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Limp Foot is a young colt with a bad foreleg, just trying to find somepony that would be his friend. However, it's hard to find a friend when nopony wants to be around you... because of the bully's. All of the bully's love to swarm around Limp Foot. Whether it's at school, the play ground, even his own house. His life just seems to be getting worse and worse.

-Please point out any mistakes.~ Beware of spelling. ( where, were, we're )-

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Fugal

Fugal #1 · Sep 28th, 2012 · · · Hard Times ·

Thanks for the dislike, however, I would greatly enjoy it if you said the reason's for the dislike. ( same goes for like's)

Exemter

Exemter #2 · Sep 28th, 2012 · · · Hard Times ·

I think he disliked it because of a few grammar mistakes. But I thought it was good. If you just get past that it's fine.

Fugal

Fugal #3 · Sep 28th, 2012 · · · Hard Times ·

1352333 Thanks for the comment. I will look into fixing my grammar.

Syzygy

Syzygy #4 · Sep 28th, 2012 · · · Hard Times ·

This is a pretty good story aside from the grammar mistakes. You should watch out for homonyms (there, their and they're for example) and plurals (a lot of the words that were in the plural had apostrophes and they shouldn't). There were also some mistakes in the character's names but the story is interesting.

Fugal