You somehow someway find yourself into Equestia. The first day impressions are not to most welcoming. Turns out trying to be eaten by a Manticore is not a great way of saying this place is a great place! On top of that there is a slight language barrier between you and the denizens of this magical world you find yourself in. Well expect for a pegasus named Fluttershy who kinda only understands you being an alien animal after all! Well with the help of Twilight and her friends you get your chance living here peacefully.
Alone.
By your self; as the last human being.
Will this suck? Or will this be a grand ol' time in this land. Well there is only one way to find out!
Chapters (11)
Really? You read this over even once after you typed it? And somehow "horse weenies" looked okay to you when it should have been "whinnies"?
Was interested in this fic, but Flutters seems out of character here and jumped to the stare too easily for me to tolerate. Well, I am someone who hates the overpowered stare anyway, but seeing it done here is perhaps the worse I have ever read. At least in most fics where it's done the human or oc is actually doing something more serious to warrant it instead of simply asking for answers. I think I am not going to read further if this is the kind of characterization I am going to get.
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I never said that I was good at it but I'll be correct that thank you that's embarrassing.
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Fair enough sorry to here that, if this wasn't your cup of tea no problem. And thank you for the criticism
What even is this characterization? It's so bad and out of character for fluttershy to behave like that it instantly throwed me out of the story
Also seriously fluttershy you possibly take "animal" out of they're natural habitat while they are unconcious and when they ask questions you punish them like it you would punish discord or a dragon while you don't even know that they sapient, not to mention YOU CAN SPEAK TO ANIMALS WHY CAN'T YOU JUST TALK TO HIM???
ALSO
This.
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... Well damn them ...
Thank you for the criticism for an out of character thing for Fluttershy in an alt universe story with a twist on her ability to speak with animals. Perhaps I didn't convey the strange coviet of this situation, but, I will take this into consideration moving forward.
Alt universe doesnt'e excuse characters acting like morons and even if it did why even make a big deal out of it if she won't use it anyways and still treat him like shit? Not to mention it's not the talking with animals ability that i am mad about, it's because she is behaving like idiot
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Well I might to a slight tune up here on their with this edit, hopefully this is al little better than my little blunder.
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. While you tried to make her using the stare more justified if doesn't work since he really didn't do anything wrong and is falsely blamed for shit. That's still wrong. Either remove her using the stare or make it actually a bit justified.
You didn't fix my fucking issue! Thanks for getting my hopes up only to make me be even more disappointed
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Which is your right and it's my right to stop reading. Good luck though.
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Well unfortunately there is an impass here sense this stare will come up at a later chapter that I have planned to make it full circle.
Regardless it seems you are not enjoying my musings. Fair enough I tried.
Cheers
This story is pretty interesting, I think I will stick around for the upcoming chapters.
Also, wtf is with all the criticism around this story? The only thing I found wrong with it is the very slight and infrequent grammar/spelling mistakes that could be fixed with a second proofread.
Don't let all of this discourage you from writing, everyone starts somewhere.
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Thank you for the encouragement and that's great you find my little story worth the time investment. That means a lot. 👍
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It's a pretty good story man. Keep it up
Yea, it's pretty good. Was wondering when he would be able to communicate
Dayum man! Ever since I saw the first chapter (which was actually a day ago), I liked this story! You have a huge potential my guy, keep it up!
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It kinda funny when you just relax and do something for fun rather than doing it for prestiges or notoriety, it comes out better.
And I thank you for the kind comment it brings me joy that people find entertainment in my silly story idea
Dude is thinking facts tho!
Awesome chapter, I really enjoyed it!
"This Spy has already breached our defences"
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It could be you, it could be me. It could even be... Discord
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God knows I feel old knowing those references...
But glad you are enjoying my mystery so far
Damn...That was sad...Like, really man.
You did a good job though
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Mission accomplished.
Thank you, I was going for a deep sorrow with this chapter that will hopefully wrap up this story in a nice little mysterious bow.
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Wait...Does it mean that this is a final?
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No Just nearing the end.
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Oh well, good luck then!
Uh...Oh...
Just a question.
Is his name actually Windle?
I mean I didn't see him correcting them at any point during the whole story (or I missed it somewhere).
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No, that is just what they call him, and "Windle" doesn't recall certain details of himself for some odd reason.
weird ass stuff is going on here