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Rush 1633665

Joined June 2012
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    Rush's Stories (16)

    • Two Meatbags And A Robot In Equestria
      After a nasty encounter with Space Pirates, Fry, Leela and Bender ended up bumping into a certain Draconequus, whom sent them on a crash landing course to Equestria and to land them in the middle of the Everfree Forest.

      18,673 words · 784 views · 54 likes · 1 dislikes
    • Bendcord
      Much to Bender's dislike Discord turns Bender into a Pony and sends him to Equestria.
      4,409 words · 821 views · 19 likes · 2 dislikes
    • Rainbow Dash Fires Lightning At Bender
      Bender falls to sleep to wake up in Equestria, and does something that annoys a certain Pegasus.
      1,666 words · 806 views · 29 likes · 5 dislikes
    • Pinkie Pie Vs Tap
      Pinkie Pie struggles to turn off the tap. How long can her patience hold out before she snaps?
      2,210 words · 328 views · 8 likes · 0 dislikes
    • The Day Equestria Stood Stupid
      3,361 words · 311 views · 13 likes · 2 dislikes
    • Pinkie City
      5,417 words · 710 views · 30 likes · 10 dislikes
    • Fear The Pinkie Pie
      1,190 words · 482 views · 11 likes · 2 dislikes
    • Magical Shiny Land
      7,783 words · 822 views · 20 likes · 9 dislikes
    • The Day Equestria Was Bent
      1,918 words · 673 views · 23 likes · 15 dislikes
    • The Monster Inside
      1,179 words · 642 views · 9 likes · 4 dislikes

    A tear in the universe opens with strange brains flying out, which make everyone stupid.

    Teen Rated: For being a little bit dark in places.

    Sorry for the lame promo picture, but I couldn't get anything else, since I can't draw very well.

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    Note: What's it a crossover with?

    Minor spoiler detail Futurama.

    First Published
    16th Sep 2012
    Last Modified
    16th Sep 2012

    Comments ( 13 )

    #1 · 35w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Could you dumb the story down a little? I don't think i'll be able to understand this. Hurrr durrr :derpytongue2:

    #2 · 35w, 4d ago · · ·
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    It's a cross over with Transformers, right?

    #3 · 35w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I didn't read this, but it's Futurama. Am I right? :rainbowlaugh:

    #4 · 35w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1283701

    Yes. Like the other nine or so fan fictions of mines.

    If you do read it, I hope you don't think it's too bad.

    By the way it's "Futurama" not Futurerama.

    #5 · 35w, 4d ago · · ·
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    #6 · 35w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Well I can say it was entertaining, and mildly funny. I do like Futurama. :pinkiehappy:

    There are quite a few sentences structured weird, grammar issues, and you should get more detailed with it. I don't bash people's creativity, but if you want it to be great get really creative, man. Just my opinion. I have read worse, but this could be better. :twilightsmile:

    #7 · 35w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1283804

    Well I can say it was entertaining, and mildly funny. I do like Futurerama.

    Well that's the least I can hope for, it's still good.

    There are quite a few sentences structured weird, grammar issues, and you should get more detailed with it.

    Yeah, I should thrown in more details, maybe I'll send it to editors. Grammar issues? From stupidified Ponies or non-stupidified Ponies. Because some stupidified Ponies can barely speak like Pinkie Pie.

    I don't bash people's creativity, but if you want it to be great get really creative, man. Just my opinion. I have read worse, but this could be better.

    Hmm originality is important. But also other better MLP Fan Fiction writers than me using the Brain Spawn invade to Equestria I'd like to see.

    I'd love to see other fan fiction writers own version of this.

    Perhaps called it: The Why OF Derpy XD (Better MLP Fan Fiction writer you can take that title.)

    #8 · 35w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Eh, no offense, but it didn't seem like you put much effort into it, and editors will only edit a story if it looks like the writer really attempted to make the story great.

    The best advice I can give when you write. Read it, and look at the areas where your story lacking. Details, make sure the verbs stay in the same tense, punctuation, and repetition.  Too much repeating of words can be annoying, run-on sentences, and fragments. any oddities

    Also, read your story out loud. If you do that you'll definitely hear what's wrong with the each sentence.

    I am not the best person to ask about writing. I have decent stories, but they could be a lot better. There are a lot websites, or writers who will probably help you. :twilightsmile:

    #9 · 35w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Yikes. Um. Better luck next time. Derpy meeting the big brain was word for word the Futurama episode, in parts. Just..no.

    #10 · 35w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1289590

    Well then go write your own version then, I'm sure it'll be better than mine. Or get some other competent writer to do so.

    Fry
    #11 · 31w, 5d ago · · ·
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    :D Great job

    P.S. Look forward for a Queen Chrysalis Fic callled : ''Take my life,please!''

    #12 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1429102

    Thanks Fry!

    Your fan fiction sounds good.

    Fry
    #13 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1439977 It sure will ;)

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