Twilight's Very Unusual Night Out

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Starlight Nova

Starlight Nova #1 · Apr 16th, 2022 · 2 · 2 · Chapter 1-The Sex Spell Test Experiment ·

Can I please get a complete list of the fetishes in this story?

MysticSkies115

MysticSkies115 #2 · Apr 16th, 2022 · · 2 · Chapter 1-The Sex Spell Test Experiment ·

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yes Starlight! The story will be updated with the list of fetishes in the Long Description.

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MysticSkies115 #3 · Apr 16th, 2022 · · 2 · Chapter 1-The Sex Spell Test Experiment ·

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The main description has been updated with the list of fetishes near the bottom.

rakhen

rakhen #4 · Apr 16th, 2022 · 3 · 3 · Chapter 1-The Sex Spell Test Experiment ·

Really want to see impregnation and pregnancy in story

Tirimsil

Tirimsil #5 · Apr 16th, 2022 · 1 · 2 · Chapter 1-The Sex Spell Test Experiment ·

Interesting premise, but it needs some editing for coherence.

The Wind King

The Wind King #6 · Apr 16th, 2022 · 3 · 1 · Chapter 1-The Sex Spell Test Experiment ·

So the premise intrigues me, but just from the synopsis I know I won't be able to read this due to a serious need for editing.

If you would like editing help just send me a DM, and I'll leave you a edited version of the sysnopsis.

Twilight Sparkle is (1) working on a spell that gives her the ability to have sex with whoever stands in her way! (2) And it gives her the ability to have sex for a very long time!(3) The spell works but with a side effect, The Stallion's Cum (4) that her body takes in, alters her "Assets" and makes them bigger and makes her sexual state get even higher. This is a Clopfic with a little bit of fetish content such as Breast and Ass Expansion scenes.

1) - Well she's either finished working on it, or the story is entirely about her working on the spell and no time for raunhy randy fun, so this bit should be in past tense.

2) - "Whoever stands in her way" ... Is Twilight a supervillain now? Also the ability to have sex isn't something that she needs a spell for.

3) - This is a spell effect, but it's also a sentence fragment.

4) - Unneccessary capitalisations.

5) - Why are you playing coy here? We know what the story is about.

6) - And this is just poorly constructed.

After years of being ignored for her friends, unfavourable comparisons to her fellow princesses, and unwanted advances from sychophantic nobles Twilight Sparkle has finally had enough of being "The Virgin Princess". The lavender alicorn of magic tweaking an old spell designed to make her irresistable to any stallion that she wants to suit her needs and help her leave behind her previous nerdy, frumpy, unnatractive body for something closer to the Goddess of Magic she's supposed to be.
What she's not aware of however are the side effects, changing her body has cumulative effects on her mind. With each stallion she takes, the changes to her body grow larger and her desires grow higher.
The question then is, when will big enough be enough to satisfy the growing goddess?

Hope you enjoy it!

MysticSkies115

MysticSkies115 #7 · Apr 16th, 2022 · · 2 · Chapter 1-The Sex Spell Test Experiment ·

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Yea i agree! But i dropped outta high school when i was 22 years old and had been writing fanfics since 07 but quit writing in 08 due to my fanfic being lost.

MysticSkies115

MysticSkies115 #8 · Apr 16th, 2022 · 1 · 3 · Chapter 1-The Sex Spell Test Experiment ·

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Rakhen, That's not gonna happen in this story. I may do Impregnations/ Pregnancy in some of my work but just not this one.

MysticSkies115

MysticSkies115 #9 · Apr 16th, 2022 · · 2 · Chapter 1-The Sex Spell Test Experiment ·

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Thanks Trimisil, but whats coherence? Never heard that before.

PlieRow666

PlieRow666 #10 · Jun 20th, 2022 · · · Chapter 2-Doc Hooves? Twilight Goes Amazon!(Part 1) ·

Why’d is this chapter look like it short and half done?

MysticSkies115

MysticSkies115 #11 · Jun 23rd, 2022 · · · Chapter 2-Doc Hooves? Twilight Goes Amazon!(Part 1) ·

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Cuz I accidentally hit the publish chapter button. My bad

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