That was really powerful. Excellent.

I can picture a world where MLP:FIM is made for an older audience; this would have been an actual episode there.

>>9010090100

Twilight is still is an Equestrian pony. Zecora is not. Twilight is familiar and Zecora is not. So the welcome met is rolled out for Twilight but not for Zecora. Pinkie Pie is similar with that regard and is probably more racist than Applejack as Pinkie Pie normally goes out of her way to welcome every new pony face to Ponyville.

What more Twilight is a unicorn, a Canterlot unicorn sent by the Princess of Equestria, Goddess and ruler of the land. There is some indication that unicorns are the upper class in Equestrian society, (ie Canterlot, most ponies there are unicorn) and historically (Hearth's Warming Eve). So it is natural for Applejack to want to be friendly with a unicorn, especially if said unicorn has been sent by The Princess, who probably paid your farm no small sum of Bits to provide the food for the Summer Sun Celebration.

And lastly, you have hit racism on the head. It is dumb and arbitrary.

....Because, of course, it was the redneck hick pony who was the real racist in the story. Right.

I can rhyme just as well when feeling inspired,

I've done quite a lot and am often admired

But enough of patting my back, that's not why I'm here,

Speaking in rhyme is a hobby most dear

It can be hard work, the path can be rough

But I struggle along, never saying "Enough!"

Giving up's for a coward, that's not what I do

I see you think the same and I'm most proud of you.

Zecora can be tough; speaking in two-part rhyme

Matching her speaking style can take quite some time

But you persevered, yes you climbed the mountain,

Soon enough the rhymes flowed from your hand like a fountain

I doff my cap to your story, this tale that you tell

Applejack as a zebra? This sure won't end well!

Mayhaps at some point we might share rhymes between,

Might a friendship result? That's yet to be seen...

Cool story bro. Take my stars.

An excellent story, here. Great rhyming as well. One thing I can never pull off well...

Iambic Pentameter, nice! A story that was great, and taught to never hate!

Yes, Pinky was worse. But her way of thinking doesn't fit the narration - you couldn't write this story with Pinky as the main character. For example, you couldn't describe her gradually changing her mind because there is nothing gradual about Pinky. So it had to be Applejack.

Not to beat a dead horse(lol) but I still think you missed an opportunity by not exploring Applejack's fear and distrust of the supernatural as a whole, and specifically her bitterness towards Twilight, unicorns in general, and assumption that Twi must be a secret bigot. Maybe a follow up story?

>>9078590785 >>9112291122

There are ways to cheat. According to the pony lyricist Sand Helm,

"To find a rhyme for silver

Or any “rhymeless” rhyme

Requires only will, ver-

Bosity and time."

For example:

Spike the Dragon's colored purple

And his flame is green, not red.

If you ever make him burp, he'll

Spit a letter at your head.

Nice story bravo

Great story!

The flower sisters made my day by the way - The horror! The hor-mmph!

Interesting.  Keep up the good work.

you don't have to right now but i would love it if you made a part 2

and have it.. (if you want) .. ship them PLEASE

or am i going to have to say "Would you kindly"?

I don't read many fanfics. I think I've read maybe three in my entire life, and only two were MLP. I saw this story a while back and the cover art really caught my attention. Well, couple hours ago, finally caved and read the story. And I must say, I don't regret it. It is very well written, well paced, and I actually felt it could have passed for an actual episode. You captured everypony's character to a T and the rhyming was quite enjoyable. A few scenes felt a little too fast, but maybe that's just me. And it certainly didn't take away from the overall story. I rarely read fanfics, but I am glad I sat down and read this one. Keep up the good work and I hope to see more stories from you in the future.

The Horror. The horror. never get tierd

Wow, this is a great read. I should probably look up more fics on Zecora.

This fic seems like it'd be how Zecora would be introduced if she was a new character in Season 2. Nice story!  

Country=racist redneck? No stars for you.

I liked the apple metaphor but Applejack forgets that not all bad-looking apples are all-bad inside. Sometimes you only have to remove the ugly spots and under them there is perfect, eatable fruit. What's more, ugly-looking, awkwardly soft apples are the best for the compote... At least, that's what my grandma used to say.

That was the best fanfic on Zecora I have ever saw! Wait... That's the ONLY fanfic on Zecora I've ever seen... Needs to fix that!

(In response to part of the description:) My route to a destination is always a U-turn. Strange how I never seem to arrive where I wanted to go...

Another Interpretation: "SO MANY LINKS!!! MUST CLICK THEM ALL!!! SO MUCH INTERNETS!!! MOAR!!! MOAR!!!MOOOOAAARDFYUJH.HGJFDTGG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"

...that's pretty much the gist of it...

sooooooooo much rhyming my head is going to explode if this keeps up.

Dang, Applejack was  a real bitcharoony in this one; to Twilight, Applebloom AND Zecora! Still, the concept and moral were good enough that it was still a good read.

Zecora has the patience of an angel, I would say... seriously, I doubt that any pony would have put up with all the crap she went though this story. Also, to think that the mane six (minus twilight) could be so easily whipped into a lynching mob.

A great twist on the events of Bridel Gossip, to be sure. Definitely worth the thumbs up and fave.

Great story, just the right size and feels like an actual (alternate version of) episode. I even laughed and woke up my wife at one of the Lily freakouts. :) Nice job!

Nice story, man.  Imagine if the entire mane 6 had been zebra-fied...

Rhyme time.  lol

>>643085643085

AUUUUGGGGGH I don't even want to think about it.  

>>643266643266

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I could barely read this until I got past the "bad inside, bad outside" section, which was completely and utterly wrong, and AJ should know better (although surface blemishes do mean a great deal when it comes to marketing, so "bad outside, bad for sales" is completely true).

The writing itself is excellent.

>>643324643324 Filter-feeding sharks are hilarious.

And the story is awesome.

While the writing itself is very good, I must say Applejack seems pretty out of character in this story, and I'm convinced it's more than just my inner fanboy speaking. I'll go ahead and shorten this post by saying Masquerade313 pretty much summed up my thoughts on Applejack's personality here, and the "bad inside, bad outside" attitude is just not Applejack at all, but I'm guessing you did that for the sake of the plot, which is great by the way. Excellent work so far and I'll have to take a look at chapter 2 a little later.

As said before, I found Applejack's behavior quite out of character in this fic, but overall it was a really good read and well deserving of a like. Well done!

*stares*

....  I really like it's mane?

A *good* story...

I've read lots of stories and can now see the signs

If the story is well written just by reading a few lines

But this was the first time, and my mind was blown,

That I would thumb up by description alone!

By reading, this choice was shown rightly made

You wrote a great story, is author your trade?

Deviation from canon, yet true to the show

This was a great story, a watch I'll bestow.

nice take on the events.....in the future I will have to write a zebra HIM anyway....nice job

HOORAY FOR ALLEGORY! Always nice to find a fiction that could legitimately be an episode.

here's a thought... same thing but with Rainbow Dash please

Ah, the first story I ever read on fimfic, glad I found it again

Was anyone else subconsously trying to read the normal text in rhyme or is it just me?

>>22788482278848 Yup I did that too (possibly too much as well)