Pipp vs. The Mare-stream

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With the advent of the Marestream, new adventures are on the horizon for Pipp and her friends. However, Pipp may soon discover that air travel isn't exactly what she suspected.

Written for Bean's Writting Group, with special thanks to my pre-reader, EileenSaysHi

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Flamewarrior02

Flamewarrior02 #1 · Dec 24th, 2022 · · ·

In loving memory of Señor Butterscotch

Axolotl222

Axolotl222 #2 · Dec 24th, 2022 · · ·

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He will be missed

Hyper Star

Hyper Star #3 · Aug 24th, 2023 · · ·

“ Please select your travel destination ,” the voice repeated. Zipp turned towards her friends with a grin on her muzzle.

Meanwhile, Izzy was staring out the window with a massive grin on her muzzle. “Oh my hoofness. We’re actually flying! Gah! This is so exciting! I’ve never flown before!” Izzy’s smile slowly faded, replaced by a confused frown. She turned around. “Hey guys?”

A sinister grin then sprouted on Pipp’s muzzle. “ Oh, really… ” she said. “Let’s just see about that.”

I think "a grin on her face" would be better then "on her muzzle".

Sparky giggled and clapped his hooves, which Hitch interpreted as a yes. Pipp sighed again.

Uuhhhhh, Sparky has hand's, not hooves.

Moving on, this was hilarious, especially when the AI said the part about Pipp’s flank not needing heating as it already has a large enough "volume", the was the roast of the day.

Axolotl222

Axolotl222 #4 · Aug 25th, 2023 · · ·

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Howdy howdy! Thanks for the feedback, I'm glad to hear you liked it.
Actually, looking back it, it's kinda funny that I wrote this before the AI boom.

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