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EroPony1000

I want to make clean, concise and elegant eroticism... about horses.

EroPony1000 Joined 26th Jul, 2019 · Offline

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dirty little secret
dirty little secret #1 · Apr 9th, 2023 · · ·
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This is your official review for the Furry Foray Festival Contest!

I've tried to be as objective as possible, but of course there are limits. I've tried to avoid being biased or arbitrary as much as I can, and hopefully I've succeeded at least somewhat. The full, final results will be announced on May 4th, and winners will be contacted shortly afterward to ask how they would like to accept their prizes. When readings these comments, please keep in mind that I know I'm often overly critical -- to the point where I can always find nitpicks even with the greatest works of literature. So don't take anything personally!

Notes:
- The beginning of this story is pretty fuckkin dark, man.
- It's kind of weird that Krystal wakes up so horny. Quite a mood swing from how dark and moody the story has been so far.
- Twilight’a A stylish new addition to Twilight's name!
- This clopfic reads like it really didn't want to be a clopfic. It wanted to be a dark/sad fic about loss and betrayal and emotional scars ... and it seems like the horniness and the sex was just added to that for the sake of making it a clopfic.
- That said, while the actual sex was short and maybe a bit lacking in detail, it did feature some interesting interactions and positions, especially when Krystal was on Twilight's back.
- Seems like to do a fic like this properly, it would need to be much longer. Then there would be room for both the melancholy and the clop ... and maybe even room for a resolution where Krystal goes on a mission to find Twilight's old friends.

Scores:
Provocativeness: 19
Progression: 40
Payoff: 35
Pacing: 60
Personality: 85
Prose: 72
Total: 311
For more information on what these scores mean, see the scoring rubric.

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