Hitch thought that the end of his shift was going to be normal; clock out, head home, shower, and go to bed. That was until his childhood best friend, and three new best friends decided that he was going to come to the Brighthouse to hang out with them, using Pipp as a weapon to get Hitch to agree, knowing he had some sort of crush on her.
The sleepover part however, didn't exactly go as planned.
Professional Audio Reading done here: Part 1 -https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ewYyn5bTZ_4
Part 2 - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7z0Oh00OgEM
There is now a sequel, called I Will Always Be with You, To the End of Time
Chapters (1)
Really nice work, Waffle.
Good use of language, nice descriptions, conversations were good. It had a good flow to it. Really nice going for your first Mlp story.
Keep it up, it is certainly better than my first story. Haha!
I would say this is a pretty nice story so it looks like the girls especially pipp actually got hitch to join with them for this sleepover the other is kind of went ahead leaving pipp and hitch alone just to wait for him to be finished with his job while that was done unfortunately there was a major rainfall so they didn't have any choice to go to hitch apartment and there's no way they can't get to the Bright House so instead they're going to just stay at his house in the meantime and it looks like they're having a pretty romantic moments with each other and apparently they really like each other and it looks like the rain is still not letting out so they decided to call it for the night sleeping together again this is a pretty nice story I really like it keep up the good work
Cute.
Whenever there's a new speaker, it equals a new paragraph
Their relationship looks magical! Nice story!)
Awwww!
So adorable!
...eek! Who leaked this story out?! I'm so embarrassed~๐
I have my suspicions
...Zipp's been reading up a lot about weather control recently.
Exactly, we don't normally wear clothes. Except you, Mr. Sheriff Hitch, sometimes...erm...I...
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Hitch put in a pre-order for my gamer-girl down blanket the next morning~~ <3 I offered him half-price
Congrats on your first story!!
Hugs 'n' kisses (esp. to you Hitch~),
๐ซ๐พ๐ ๐ ๐ซ๐๐๐ถ๐๐, H.R.H.
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Thanks for your feedback! I will go ahead and start to fix the errors... and done!
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Not gonna lie the clothing part with the linked photo got me ๐
As for the leaked story... there's much more.
As for now, take care!
I really loved the storyโค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธ and I'm seriously waiting for the next part, (if you're going to write another of course X3) you have so much potential writing in this style with romance and tease ๐๐, everything was perfect!!
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Thank you very much. I appreciate it!
While I loved making this story, I don't think it's then end for Pipp and Hitch. We'll have to see, only time will tell!
Very sweet ship.
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Thank you for the feedback!
Stay tuned! :)
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Oh thereโs going to be new chapters or a sequel?
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This story is completed.
However, I think the journey of these two are far from over.
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Ahh yes, I know this song. It really works here! ๐๐
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No, "Pipp Pipp hooray", your highness?
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Something that bothered me.
Unless you're the landlord, apartments are rented, not owned.
In the movie, there's a scene where Sprout is ripping the pictures off from the Hitch calendar, and ranting his jealousy of Hitch, one of the admirable Hitch traits, is that he has a paid off mortgage.
Which usually means house, townhouse, or condo.
Unless he was living in a tiny crumbling dump, the mental security, and financial freedom of owning a fully paid off home, is hard to give up in favor of renting again.
Even if it is a new apartment, that's tricked out with all the latest bells and whistles.
I really like the picture for the fic that you chose.
The body language works for the first half, and the onesies/pj's/sweater jumpsuits really work for Hitch's feelings and the apartment dialog.
Also, I've been a Sparity shipper since season 1.
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Thanks for your feedback! ๐
I elected to change multiple aspects of this version of G5 that I have created, such as no Sparky, Hitch in an apartment, and changing who Hitch might have feelings towards (usually itโs perceived as Sunny).
Maybe I should have put Alternate universe on this story, but I feel like that tag still wouldnโt support what I mean by aspects being different to the movie and the Netflix series.
Awwwwww this made my day! Boi this is a really hard day. Thank you for your story!
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Iโm glad you liked it! Make sure to enjoy the other additions to this story. I hope they have the same effect! :)
It was a very cute story. I found it a bit weird that most of their conversation took place in the shower, but overall a cute story
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Understandable! I guess Pipp did what she had to do :D
I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and hope you enjoy the rest of them.
~Waffle