Twilight finds herself captured by pirate cans of soda! Will she survive the ordeal? Newly revised.
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I'm having a hard time following the chain of events, but it's a relatively good story.
I don't think there's all that much to really put a review in for, so you're off the hook.
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Well that's no good. Was it all a jumbled mess, or were there certain areas that gave you trouble?
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There were only one or two spots where I had timeline trouble and some PoV issues, mostly near the beginning.
That was about it. Good job, otherwise!
Clarity should now be fixed.