You are a human, and you are also now in Equestria for some reason. Why? Don't worry about it.
The real question is, why aren't any of these ponies running around scared shitless calling you a monster? After all, they all saw you come out of the Everfree. Well as it turns out, wearing glasses has something to do with it.
Here's a really short and simple story for all of you to read! Had this idea pop into my head while I wrote some other stories Im working on for this site, and I thought it was sort of funny so I decided to write it out. I hope it's an enjoyable read, and if you have any criticisms please leave them in the comments, I'm always happy to read and learn where I could improve my writing.
[Be me, log into fanfiction site, check to see if my favorite stories got updated, see notifications in corner, open said notifications: My face when this dumb story makes it to the front page]
[2/27/2023]
Definitely humorous. Smirk & eye roll.
Typo.
"Answers", and there should be a comma after "Sparkle".
Have.
Coarse.
adjective
1.
rough or loose in texture or grain.
"a coarse woolen cloth"
It should be "of course".
Have.
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I've corrected the mistakes, if you find any more please point them out and I'll change them right away.
Thank you for the corrections, wrote this around 2 in the morning so brain wasn't fully working with words and writing
Considering how I've been told that I look, ahem, "threatening" without my glasses on, I can believe this story.
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No prob. Also, you're good with the mistakes, so you shouldn't have to worry about them now.
makes sense
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makes sense.
Well, if i see a giant dog with two heads wearing glasses, at least i will stop to think why is hat, and will jump to a similar conclusion that twilight reached, at the beggining at least.
It's a fair point honestly. Glasses imply a lot of things. Sapience, a understanding of illness and correction, even a knowledge of complex science.
Nice. Also story should be marked as Second Person.
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and a way of moving that doesn't tend to break them.
Walking in reading a book might also work.
So what you’re saying is I should toss a pair of reading glasses into my “Emergency Displaced Travel KitTM”.
Kind of expected that when he took his glasses off, that would have been the moment that Dash happened to show up, saw the evil horrifying monster accosting Twilight and flattened him.
Might have been a funnier ending, too.
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Ah crud completely forgot to add that, thanks for the heads up. Added the tag👍
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Damn that would had been funnier, missed opportunity there
To be fair, glasses is a sign of a higher intelligence in a species-wide scale. A species that advanced to the point that vision enhancements are used not for the sole purpose of helping hunters see prey better must be a species that had evolved some sort of scholarly tendencies, and thus more likely to be trustable.
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Indeed
Also bring a soft touch
It helps
I was wondering if the joke was gonna be the ponies lacking a sense of permanence, like Anon takes his glasses off for a sec, and suddenly the town erupts in panic and ponies running for their lives, then puts them back on, and the ponies are like "oh, phew it's just you Anon," and eventually becomes Anon rapidly putting on and removing his glasses, and the ponies flipping between panic and calmness.
Ha, this was amusing; who know glasses had that kind of power? One more reason to finally get my own glasses replaced
As far as critiques go, this story feels like a chapter 1 or prologue than a completed one-shot, probably due to how it ended like this.
That's something you would usually see at the end of a chapter of the early parts of an HIE story, not the end of one. There wasn't really a "punchline" or otherwise twist at the end to help it feel like the end of a short but silly story. Something like what 11518256 brought up could have made a juicy one and been a wacky way to end it. If you write another story that has a very silly premise, don't be afraid to milk it.
I ditched my glasses for contact lenses years ago.
I will be so screwed...
A nice and short story. It kinda works as an introduction of sorts and opens a chance for a story about him trying to unveil the big mystery while he lives with them.
This is a very refreshing view on the ponies and their mannerisms.
This was a good, nice short story.